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Comprendre mes erreurs
Message de sengirs posté le 13-11-2005 à 20:13:23 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour a tous,
j'aurais besoin que l'on me montre les erreurs que j'ai commises lors de la redaction de ce devoir d'anglais. Merci à tous!!
dear uncle,
I write to you to have share of my projects concerning
my future... 4 days ago, I received my first wages. You cannot imagine
my pride! but that also made me become aware of the hard reality of
the life. I hope not to exert the trade of deliveryman too a long time
because I very badly support the attitude of certain people towards
me. Indeed, the majority of people, in more of being skinflints,
behave in a hateful way in front of me. I think soon of leaving
Ireland in order to settle in the United States, with an aim of
finding an employment more interesting and perhaps a better life... I
would like to become bank clerk but I do not know if I of it would be
able. If that is possible, could I live a few days at home time that I
find a job? But if that is not possible, I would find another
solution. Do not worry you! In any event, it is necessary that I
remain in Ireland a few months in order to gain enough money for the
travel . I already started to save! That made 3 months that I think of
it. And it is true that America makes me dream! I read in many
magazines which the landscapes are splendid there and which the
population is prosperous. I am so much exity with the idea to leave my
native land. I await impatiently your answer. I hope that you and mary
are well. Goodbye!
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Edité par bridg le 13-11-2005 20:16
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Message de sengirs posté le 13-11-2005 à 20:13:23 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour a tous,
j'aurais besoin que l'on me montre les erreurs que j'ai commises lors de la redaction de ce devoir d'anglais. Merci à tous!!
dear uncle,
I write to you to have share of my projects concerning
my future... 4 days ago, I received my first wages. You cannot imagine
my pride! but that also made me become aware of the hard reality of
the life. I hope not to exert the trade of deliveryman too a long time
because I very badly support the attitude of certain people towards
me. Indeed, the majority of people, in more of being skinflints,
behave in a hateful way in front of me. I think soon of leaving
Ireland in order to settle in the United States, with an aim of
finding an employment more interesting and perhaps a better life... I
would like to become bank clerk but I do not know if I of it would be
able. If that is possible, could I live a few days at home time that I
find a job? But if that is not possible, I would find another
solution. Do not worry you! In any event, it is necessary that I
remain in Ireland a few months in order to gain enough money for the
travel . I already started to save! That made 3 months that I think of
it. And it is true that America makes me dream! I read in many
magazines which the landscapes are splendid there and which the
population is prosperous. I am so much exity with the idea to leave my
native land. I await impatiently your answer. I hope that you and mary
are well. Goodbye!
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Edité par bridg le 13-11-2005 20:16
titre
Réponse: Comprendre mes erreurs de gg57gg, postée le 13-11-2005 à 21:31:20 (S | E)
Bonjour !
Voilà les erreurs comises :
- I hope not to exert the trade of deliveryman too a long time
: 1° deliveryman ???
- I already started to save! ???
- That made 3 months that I think of it. And it is true that America makes me dream! I read in many
magazines which the landscapes are splendid there and which the
population is prosperous.
Ici il y a
Aussi " I read in many magazines which the landscapes are splendid there and which the population is prosperous"
la phrase est incomplète à la fin en partie par le manque de précision et l'insertion des quelques mots.
Attention : Je n'
Voilà bon j'ai loupé des choses mais je reviendrai
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Edité par bridg le 13-11-2005 21:33
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Réponse: Comprendre mes erreurs de sengirs, postée le 13-11-2005 à 21:52:57 (S | E)
bonjour,
je n'ai pas encore eu ma note...
Je n'ai pas bien compris pour la phrase " I already have to save...
mais je vous remercie quand même beaucoup!!!
a+
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Edité par lucile83 le 14-11-2005 09:12
Réponse: Comprendre mes erreurs de gg57gg, postée le 13-11-2005 à 21:57:48 (S | E)
Oui, la phrase de départ donc la vôtre ne voulait rien dire donc je l'ai changée afin d'obtenir une phrase plus correcte au niveau grammaire anglaise, ce si dit
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Edité par lucile83 le 14-11-2005 09:13
Pas de majuscules ici !