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Message de zviolette posté le 16-12-2011 à 14:51:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous me corriger cet email s'il vous plaît ? J'ai fait du mieux que je pouvais
J'ai enlevé quelques informations personnelles. C'est un email assez formel, donc si certaines formes ne conviennent pas, n'hésitez pas.
d'avance 
Hello,
My name is Zoe, i’m fifteen. I have a little bit special request… I would want to study for my twelfth grade at (nom de l'école). For that, I really would like to find a (nom de l'école)’s student family who could accomodate me during this year, for a rent or why not, for an exchange with the student who could come to France, live in my family and study in my high school (i’m in the (nom de mon école), a quiete prestigious private school).
I love travelling, and I already was in (pays) with my parents in 2006 during a month and in 2010 for two weeks.
I love NY, and this exchange would be, for me and my exchange partner, a real advantage, to launch us into the working world, and un unique and rewarding experience.
I’m active, serious and determined. I've been learning English for 4 years, in an « anglais intensif » class. I’m B1 in Common European Framework of Reference for Languages, that is in the middle of the categorization.
Do you agree to admit me, a French Student into you school only for the 2013/2014 year, as part of an exchange with a student in your school ?
If you do, could you appeal to students, preferably a girl, who have the same age as me and who could be interested in an exchange, and who the family of would be happy with introducing me their surroundings ?
I know that the seats in (nom de l'école) are hard to get, but study in the Big Apple is my dream, and i would do almost everything to achieve it.
I'm waiting for you answers.
Thanks a lot,
Cordially,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2011 16:17
Forum + format standard.
Message de zviolette posté le 16-12-2011 à 14:51:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous me corriger cet email s'il vous plaît ? J'ai fait du mieux que je pouvais
J'ai enlevé quelques informations personnelles. C'est un email assez formel, donc si certaines formes ne conviennent pas, n'hésitez pas. d'avance Hello,
My name is Zoe, i’m fifteen. I have a little bit special request… I would want to study for my twelfth grade at (nom de l'école). For that, I really would like to find a (nom de l'école)’s student family who could accomodate me during this year, for a rent or why not, for an exchange with the student who could come to France, live in my family and study in my high school (i’m in the (nom de mon école), a quiete prestigious private school).
I love travelling, and I already was in (pays) with my parents in 2006 during a month and in 2010 for two weeks.
I love NY, and this exchange would be, for me and my exchange partner, a real advantage, to launch us into the working world, and un unique and rewarding experience.
I’m active, serious and determined. I've been learning English for 4 years, in an « anglais intensif » class. I’m B1 in Common European Framework of Reference for Languages, that is in the middle of the categorization.
Do you agree to admit me, a French Student into you school only for the 2013/2014 year, as part of an exchange with a student in your school ?
If you do, could you appeal to students, preferably a girl, who have the same age as me and who could be interested in an exchange, and who the family of would be happy with introducing me their surroundings ?
I know that the seats in (nom de l'école) are hard to get, but study in the Big Apple is my dream, and i would do almost everything to achieve it.
I'm waiting for you answers.
Thanks a lot,
Cordially,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-12-2011 16:17
Forum + format standard.
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