Description /une personne

Description /une personne
Message de shusie posté le 27-03-2013 à 16:12:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !

J'ai un devoir à faire en faite je dois faire un petit texte en parlant d'une personne que j'admire j'ai donc choisi ma mère, et ce texte je dois le mettre au prétérit.
J'aurais besoin de votre aide pour corriger mes fautes et voir si mon texte est correctement mis au prétérit.

I'm went to spoke to you of a person very important in my life.
She is my mom.
She is my soul, she is my heart, and she is my happiness.
She is am that i had of dearer to the world.
When she was born, She was browned hair
My Mom is small, as me!
She is ever here for me and she will always be me.
I shall made anything for her as she would made anything for me
His personality took like in mine.
She always want to knew where i am when i leave the house.
But i love her, she is my mom

Merci

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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2013 18:02

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Réponse: Description /une personne de gerondif, postée le 27-03-2013 à 16:49:45 (S | E)
Hello,

beaucoup de mélanges de temps et de français traduit;
les erreurs sont en bleu.

I'm went to spoke to you of a person very important in my life.
She is my mom.
She is my soul, she is my heart, and she is my happiness.
She is am that i had of dearer to the world.
When she was born, She was browned hair
My Mom is small, as me!
She is ever here for me and she will always be * *(2 mots) me.
I shall made anything for her as she would made anything for me
His personality took like in mine.(look like ressembler)
She always want(le s!!) to knew where i am when i leave the house.
But i love her, she is my mom
I (je)est toujours en majuscules même en milieu de phrase.

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Réponse: Description /une personne de shusie, postée le 27-03-2013 à 17:02:51 (S | E)
J'ai réussi à corriger quelques fautes mais pas toutes... je ne vois pas quoi mettre à la place

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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2013 18:06

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Réponse: Description /une personne de shusie, postée le 27-03-2013 à 17:03:52 (S | E)
De plus le texte doit être au prétérit...

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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2013 18:07

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Réponse: Description /une personne de notrepere, postée le 27-03-2013 à 17:29:42 (S | E)
Bonjour

De plus le texte doit être au prétérit...
Oui, mais quelques phrases n'ont aucun sens au prétérit.
She is my mom. She was my mom. Elle n'est plus ta mère ?

Merci de poster encore votre texte corrigé pour que l'on puisse vérifier vos réponses. We're not just going to give you all of the correct answers. That would be called "cheating" (tricher)

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Réponse: Description /une personne de shusie, postée le 27-03-2013 à 17:32:28 (S | E)
Hello

I'm want to speak to you of a person very important in my life.
She is my mom.
She is my soul, she is my heart, and she is my happiness.
She is am that i had of dearer to the world.
When she was born, She was brown hair
My Mom is small, as me!
She is ever here for me and she will always be me.
I shall make anything for her as she would make anything for me
Her personality took like in mine.
She always wants to know where I am when I leave the house.
But i love her, she is my mom

Est-ce que c'est mieux?

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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2013 18:26

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Réponse: Description /une personne de gerondif, postée le 27-03-2013 à 18:27:09 (S | E)
Hello,
I'm want to speak to you of a person very important in my life.
She is my mom.
She is my soul, she is my heart, and she is my happiness.
She is am what i had of dearer to the world.
When she was born, She was brown hair (avoir) (elle est née avec des cheveux?)
My Mom is small, as me!(as = en tant que like = comme)
She is ever here for me and she will always be here for me.
(trouvez autre chose pour toujours (a***ys)
I shall make(mauvais verbe faire (do) ou fabriquer (make)?) anything for her as she would make anything for me
Her personality took like in mine. ressembler = LOOK like)(essayez la structure: nous avons la même personnalité)
She always wants to know where I am when I leave the house.
But i love her, she is my mom.

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Réponse: Description /une personne de djohrahocine, postée le 27-03-2013 à 18:36:12 (S | E)
Hello,
xxxx
Notrepere a pafaitement raison,il y a des phrases qui n'ont aucun sens au prétérit(impossible de les mettre au prétérit).Quant à votre correction, il y a encore quelques erreurs, concentrez-vous bien et revoyez la correction de gerondif.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2013 19:32

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Réponse: Description /une personne de shusie, postée le 27-03-2013 à 18:39:39 (S | E)
Je viens de remarquer comme cétait au preterit donc le passer je vais plutot parler de ma grand mère qui est décéder

I'm want to speak to you of a person very important in my life.
She was my grandmother.
She was my soul, she was my heart, and she was my happiness.
She was am that i have of dearer to the world.
My grandmother was small, as me!
She was ever here for me.
I shall make anything for her
Her personality look like in mine.
She was like my mother
I love him so, she was my grandmother

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Réponse: Description /une personne de djohrahocine, postée le 27-03-2013 à 18:53:44 (S | E)
Revoyez la correction de Gerondif!

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Réponse: Description /une personne de shusie, postée le 27-03-2013 à 18:58:21 (S | E)
I'm want to speak to you of a person very important in my life.
She is my grandmother.
She was my soul, she was my heart, and she was my happiness.
She was what I had of dearer to the world.
My grandmother was small, like me!
She was ever here for me.
I shall make anything for her.
Her personality look like in mine.
She was like my mother
I love him so, she was my grandmother

Le reste je ne vois toujours pas quoi mettre...

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