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Message de sarilou posté le 25-04-2017 à 19:11:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger mon oral sur Mythes et héros s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses
Intro: I'm going to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or muscled but at least intelligent. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from Greek and Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of the real life and it often deals the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about firefighters on the eleventh September.
This document deals with the topic of what really is a hero. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does that for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes the life of people. The last one had given his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravoure, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost him life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain.. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the version of the officer. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanize Jack. He was compared with an animal sent to the slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is a pacifist, an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a listening which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard the sister of one of the firefighters who died into the incendiary. She feared of the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravoure.
To conclude we can say that it didn’t exist a perfect hero but there is different kind. It can be an old/young person, strong/weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend something like senior and soldiers.
Thank you for your listening.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-04-2017 22:45
Message de sarilou posté le 25-04-2017 à 19:11:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger mon oral sur Mythes et héros s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses
Intro: I'm going to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or muscled but at least intelligent. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from Greek and Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of the real life and it often deals the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about firefighters on the eleventh September.
This document deals with the topic of what really is a hero. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does that for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes the life of people. The last one had given his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravoure, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost him life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain.. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the version of the officer. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanize Jack. He was compared with an animal sent to the slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is a pacifist, an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a listening which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard the sister of one of the firefighters who died into the incendiary. She feared of the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravoure.
To conclude we can say that it didn’t exist a perfect hero but there is different kind. It can be an old/young person, strong/weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend something like senior and soldiers.
Thank you for your listening.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-04-2017 22:45
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de laure95, postée le 26-04-2017 à 10:26:57 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Intro: it often deals (il manque une préposition)the story of a hero.
- what really is a hero: ordre des mots.
- The last one had given (mettre au preterit)his entire life
- he lost him (ce n'est pas le possessif) life for a good cause.
- In this poem we (can) see that
- it also dehumanize (faute de conjugaison) Jack.
- bravoure: mot français.
- there is different kind: mettre tout au pluriel.
- like (article)senior and soldiers.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de here4u, postée le 26-04-2017 à 10:54:29 (S | E)
Hello !
Souligné = maladroit! pas idiomatique...
Intro: I'm going to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or muscled/brawny/ strong-armed but at least
intelligent.(Looks as if you established a hierarchy here...) A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from X Greek and/or Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of the real life and it often deals XXXX the story of a hero(revoir la structure de la phrase trop tortueuse ...). Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about NYC firefighters (NYFD) on the eleventh OF September.This document deals with the topic of what really is a hero. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one,(can't you, at least, name them?) I think he is definitely not a hero. He does that(what?) for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes the life of people. The last one
had given his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravoure, so I consider him as a hero. = corriger une énigme ... Je n'ai pas deviné de qui il était question ! The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost him life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain.. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the version of the officer. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanize Jack. He was compared with an animal sent to the slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is a pacifist= noun ! you want an adjective! , an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a listening which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard the sister of one of the firefighters who died into the incendiary. She feared of the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them
to die for others and that is another kind of bravoure.To conclude we can say that it didn’t exist a perfect hero but there is different kind. It can be an old/OR young person, strong/ XXweak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend something like senior and soldiers.
Thank you for your listening.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de sarilou, postée le 26-04-2017 à 17:23:19 (S | E)
Bonsoir merci beaucoup à vous deux! Est-ce mieux ainsi?
Intro: I'm would like to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or brawny but at least intelligent and compassionate, generous. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from the Greek or Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of the real life and it often deals with the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about NYC firefighters on the eleventh of September.
This document deals with the topic of what really a hero is. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does sport for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes people’s life. The senior gave his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravery, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost his life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the officer’s version. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we can see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanizes Jack. He was compared to an animal sent to a slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is pacifism, an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a recording which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard one of the firefighter’s sister who died into the fire. She feared the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravery.
To conclude we can say that a perfect hero doesn’t exist but there are different kinds. He can be an old or young person, strong or weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend value like the senior and the soldiers.
Thank you for your listening.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de here4u, postée le 26-04-2017 à 18:37:55 (S | E)
Hello !
Intro: I'm would like to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or brawny but at least(rather?) intelligent, and compassionate, and generous. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from the Greek or Latin legendS , which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of the real life and it often deals with the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In XXX first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about NYC firefighters on the eleventh of September.
This document deals with the topic of what really a hero is. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does sportS for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes people’s life. The senior gave his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravery, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on(trop familier) the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost his life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the officer’s version. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we can see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanizes Jack. He was compared to an animal sent to a slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is pacifism,another noun ;..; you still want n adjective!) an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a recording which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard one of the firefighter’s sister who died into the fire. She feared the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravery.
To conclude we can say that a perfect hero doesn’t exist but there are different kinds. He can be an old or young person, strong or weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend valueS likeas the senior and the soldiers had done..
Thank you for your listening.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de sarilou, postée le 26-04-2017 à 19:52:00 (S | E)
Merci encore
Intro: I (c’était une faute de frappe ^^) would like to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or brawny but rather intelligent, compassionate and generous. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from a Greek or Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of real life and it often deals with the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about NYC firefighters on the eleventh of September.
This document deals with the topic of what is really a hero. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does sport for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes people’s life (je ne comprends ce que je dois mettre là). The senior gave his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravery, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost his life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the officer’s version. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we can see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanizes Jack. He was compared to an animal sent to slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is pacific, an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a recording which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard one of the firefighter’s sister who died into the fire. She feared the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravery.
To conclude we can say that a perfect hero doesn’t exist but there are different kinds. He can be an old or young person, strong or weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend value as the senior and the soldiers had done.
Thank you for your listening.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de laure95, postée le 27-04-2017 à 18:11:39 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
it’s not something that changes people’s life (je ne comprends ce que je dois mettre là): tu dois mettre le mot "life" au pluriel.
Réponse : Myths and heroes/aide de sarilou, postée le 28-04-2017 à 19:26:35 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide. Est-ce que là c'est bon?
Intro: I would like to talk about myths and heroes. First of all, I would like to give a definition of both notions: for me a hero is someone who has done something incredible to defend a value or an idea. He or she is not necessarily strong or brawny but rather intelligent, compassionate and generous. A myth is a real or imaginary story that is ensued from a Greek or Latin legend which is made to explain the mysterious aspects of real life and it often deals with the story of a hero. Some may have factual origins, while others are completely fictional. So we can wonder who can be considered as a hero. In first place I will talk about a cartoon which represents different kinds of heroes then I would like to talk about a poem: « The hero » by Siegfried SASSOON and finally about NYC firefighters on the eleventh of September.
This document deals with the topic of what is really a hero. We can see a superhero, an athlete and a senior. I think the first one can be defined as a hero because he uses his own powers to save others. Regarding the second one, I think he is definitely not a hero. He does sport for himself and maybe his family will be proud of him but it’s not something that changes people’s lives. The senior gave his entire life maybe to defend his country and that is a big act of bravery, so I consider him as a hero.
The second document is a poem which was written by Siegfried SASSOON during the First World War. It gets a handle on the story of Jack’s mother who is reading a letter given by an Officer. She has just learnt the death of her son who was a soldier. She is first at a loss, devastated, but at the same time she is proud of her son. In the second stanza the Officer appears. He lies about Jack. He said he was a “glorious boy” only to comfort his mother. She lives her life knowing that her son was a good soldier and he lost his life for a good cause. Here the officer feels satisfied because Jack’s mother is proud of her son and because he eases her pain. But in the third and last stanza, the author gives us the officer’s version. We learn that Jack was a coward, an unmanly soldier. He wanted to escape from the war.
In this poem we can see that Jack was not really a hero but it also dehumanizes Jack. He was compared to an animal sent to slaughter and then reduced to “small bits”. It denounces the horror of the war; this poem is pacific, an anti-war poem.
The third and last document I have chosen is a recording which handles the topic of firefighters on the eleventh of September two thousand and one. They gave their lives to save people during the terrorist attacks. We heard one of the firefighter’s sister who died into the fire. She feared the unknown, she was heartbroken. She said all was blurry.
This kind of person can also be considered as a big hero. It didn’t bother them to die for others and that is another kind of bravery.
To conclude we can say that a perfect hero doesn’t exist but there are different kinds. He can be an old or young person, strong or weak in brief he or she must do something out of the ordinary to save or defend value as the senior and the soldiers had done.
Thank you for your listening.
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