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Message de topeka posté le 08-03-2006 à 11:24:24 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour,
Je dois envoyer un mail à une dame anglaise. J'ai écris moi -même avec mes faibles moyens. Quelqu'un pourrait-il me corriger s'il vous plait? Merci d'avance

Hello Lyn,
How are you? Do you remember me? I'm Thibault's mother. Thibault is the Belgian student who lived at your home in september 2004 for 3 monthes. Thibault doesn't give you news. You know the children, they are a little negligent!
As you know when he was going home he tried to enter at army. But it was no possible because he had allergies. So, in september he was beginning study "technology of computer science". But he doesn't like very well.
Now this is his brother who is going to Bournemouth for 6 weeks at summer (15 July up to 26 August). Do you remember him? He was with my parents and me when we came at Bournemouth. This is a good boy too but a little shy. I have asked at the institution who looks for the families that he goes at your home because i know that he'll be good at you. I hope that it is still possible.
So give me news please.
Bye for now,
Corinne

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Edité par bridg le 08-03-2006 16:21
Lettre => divers

Réponse: correction d'une lettre de cat-marylou, postée le 08-03-2006 à 11:47:57 (S | E)
Hello Lyn,
How are you? Do you remember me? I'm Thibault's mother. Thibault is the Belgian student Who lived with you in September 2004 for 3 months. Thibault didn't give you any news. But You know "boys will be boys", they are a little negligent!
As you know when he came back home he tried to enter the army. But it was not possible because he had allergies. So, in September he began news studies: "IT skills". But he doesn't like it very much.
Now this is his brother's turn to go to Bournemouth for 6 weeks in summer (from 15th July up to 26th August). Do you remember him? He was with my parents and myself when we visited Bournemouth. He is a good boy too but a little shy. I asked the institution that looks for families if he could go to your place because I know that he'll be good to you. I hope that it is still possible.
So could youplease give news about it?
Bye for now.

Réponse: correction d'une lettre de jean31, postée le 08-03-2006 à 12:10:46 (S | E)
Bonjour topeka,

Ce n'est pas si mal et je peux t'assurer que j'ai lu bien pire.
Mes interventions sont signalées en majuscules.

Hello Lyn,

How are you? Do you remember me? I am Thibault's mother. Thibault is the Belgian student who STAYED at your home in September (majuscule) 2004 for 3 montHS. I KNOW YOU HAVEN'T HEARD OF HIM. You know HOW children ARE, they are CARELESS!
As you know, when he CAME BACK home, he tried to JOIN the army. But it was noT possible because he had allergies. So he STARTED studyING computer science in September. But he doesn't like IT very MUCH.
Now, it's his brother'S TURN TO GO to Bournemouth WHERE HE WILL BE STAYING for 6 weeks NEXT Summer (FROM July 15 up to August 26). Do you remember him TOO? He was with my parents and me when we came TO Bournemouth. HE is a good boy too but a little shy. I have asked (0) the Institution who look (pluriel préférable) for the HOST families TO PLACE HIM WITH YOU because I know he will be good WITH you.
I hope THIS is still possible.
PLEASE LET ME KNOW AS SOON AS YOU CAN.
I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU.
BEST REGARDS,

Corinne

Et bonne chance au fiston.
Cordialement,
Jean

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Modifié par jean31 le 08-03-2006 12:11

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