Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais
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Message de benedicte posté le 09-03-2006 à 23:04:16 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
c'est un sujet de rédaction:
"est ce qu'on est capable de faire tout pour réussir son examen?
Indeed it is more and more important to pass our exams to succeed in our future life.It is a must to do as well as possible in order to achieve this goal. We need to learn very well our lesson : to make a lot of exercises,to organise and to not hesitate to spend more time working than on hobbies.If above is not enough,we can ask some help possible from our relatives or take private lessons. However we can not reach a good balance in our life when spending all your time working. It's neccessary to take some rest sleep,enough time have some dwitch frend and practise distraction some sport are also key elements for success.Sometimes the failure can bring to discourage ourselves. and could bring the temptation of cheating.Of course if we are honest persons, this idea must disappear by itself.
Then after all perseverance in studying in an efficicient way should allow us to manage to obtain the diplomas which are neccessary to enter the professional life.
merci d'avance.
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Edité par emy64 le 09-03-2006 23:14
=> forum principal
Ceci est votre travail personnel et vous demandez de l'aide aux membres,il ne s'agit pas d'un exercice que vous proposez aux autres membres et dont vous detenez la correction.
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Message de benedicte posté le 09-03-2006 à 23:04:16 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
c'est un sujet de rédaction:
"est ce qu'on est capable de faire tout pour réussir son examen?
Indeed it is more and more important to pass our exams to succeed in our future life.It is a must to do as well as possible in order to achieve this goal. We need to learn very well our lesson : to make a lot of exercises,to organise and to not hesitate to spend more time working than on hobbies.If above is not enough,we can ask some help possible from our relatives or take private lessons. However we can not reach a good balance in our life when spending all your time working. It's neccessary to take some rest sleep,enough time have some dwitch frend and practise distraction some sport are also key elements for success.Sometimes the failure can bring to discourage ourselves. and could bring the temptation of cheating.Of course if we are honest persons, this idea must disappear by itself.
Then after all perseverance in studying in an efficicient way should allow us to manage to obtain the diplomas which are neccessary to enter the professional life.
merci d'avance.
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Edité par emy64 le 09-03-2006 23:14
=> forum principal
Ceci est votre travail personnel et vous demandez de l'aide aux membres,il ne s'agit pas d'un exercice que vous proposez aux autres membres et dont vous detenez la correction.
+ formules de politesse & majuscules
Réponse: Prêt(e) à tout pour réussir/ Correction de jean31, postée le 10-03-2006 à 17:39:54 (S | E)
Bonjour benedicte,
Quelques petites retouches supplémentaires, signalées en majuscules.
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We need to learn our lesson VERY WELL. ... exercises and (0) not hesitate to spend ...
If WHAT HAS BEEN WRITTEN/SAID BEFORE is not enough, we can ask our relatives FOR some POSSIBLE help (l'adjectif avant le nom) or take private lessons. However we CANNOT (en 1 seul mot) reach a good balance in our life when spending all OUR (pour respecter l'accord) time working. It's necessary (1 seul C) to HAVE some rest, ENOUGH sleep. (nouvelle phrase) SEEING frIends, PRACTISING ENTERTAINING ACTIVITIES, AND sport are also key elements for success. Sometimes (0) failure COULD LEAD US to LOSE HEART and cheat.
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Then, IF WE KEEP ON studying efficientLY, WE should (0) manage to obtain the necessary diplomas to BEGIN OUR WORKING life.
Si tu souhaites des explications ou/et commentaires par mp, just let me know.
I hope this helps.
Réponse: Prêt(e) à tout pour réussir/ Correction de jardin62, postée le 11-03-2006 à 17:30:55 (S | E)
Bonjour.
J'utiliserais - personnellement - 'you' plutôt que 'we' ...
It's indeed more and more important to pass your exams if you want to succeed in your future life and, of course, it's obvious you will have to do your best to reach the goal.
You have to learn your lessons well, to do lots of exercises, to be organized.
No need to say that you will spend more time on your work than at having fun !
If all this isn't enough, you can always ask for help from your relatives if they can do that for you. It's also possible to take private lessons if you can afford them...
However, you can't be in good condition if you spend all your time on your work !
It's essential that you have enough sleep. Relaxing is also vital : see your friends, enjoy yourself, practise a physical activity.
Sometimes failure can lead you to a feeling of discouragement. It can also bring you to being tempted by cheating but of course if you are honest this idea will soon disappear.
After years of efforts and perseverance and efficiency you should at last obtain the diplomas you need to start a professional life.