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The artificial leg/correction
Message de bloupbloup posté le 30-10-2005 à 18:19:14 (S | E | F | I)
bonjour, je voudrais savoir ce que vous pensez de ce texte (surtout sur le plan grammatical). merci d'avance.
In the past, when people lost its leg from the thigh down, they were in disability to walk normally. Their conventional artificial leg allowed them to go at only one speed. So demanding exercices are forbidden to them. Even daily activities seemed as difficult as climbing high mountain.
But, after twenty years of research, engineers elaborate a new artificial leg which contains a microcomputer. It adapt to the movements, indeed the knee can bend freely and more it can adjust to ten different speed. That object are maintenance-free : users must change the battery only once a year and it isn't more expansive that the conventional artificial leg.
So N.W , who had lost her left leg eighteen years ago, discovers the life's simple pleasures thanks to the intelligent artificial leg. Indeed she walks roughly normally, as well she is able to participate to sport as footing or swatch. But above alla, she drives a car which makes easier her daily routine.
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Edité par bridg le 30-10-2005 18:23
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Message de bloupbloup posté le 30-10-2005 à 18:19:14 (S | E | F | I)
bonjour, je voudrais savoir ce que vous pensez de ce texte (surtout sur le plan grammatical). merci d'avance.
In the past, when people lost its leg from the thigh down, they were in disability to walk normally. Their conventional artificial leg allowed them to go at only one speed. So demanding exercices are forbidden to them. Even daily activities seemed as difficult as climbing high mountain.
But, after twenty years of research, engineers elaborate a new artificial leg which contains a microcomputer. It adapt to the movements, indeed the knee can bend freely and more it can adjust to ten different speed. That object are maintenance-free : users must change the battery only once a year and it isn't more expansive that the conventional artificial leg.
So N.W , who had lost her left leg eighteen years ago, discovers the life's simple pleasures thanks to the intelligent artificial leg. Indeed she walks roughly normally, as well she is able to participate to sport as footing or swatch. But above alla, she drives a car which makes easier her daily routine.
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Edité par bridg le 30-10-2005 18:23
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Réponse: The artificial leg/correction de jean31, postée le 30-10-2005 à 19:59:31 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
C'est plus fort que moi, je ne peux pas lire de l'anglais sans en corriger les fautes ...
Signalées en majuscules.
... lost THEIR legS ... they were UNABLE to walk normally.
So demanding exercises WERE forbidden to them.
... as climbing A high mountain.
... engineers HAVE elaborateD a new ...
It adaptS to the movements ...
... and WHAT'S more, it can adjust to the different speedS.
ThIS object IS maintenance-free ...
... more expEnsive thaN ...
... discoverS (0) life (0) simple pleasures ...
Indeed she roughly walks normally, she CAN ALSO participate IN sportS SUCH as RUNNING or SQUASH.
... above all,(0) ... which makes her daily routine easier.
NB : Je n'ai pas fait de commentaires, volontairement. Si tu souhaites des explications, n'hésite pas à revenir sur le sujet.
Bonne fin de dimanche.
Jean
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Edité par traviskidd le 30-10-2005 20:09
Life's simple pleasures. (La vie tient les plaisirs et nous les donne comme cadeau.
)Réponse: The artificial leg/correction de alexgowes, postée le 30-10-2005 à 20:02:36 (S | E)
In the past, when people lost
But, after twenty years of research, engineers have elaborated a new artificial leg which contains a microcomputer. It adapts to the movements, indeed the knee can bend freely and more it can adjust to ten different speeds.
So N.W , who had lost her left leg eighteen years ago,
Réponse: The artificial leg/correction de aimen7, postée le 30-10-2005 à 20:11:59 (S | E)
Hello bloupbloup,
En effet c'est surtout la grammaire et en particulier le temps des verbes qui te pose un problème.
In the past, when people lost
But, after twenty years of research, engineers elaborated a new artificial leg which contains a microcomputer. It adapts to the movements, indeed the knee can bend freely and what's more it can adjust to ten different speeds.
So N.W , who lost(preterite) her left leg eighteen years ago, discovered the simple pleasures of life thanks to the intelligent artificial leg. Indeed she walks almost normally, and she is able to practise sports as footing or swatch??? (SQUASH). But above all, she can drive a car which makes easier her daily routine (which makes her daily routine much easier).
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Edité par aimen7 le 30-10-2005 20:23 Désolée, je n'ai pas fait attention aux corrections qui ont été apportées à ce sujet, le texte m'a intéressé et je me suis mise à corriger sans voir ce qui suivait.
Réponse: The artificial leg/correction de bloupbloup, postée le 31-10-2005 à 11:02:53 (S | E)
merci beaucoup, oui j'ai vraiment du mal avec la grammaire anglaise mais je reconnais que certaines fautes étaient vraiment énormes, j'aurais dû me relire plus attentivement. encore merci
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