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Thème/Strikhovste/correction.
Message de akiko posté le 04-11-2005 à 10:53:05 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde
J'ai eu le texte qui suit à traduire et je voulais savoir si la traduction (qui vient après le texte) est correcte.
Voici le texte en français :
Paul Catrain, l'homme déraciné par la guerre
Paul Catrain est décédé à l'âge de soixante-dix-sept ans, à Strikhovste (Ukraine), le 27 Octobre dernier. Il partit à la guerre en 1939, âgé de vingt ans, et à l'exception d'une permission obtenue en février 1940, ne retrouva la France qu'en février 1993, pour une dizaine de jours. Ce retour, après plus de cinquante ans d'absence, se fit à la faveur d'un reportage de la chaîne câblée Planète. La vie de cet homme simple, ancien ouvrier agricole, né à Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) le 25 Juin 1919, symbolisait bien les soubresauts de la Seconde Guerre mondiale. Fait prisonnier par les Allemands en Alsace, il se fit voler ses papiers d'identité, et séjourna de camp en camp pendant cinq ans, avant de se retrouver à Koenigsberg, en Prusse orientale.
Libéré par les Russes, il fut placé dans un wagon à bestiaux et conduit dans un camp de prisonniers en Ukraine en été 1945. Il y demeura deux mois et refusa la proposition de militaires américains de travailler aux Etats-Unis comme ouvrier. Paul Catrain rencontra alors Maria, une Ukrainienne qui vendait des graines de tournesol, et l'épousa à l'âge de vingt-six ans. Employé dans un kolkhoze, sans enfant, il s'établit à Strikhovste et prit sa retraite en 1979. Ne parlant plus le français depuis le début des années 80, Paul Catrain n'oublia jamais son pays natal qui le considérait comme décédé. Son nom fut inscrit en 1953 sur le monument aux morts de Bois-les-Pargny.
Ses multiples tentatives pour revenir en France furent contrecarrées par les autorités soviétiques. Un de ses courriers parvint finalement, en 1980, à l'ambassade de France à Moscou et fut transmis au maire de Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, qui put en mesurer l'authenticité. Vivant chichement, dans une maison construite de ses mains en Ukraine, Paul Catrain séjourna en France durant l'été 1996, malgré l'avis de son médecin. Il voulait voir une dernière fois les membres de sa famille française et les lieux de son enfance dans l'Aisne.
Après une existence des plus tumultueuses, il s'est éteint paisiblement dans son sommeil.
Voici la traduction que j'en ai fait :
Paul Catrain, the uprooted man by the war.
Paul Catrain was dead at 77 years old, at Strikhovste (Ukraine), the last October 27th. He joined the army in 1939, twenty years old, and except for a have leave in 1940, he found again France only in February in 1993, or about ten days. This return, after more of fifty years away, did it in aid of report of the cable channel "Planète". The life of this natural man, ex agricole worker, born in Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) the June 25th 1919, very symbolized upheavals oh the World War II. He was a POW in Deutsch in Alsace, hid identity papers were stolen and he went camp after camp for 5 years, before find himself in Koenigsberg, in eastern Prussia.
Released by Russians, he was taken in a bestial car and driven in a prisoner's camp in Ukraine during the 1945's summer. He dwelt in two months and he refused the proposition of Americans militaries to work in USA like a worker. Paul Catrain met then Maria, a Ukrainian who sold sunflower's seeds, and he married with at 26 years old. Employed in a kolkhoz, without child, he established in Strikhovste and took his retreat in 1979. Don't speaking French since beginning of the 80's, Paul Catrain ever forget his mother country which considered him like dead. His name was written in 1953 on the war memorial of Bois-les-Pargny.
His several trying to become again in France were thwarted by soviets authorities. One of his letters came finally in 1980 at the French embassy in Moscow and it was passed to the mayor of Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, who could assessed its authenticity. Living niggardly in a house which was built by himself in Ukraine, Paul Catrain lived in France or the 1996's summer, against his doctor's opinion. He wanted see a last time his French family's members and his childhood's places in Aisne.
After very turmoil life, he died peacefully during his sleeping.
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Edité par bridg le 04-11-2005 11:03
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Message de akiko posté le 04-11-2005 à 10:53:05 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde
J'ai eu le texte qui suit à traduire et je voulais savoir si la traduction (qui vient après le texte) est correcte.
Voici le texte en français :
Paul Catrain, l'homme déraciné par la guerre
Paul Catrain est décédé à l'âge de soixante-dix-sept ans, à Strikhovste (Ukraine), le 27 Octobre dernier. Il partit à la guerre en 1939, âgé de vingt ans, et à l'exception d'une permission obtenue en février 1940, ne retrouva la France qu'en février 1993, pour une dizaine de jours. Ce retour, après plus de cinquante ans d'absence, se fit à la faveur d'un reportage de la chaîne câblée Planète. La vie de cet homme simple, ancien ouvrier agricole, né à Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) le 25 Juin 1919, symbolisait bien les soubresauts de la Seconde Guerre mondiale. Fait prisonnier par les Allemands en Alsace, il se fit voler ses papiers d'identité, et séjourna de camp en camp pendant cinq ans, avant de se retrouver à Koenigsberg, en Prusse orientale.
Libéré par les Russes, il fut placé dans un wagon à bestiaux et conduit dans un camp de prisonniers en Ukraine en été 1945. Il y demeura deux mois et refusa la proposition de militaires américains de travailler aux Etats-Unis comme ouvrier. Paul Catrain rencontra alors Maria, une Ukrainienne qui vendait des graines de tournesol, et l'épousa à l'âge de vingt-six ans. Employé dans un kolkhoze, sans enfant, il s'établit à Strikhovste et prit sa retraite en 1979. Ne parlant plus le français depuis le début des années 80, Paul Catrain n'oublia jamais son pays natal qui le considérait comme décédé. Son nom fut inscrit en 1953 sur le monument aux morts de Bois-les-Pargny.
Ses multiples tentatives pour revenir en France furent contrecarrées par les autorités soviétiques. Un de ses courriers parvint finalement, en 1980, à l'ambassade de France à Moscou et fut transmis au maire de Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, qui put en mesurer l'authenticité. Vivant chichement, dans une maison construite de ses mains en Ukraine, Paul Catrain séjourna en France durant l'été 1996, malgré l'avis de son médecin. Il voulait voir une dernière fois les membres de sa famille française et les lieux de son enfance dans l'Aisne.
Après une existence des plus tumultueuses, il s'est éteint paisiblement dans son sommeil.
Voici la traduction que j'en ai fait :
Paul Catrain, the uprooted man by the war.
Paul Catrain was dead at 77 years old, at Strikhovste (Ukraine), the last October 27th. He joined the army in 1939, twenty years old, and except for a have leave in 1940, he found again France only in February in 1993, or about ten days. This return, after more of fifty years away, did it in aid of report of the cable channel "Planète". The life of this natural man, ex agricole worker, born in Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) the June 25th 1919, very symbolized upheavals oh the World War II. He was a POW in Deutsch in Alsace, hid identity papers were stolen and he went camp after camp for 5 years, before find himself in Koenigsberg, in eastern Prussia.
Released by Russians, he was taken in a bestial car and driven in a prisoner's camp in Ukraine during the 1945's summer. He dwelt in two months and he refused the proposition of Americans militaries to work in USA like a worker. Paul Catrain met then Maria, a Ukrainian who sold sunflower's seeds, and he married with at 26 years old. Employed in a kolkhoz, without child, he established in Strikhovste and took his retreat in 1979. Don't speaking French since beginning of the 80's, Paul Catrain ever forget his mother country which considered him like dead. His name was written in 1953 on the war memorial of Bois-les-Pargny.
His several trying to become again in France were thwarted by soviets authorities. One of his letters came finally in 1980 at the French embassy in Moscow and it was passed to the mayor of Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, who could assessed its authenticity. Living niggardly in a house which was built by himself in Ukraine, Paul Catrain lived in France or the 1996's summer, against his doctor's opinion. He wanted see a last time his French family's members and his childhood's places in Aisne.
After very turmoil life, he died peacefully during his sleeping.
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Edité par bridg le 04-11-2005 11:03
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Réponse: Thème de babyscot59, postée le 04-11-2005 à 11:07:43 (S | E)
Paul Catrain, the uprooted man by the war.
Paul Catrain,77, died in Strikhovste (Ukraine), on last October 27th. He joined the army in 1939, aged twenty , and except for leave in 1940, he returned to France only in February in 1993, for a ten day trip. This return, after more than fifty years away, he did it at the occasion of a report of the cable channel "Planète". The life of this natural man, ex farm worker, born in Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) on June 25th 1919, symbolized the upheavals of the World War II. He was a POW in Deutsch in Alsace, had his identity papers stolen and he went from camp to camp for 5 years, before finding himself in Koenigsberg, in eastern Prussia.
Released by The Russian, he was taken in a bestial car and driven in a prisoner's camp in Ukraine during the 1945's summer. He dwelt in two months and he refused the proposition of Americans militaries to work in USA like a worker. Paul Catrain met then Maria, a Ukrainian who sold sunflower's seeds, and he married with at 26 years old. Employed in a kolkhoz, without child, he established in Strikhovste and retired in 1979. Having stopped speaking French since the beginning of the 80's, Paul Catrain never forgot his mother country which considered him like dead. His name was written in 1953 on the war memorial of Bois-les-Pargny.
His several attempts to come back to France were thwarted by soviets authorities. One of his letters finally came in 1980 at the French embassy in Moscow and it was passed to the mayor of Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, who could certify its authenticity. Living niggardly in a house which was built by himself in Ukraine, Paul Catrain lived in France during the 1996's summer, against his doctor's opinion. He wanted to see a last time his French family's members and his childhood's places in Aisne.
After very turmoil life, he died peacefully during his sleep.
Voili voilou
Réponse: Thème/Strikhovste/correction. de ruofei, postée le 04-11-2005 à 17:02:09 (S | E)
Bonjour,
D'autres choses qu'il reste encore à corriger à mon avis (lettres majuscules)
Paul Catrain died at the age of 77, at/in Strikhovste (Ukrania), on last October the 27th. He (joined the army) went on war in 1939 when he was 20. Except for a leave in 1940, he got back to France only in February 1993, for ten days or so. This return, after more than fifty years away/abroad, was made possible by a report on the cable channel "Planète". The life of this modest man, former ranch hand, born in Bois-les-Pargny (Aisne) on June 25th 1919, symbolized World War II's upheavals very well. Held prisoner by the Germans in Alsace, his identity papers were taken away, and he went/stayed from camp to camp for 5 years, before finding himself in Koenigsberg, in eastern Prussia.
Je reviens....
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Edité par ruofei le 04-11-2005 19:02
Changement des majuscules en caractères roses: j'avais oublié la règle n°1 ...limiter l'utilisation des lettres majuscules (en plus, ça rendait mon texte quasiment illisible)
Réponse: Thème/Strikhovste/correction. de ruofei, postée le 04-11-2005 à 17:37:33 (S | E)
Je suis de retour...
Released by the Russians, he was taken into a livestock railcar and driven to a prison(er) camp in UkraNIA during the summer of 1945 . He lived there (for) two months and refused the proposition of/from the American military men/officers to work in the USA a worker. Paul Catrain then met Maria, a Ukranian girl/woman who sold/was selling sunflower's seeds, and married het at the age of 26. Employed in a kolkhoz, childless, he settled down in Strikhovste and retired in 1979. He hadn't spoken French since the early 80's, still never had forgotten his native land/country which considered him as dead. His name was registered in 1953 on the war memorial in in Bois-les-Pargny.
His several attempts to go/come back to France were thwarted by the Soviet authorities. In 1980, one of his letters/mails eventually reached the French Embassy in Moscow and was sent to the mayor of Bois-les-Pargny, Jean Delourme, who could assess its authenticity. Leading a modest life in a hand-made house in Ukrania, Paul Catrain lived in France during the summer of 1996 despite his doctor's opinion. He wanted to see his French relatives and his childhood
After a very bustling life, he died peacefully in his sleeping.
J'espère que ça t'aide...
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Edité par ruofei le 04-11-2005 19:09
idem .
Réponse: Thème/Strikhovste/correction. de akiko, postée le 04-11-2005 à 19:48:02 (S | E)
Je vous remercie infiniment je vais me pencher sur les erreurs que j'ai fait et je vais essayer de ne plus les refaire. Encore une fois merci beaucoup à vous deux.
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Edité par akiko le 04-11-2005 19:49