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About a cartoon( correction)
Message de bastinou posté le 06-11-2005 à 18:46:19 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
J'aurais voulu(s) que quelqu'nn de compétant me corrige mon le devoir que je vais écrire merci
The document I have to comment upon is a cartoon. The scene takes place in the living room of a flat and it show a man hovers the window pane. The cartoon is distinct and the colors are bright. The various element are yelow window ,red curtains orange floor and the man is wearing brown shoes, a blue jean,a green shirt.throw the window pane i can see dark buildings that i deduce he lives in an urban environment.
Oblique lines of the window,curtains,buildings and the posture of the man make people puzzled and give a sensation of confusion.
The man looks astonished judging from that expression I may suppose it is the first time he uses a vacuum cleaner.considering that the man is represented like an ignorant I guess the cartonist wants to tell us that men have to feeling more concern in the housework.the cartoon shows the traditional view that men think doing chores is women work.the cartonist draw it cartoon to make people laught and react on men attitude. I think the cartonist is a girl because of it's a criticize on men behavious.She wants to teaching us a lesson and to warn us that they must change their mind.
I don't approve of the underlying message because of I am convinced that men change since women began to have a working life.My feeling is that number of house hubands increase and it willl not stop
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Edité par bridg le 06-11-2005 19:04
+ titre
ces corrections ne sont pas la correction du contenu du devoirs.
Message de bastinou posté le 06-11-2005 à 18:46:19 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
J'aurais voulu
The document I have to comment upon is a cartoon. The scene takes place in the living room of a flat and it show a man hovers the window pane. The cartoon is distinct and the colors are bright. The various element are yelow window ,red curtains orange floor and the man is wearing brown shoes, a blue jean,a green shirt.throw the window pane i can see dark buildings that i deduce he lives in an urban environment.
Oblique lines of the window,curtains,buildings and the posture of the man make people puzzled and give a sensation of confusion.
The man looks astonished judging from that expression I may suppose it is the first time he uses a vacuum cleaner.considering that the man is represented like an ignorant I guess the cartonist wants to tell us that men have to feeling more concern in the housework.the cartoon shows the traditional view that men think doing chores is women work.the cartonist draw it cartoon to make people laught and react on men attitude. I think the cartonist is a girl because of it's a criticize on men behavious.She wants to teaching us a lesson and to warn us that they must change their mind.
I don't approve of the underlying message because of I am convinced that men change since women began to have a working life.My feeling is that number of house hubands increase and it willl not stop
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Edité par bridg le 06-11-2005 19:04
+ titre
ces corrections ne sont pas la correction du contenu du devoirs.
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de bastinou, postée le 06-11-2005 à 19:21:25 (S | E)
si vous pouviez corriger le contenu je ne suis pas contre
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Edité par joy813 le 06-11-2005 23:50
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de shamrock, postée le 06-11-2005 à 19:58:29 (S | E)
Bonsoir !
Voilà ce que je proposerais :
The document I have to comment upon is a cartoon. The scene takes place in the living room of a flat and it shows a man hovering the window pane. The cartoon is distinct and the colors are bright. The various elements are a yellow window ,red curtains, an orange floor. The man is wearing brown shoes, blue jeans,a green shirt. Through the window pane I can see dark buildings so that I can deduce that he lives in an urban environment.
The Oblique lines of the window,curtains,buildings and the posture of the man make people puzzled and give a sensation of confusion.
The man looks astonished judging from his expression so I suppose it is the first time he has used a vacuum cleaner.considering that the man is depicted as an ignorant I guess the cartonist wants to tell us that men have to feel more concerned in housework. The cartoon shows the traditional view according to which men think that doing chores is women's work.the cartonist drew this cartoon to make people laugh and react on men's attitude. I think the cartonist is a girl because the drawer criticizes men's behaviour.She wants to sermonize us and to warn us that they must change their mind.
I don't approve of the underlying message because I am convinced that men have changed since women began working. My feeling is that the number of househusbands is increasing and it willl not stop.
Voilà
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Edité par shamrock le 06-11-2005 20:03
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de shamrock, postée le 06-11-2005 à 20:02:44 (S | E)
J'ai oublié quelque chose. Si tu es censé écrire en anglais britannique, tu dois écrire "colours".
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de jean31, postée le 07-11-2005 à 17:06:41 (S | E)
Coucou
Attention aussi à l'orthographe de cartOOnist.
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de shamrock, postée le 07-11-2005 à 19:57:01 (S | E)
J'étais passée au dessus de cette faute !!!
Bien vu !
Réponse: About a cartoon( correction) de jean31, postée le 07-11-2005 à 22:09:09 (S | E)
Nobody's perfect !