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phrases longues, correctes ou pas?
Message de aaadara posté le 15-01-2006 à 12:23:25 (S | E | F | I)
Mes phrases sont assez emberlificotées, j'ai peur d'avoir fait quelques erreurs.
"Haibin Nguyen wrote it in a letter directed to his parents, in which she thanks them for their courage and their persistence, for all the love and the comprehension that they have given to her, despite of their own problems, to help her to face the difficulties of being a teenager and to have to integrate herself."
"But more than carrying the vietnamese culture wherever she goes, she carry all that her parents have teach to her : love, determination, courage, meaning of home, and all the gratitude she feels about them".
"She explains that she's now "on the verge of being a woman", and that their efforts haven't been vain, since the dream for what they fight all their life is now becoming true : she is ready for college ."
Merci
Message de aaadara posté le 15-01-2006 à 12:23:25 (S | E | F | I)
Mes phrases sont assez emberlificotées, j'ai peur d'avoir fait quelques erreurs.
"Haibin Nguyen wrote it in a letter directed to his parents, in which she thanks them for their courage and their persistence, for all the love and the comprehension that they have given to her, despite of their own problems, to help her to face the difficulties of being a teenager and to have to integrate herself."
"But more than carrying the vietnamese culture wherever she goes, she carry all that her parents have teach to her : love, determination, courage, meaning of home, and all the gratitude she feels about them".
"She explains that she's now "on the verge of being a woman", and that their efforts haven't been vain, since the dream for what they fight all their life is now becoming true : she is ready for college ."
Merci
Réponse: phrases longues, correctes ou pas? de canadiankaty, postée le 16-01-2006 à 03:48:58 (S | E)
I am a native English speaker. I re-wrote your sentences the way a native speaker would write them.
By the way, if I may make a suggestion... you are trying to say too much in one sentence, and you are using too many redundant words.
"Haibin Nguyen wrote a letter to her parents thanking them for all their courage, persistence, love and compassion, and for helping her face the difficulties of being a teenager and having to integrate herself, all while her parents were facing their own problems."
Is Haibin Nguyen a girl or a boy? You kept switching between him, her, etc..
"But she doesn't just carry the Vietnamese culture wherever she goes, she carries all that her parents have taught her : love, determination, courage, the meaning of home, and in turn, gratitude for her parents."
"She explains that she's now "on the verge of being a woman", and that her parents' efforts haven't been in vain, since what they fought for all their lives is now coming true : she is ready for college ."
Write back if you have questions about my suggestions... from Katy from Canada
Réponse: phrases longues, correctes ou pas? de aaadara, postée le 16-01-2006 à 21:16:55 (S | E)
Merci, j'étais sûre de m'être
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