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Message de lola44 posté le 29-03-2006 à 15:14:29 (S | E | F | I)
hello. my name is Lola.
IS my text just in english?
I must say that I agree with David. Indeed, over the past few years, media's behaviour have changed. Nowadays, medias show us onlynthe despondenoy of the world.
Packaking the young, TV is dangerous. Needless to say that children who is always seen issues solved by violence , will rely on violence to solve theirs. morover, violence go up for ages. That is why, each year much people affirmed that TV is an outburst of violence., Therefore one may assume that through the TV medias can for instance trigger a riot.
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Message de lola44 posté le 29-03-2006 à 15:14:29 (S | E | F | I)
hello. my name is Lola.
IS my text just in english?
I must say that I agree with David. Indeed, over the past few years, media's behaviour have changed. Nowadays, medias show us onlynthe despondenoy of the world.
Packaking the young, TV is dangerous. Needless to say that children who is always seen issues solved by violence , will rely on violence to solve theirs. morover, violence go up for ages. That is why, each year much people affirmed that TV is an outburst of violence., Therefore one may assume that through the TV medias can for instance trigger a riot.
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Modifié par bridg le 29-03-2006 21:01
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Réponse: help... de mp27, postée le 29-03-2006 à 19:54:58 (S | E)
Hello!
- media's behaviour, je mettrais the behaviour of the media
- have changed: le sujet est "the behaviour", donc, pourquoi "have"?
- onlynthe despondenoy of the world. Sens? Pour moi, c'est du charabia.
- Packaking the young. Je ne vois pas bien le sens du mot packaging ici, pour la télé.
- children who is: is, avec le sujet pluriel "children"--> je suis sûre que tu peux corriger.
- violence go up: et ici, le sujet est "violence", 3ème personne singulier, temps present, donc....
- through the TV medias can for instance trigger a riot. Essaye de redonner ton idée plus clairement.
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