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Tergnier/ correction
Message de jeremy8020 posté le 01-05-2006 à 15:20:45 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour,
je ne suis pas un expert en Anglais et c'est pour ça que je vous demande de l'aide. Pourriez vous s'il vous plait me dire les plus grosses fautes de mon texte. Un grand merci
Introduction
This image we show the logo of Tergnier and the message “The will to achieve” (in English) is in a way this aim.
Situation
Compared with Amiens, Tergnier is situated at south-East at almost one hundred kilometers (or sixty-two miles).
Tergnier is bounded by few towns such as Vouel, Fargnier, Quessy and Condren. This area is seventeen point ninety-five (17.95) square kilometers.
Population
In nineteen ninety-nine (1999), the population of Tergnier was fifteen thousand and nineteen-six hundred (15096) habitants. What do that Tergnier is arranged at the five hundred and sixty-first rank. Now, this population is around to sixteen thousand habitants.
The town hall
If you go to Tergnier, you can see the nice town hall.
On the photo 1, it is the town hall which is representated around nineteen-seventy (1970). At right, we can see the future post-office.
On the photo 2, it is the same photo but thirty-six years after with the new post office and on your left, the church!
The town hall is shaped like a pyramid or I can say also: the cross section of town hall is a triangular in shape/ the longitudinal section of town hall is rectangular in shape. And it was built on three floors in concrete.
We can see also a large clock.
The church
Even if, the church can seem imposing, it is very classic. We can see two parts. The first part is shaped like a rectangular prism on the base. And it is shaped like a triangular prism on the head then the second part seems naturally to a minaret.
Situation plan
If we imagine that this line is orientated North-East, the long axis of the church is also orientated North-East. Longer walls of the church face, respectively, west and east. What is important to say, is that viewed from the south, the town hall is in front of church.
Railway station
For finish, I would like to speak of the railway station to Tergnier. In fact, Tergnier is known for the railway station. There are few years old; it was the principal source economic of Tergnier. It is the reason why it is very important. As the church it is not very nice. It is shaped like a three rectangular prism. And it was build, principally, with a concrete.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-05-2006 15:27
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Message de jeremy8020 posté le 01-05-2006 à 15:20:45 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour,
je ne suis pas un expert en Anglais et c'est pour ça que je vous demande de l'aide. Pourriez vous s'il vous plait me dire les plus grosses fautes de mon texte. Un grand merci
Introduction
This image we show the logo of Tergnier and the message “The will to achieve” (in English) is in a way this aim.
Situation
Compared with Amiens, Tergnier is situated at south-East at almost one hundred kilometers (or sixty-two miles).
Tergnier is bounded by few towns such as Vouel, Fargnier, Quessy and Condren. This area is seventeen point ninety-five (17.95) square kilometers.
Population
In nineteen ninety-nine (1999), the population of Tergnier was fifteen thousand and nineteen-six hundred (15096) habitants. What do that Tergnier is arranged at the five hundred and sixty-first rank. Now, this population is around to sixteen thousand habitants.
The town hall
If you go to Tergnier, you can see the nice town hall.
On the photo 1, it is the town hall which is representated around nineteen-seventy (1970). At right, we can see the future post-office.
On the photo 2, it is the same photo but thirty-six years after with the new post office and on your left, the church!
The town hall is shaped like a pyramid or I can say also: the cross section of town hall is a triangular in shape/ the longitudinal section of town hall is rectangular in shape. And it was built on three floors in concrete.
We can see also a large clock.
The church
Even if, the church can seem imposing, it is very classic. We can see two parts. The first part is shaped like a rectangular prism on the base. And it is shaped like a triangular prism on the head then the second part seems naturally to a minaret.
Situation plan
If we imagine that this line is orientated North-East, the long axis of the church is also orientated North-East. Longer walls of the church face, respectively, west and east. What is important to say, is that viewed from the south, the town hall is in front of church.
Railway station
For finish, I would like to speak of the railway station to Tergnier. In fact, Tergnier is known for the railway station. There are few years old; it was the principal source economic of Tergnier. It is the reason why it is very important. As the church it is not very nice. It is shaped like a three rectangular prism. And it was build, principally, with a concrete.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-05-2006 15:27
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Réponse: Tergnier/ correction de jean31, postée le 01-05-2006 à 16:54:53 (S | E)
Bonjour jeremy,
Sauf erreur, j'ai déjà partiellement participé à la correction de ce texte, non ?
Je te signale les principales erreurs ainsi que mes "interprétations" en majuscules.
Mes doutes et ma perplexité sont signalés par
.* Introduction
This image showS US the logo of Tergnier and the message in English "The will to achieve" ILLUSTRATES IT. (? qu'as-tu voulu dire par "is in a way this aim" ?)
Situation
IN RELATION TO Amiens, Tergnier is situated TO THE south-east at almost 100 kilometers (62 miles). Tergnier is SURROUNDED by A few towns such as Vouel, Fargnier, Quessy and Condren. This area is 17.95 square kilometers.
Population
In 1999 Tergnier HAD/COUNTED/ 15 096 INhabitants, WHICH RANKS THE TOWN 561st. Now the population is CLOSE TO 16 000 INhabitants.
The town hall
If you go to Tergnier, you can see the nice town hall. On PICTURE 1 the town hall IS SEEN SUCH AS IT WAS around 1970. ON THE right HAND SIDE, we can see the NEW post office. (serait-elle visible si elle était "future" ?)
PICTURE 2 is the same SHOT, only 36 years LATER, with the new post office and the chuch on THE LEFT HAND SIDE.
The town hall is pyramid-shapED and was built on three concrete floors. We can also see a large clock.
The church
Even if the church can seem imposing, it is very classic. THERE ARE two parts. The LOWER
ONE is in the shape of a rectangular prism AT the base. THEN it is shaped like a triangular prism STANDING ON ITS APEX. The UPPER part naturally LOOKS LIKE a minaret.Situation plan
If we imagine that this line is FACING north-east, the long axis of the church is also FACING north-east. THE longer walls of the chuch respectively face west and east. What is REMARKABLE is that, viewed from the south, the town hall is JUST OPPOSITE THE church.
The railway station
TO finish, I would like to speak ABOUT Tergnier railway station. In fact, Tergnier is known THANKS TO ITS railway station. A few years AGO, it was the principal economic source IN Tergnier. THIS is the reason why it is very important. JUST LIKE the church, it is not very nice. It is in the shape of three rectangular prisms. And it was MAINLY built OUT OF concrete.
* Il y a sûrement mieux mais c'est dèjà ça...
Au fait, travaillerais-tu pour l'OT de Tergnier ?
PS Je n'ai pas cru bon d'écrire chiffres et dates en lettres. Et pour tout dire, je ne pense pas que ce soit nécessaire.
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Modifié par jean31 le 01-05-2006 16:55
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