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Schools ( correction)
Message de jeanne1989 posté le 03-05-2006 à 14:03:58 (S | E | F | I)
bonjour, pourriez vous me corriger mon devoir, car il doit comporter de nombreuses fautes
merci d'avance
I’m surpised by the diference between an american school and a french school. The functioning is very diferent, they haven’t the same scholastic rythme, the subject, the relation between pupils and teacher
We begin with an small description of an atmosphere school, before the begining of class some pupils read the news paper, other watch the news of highschool on the TV, shows, theater ....
At 9:00 am, the shime resound, and anounce the begining of class.
And in the loudspeaker we heard an voice which give the news of highschool. (It was difficult to understand). They attached
Next, some pupils with the teacher recit the pledge which means ..... and each class we can remark a flag of the USA, it’s surprising, the americans seems patriotic, they like their country !!!
The class can begin, often during the class, some pupils introduce his homework and the other pupils take notes, and weight in the presentation if they think that a thing is wrong or for add something. The teacher, manage the conversation, ask questions to pupil, he give the answer rarely, pupils must to find the annwer themselves. I remember in history the pupils don’t know the right answer, after an discussion, the casted a vote by a show of hands, and next only the teacher give the right answer. It’s a real debate between pupils between them.
The test I was surprised by their test, their test are QCM, but very often, the grading of the test is realised by the pupils before the teacher collected the test, then they realised an grading collective, and then they note their mark, which correspond to percentage of right answer.
Teachers trust in pupils so we can speak about the relation between teacher and pupils.
I was surpised by the simpleness relations between american pupil and teacher.
« Pupils know perfectly use the self discipline, we can put the foot on the table, we can drink drink or eat, but however, we have realy desire to work. Behind their behaviour very relax, the pupils are very attentive and respect the rules and the politeness.
Now speak subjects complusory, the option.
The subjects compulsory are the america history, the governemental history, english, sport.
The other subjects are option for example chemistry, comptablility, geography, theatre, psycholigie... Pupils in function of their ability and their liking, they choose their class. I think it’s a asset.
They must to obtain a sheepsken called “graduation”, if you fail in a subject you can repass the next year without double in the other subjects. For obtain this sheepsken, you must to suceed an exam in seven diferent classes.
And the activities, the high school is a social place very important. The sport is important, the soccer, the baseball are the sport the most popular, the training is three times by week. The spectotors are plentiful, with pom pom girlswith their dance acrobatic...
Base-ball, Soft-ball , Basket-ball, Football, Soccer (Tennis cool !!!!!), Athlétism, Cross,....
My opinion, comparaison with the franch school
I think that the america school learn to like his work, to dare, begin task. This network is more open on the midle of pupil and professional.
In france, I fear that pupils lose belief in their possiblity, and they don’t blossom in their studies
In USA, the young don’t accustom a real schedule of working, and the absence of big difficulties before the graduation, cause an selection too much fast and often link to money.
But this criticism aren’t justifies. If the americans don’t learn nothing at school and they’re really incultivated, how explain, they are so much strong in areas very different for example the economi, science and art.
If the americans aren’t prepare in the life profesional how explain their integration in the world of compagny.
Conclusion the america school and the french school are very diferent. The french school seems attach more moment to knowledge and the selection aroud this values.
The america school seems more attach to fulfillment of personality and to the acquisition of the social life.
Aren’t it legitimate for a school to look for, that pupils learn to been at ease in the life of every days ?
The world adult is a worl of competition, do you must put pupils des their more young age in a competition?
I think it’s better that young develop an belief themselves, and gain the liking of act and begin task.
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Modifié par bridg le 03-05-2006 14:32
correction du titre impératif.
Message de jeanne1989 posté le 03-05-2006 à 14:03:58 (S | E | F | I)
bonjour, pourriez vous me corriger mon devoir, car il doit comporter de nombreuses fautes
merci d'avance
I’m surpised by the diference between an american school and a french school. The functioning is very diferent, they haven’t the same scholastic rythme, the subject, the relation between pupils and teacher
We begin with an small description of an atmosphere school, before the begining of class some pupils read the news paper, other watch the news of highschool on the TV, shows, theater ....
At 9:00 am, the shime resound, and anounce the begining of class.
And in the loudspeaker we heard an voice which give the news of highschool. (It was difficult to understand). They attached
Next, some pupils with the teacher recit the pledge which means ..... and each class we can remark a flag of the USA, it’s surprising, the americans seems patriotic, they like their country !!!
The class can begin, often during the class, some pupils introduce his homework and the other pupils take notes, and weight in the presentation if they think that a thing is wrong or for add something. The teacher, manage the conversation, ask questions to pupil, he give the answer rarely, pupils must to find the annwer themselves. I remember in history the pupils don’t know the right answer, after an discussion, the casted a vote by a show of hands, and next only the teacher give the right answer. It’s a real debate between pupils between them.
The test I was surprised by their test, their test are QCM, but very often, the grading of the test is realised by the pupils before the teacher collected the test, then they realised an grading collective, and then they note their mark, which correspond to percentage of right answer.
Teachers trust in pupils so we can speak about the relation between teacher and pupils.
I was surpised by the simpleness relations between american pupil and teacher.
« Pupils know perfectly use the self discipline, we can put the foot on the table, we can drink drink or eat, but however, we have realy desire to work. Behind their behaviour very relax, the pupils are very attentive and respect the rules and the politeness.
Now speak subjects complusory, the option.
The subjects compulsory are the america history, the governemental history, english, sport.
The other subjects are option for example chemistry, comptablility, geography, theatre, psycholigie... Pupils in function of their ability and their liking, they choose their class. I think it’s a asset.
They must to obtain a sheepsken called “graduation”, if you fail in a subject you can repass the next year without double in the other subjects. For obtain this sheepsken, you must to suceed an exam in seven diferent classes.
And the activities, the high school is a social place very important. The sport is important, the soccer, the baseball are the sport the most popular, the training is three times by week. The spectotors are plentiful, with pom pom girlswith their dance acrobatic...
Base-ball, Soft-ball , Basket-ball, Football, Soccer (Tennis cool !!!!!), Athlétism, Cross,....
My opinion, comparaison with the franch school
I think that the america school learn to like his work, to dare, begin task. This network is more open on the midle of pupil and professional.
In france, I fear that pupils lose belief in their possiblity, and they don’t blossom in their studies
In USA, the young don’t accustom a real schedule of working, and the absence of big difficulties before the graduation, cause an selection too much fast and often link to money.
But this criticism aren’t justifies. If the americans don’t learn nothing at school and they’re really incultivated, how explain, they are so much strong in areas very different for example the economi, science and art.
If the americans aren’t prepare in the life profesional how explain their integration in the world of compagny.
Conclusion the america school and the french school are very diferent. The french school seems attach more moment to knowledge and the selection aroud this values.
The america school seems more attach to fulfillment of personality and to the acquisition of the social life.
Aren’t it legitimate for a school to look for, that pupils learn to been at ease in the life of every days ?
The world adult is a worl of competition, do you must put pupils des their more young age in a competition?
I think it’s better that young develop an belief themselves, and gain the liking of act and begin task.
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Modifié par bridg le 03-05-2006 14:32
correction du titre impératif.
Réponse: Schools ( correction) de js40run, postée le 03-05-2006 à 19:28:43 (S | E)
Hello Jeanne1989
I haven't a not very high level in English but I found these spelling mistakes and errors of syntax:
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Teachers trust in pupils so we can speak about the relation between teacher and pupils.
I was surpised by the simpleness of these relations between american pupilS and teacher.
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My opinion, comparaison with the franch school
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It's a first correction. I look for the other member to reas their!
From to read you!
Réponse: Schools ( correction) de js40run, postée le 03-05-2006 à 19:36:40 (S | E)
Excuse me but this correction was a real punishment! There is too errors and mistakes !
I don't understand that... and I wait for the other members to read their correction.
I am sorry for my own errors....
I hope your help (if you muster all your's courage!)
Réponse: Schools ( correction) de jean31, postée le 03-05-2006 à 21:46:28 (S | E)
Bonsoir jeanne1989,
Malgré toute ma bonne volonté, j'ai renoncé à te corriger au bout de dix lignes.
C'est tout simplement insupportable et j'ai pourtant une très longue expérience du charabia scolaire.
Il faudrait tout récrire pour que ce soit intelligible à un anglophone.
Désolé d'être aussi direct, mais je te conseille vivement de reprendre ton texte.
Efforce toi d'oublier complètement le français pour ne penser et n'écrire qu'en anglais.
Compose des phrases courtes, au maximum une principale + une subordonnée.
Tu y gagneras en clarté et intelligibilité.
Ne néglige pas la ponctuation.
Mobilise tes connaissances grammaticales afin d'éviter le plus possible d'erreurs et d'horreurs.
Enfin, fais et suis un plan général pour ne pas donner l'impression à tes lecteurs que tu as écrit cela au fil de la plume.
Si tu souhaitais faire un compte rendu d'une expérience vécue outre Atlantique, cela ne devrait pas être trop difficile.
Bon courage et n'hésite pas à revenir questionner si tu le souhaites.
INDISPENSABLES : 