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Besoin d'aide pour améliorer une E-E
Message de marguerite36 posté le 31-10-2006 à 16:43:43 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour je suis en seconde anglais LV1 et j'aurais besoin de quelqu'un qui puisse m'aider à corriger les fautes les plus énormes de mon expression écrite. Le sujet est : Would you like to study in a school like Welton? Why? Why not?(environ 200 mots; Welton est l'école du film le cercle des poètes disparus)
I would like to study in a school like Welton because I can meet people who share the same ambition :that favour the agrement among the pupils because they have all the same target. On the other hand a school like Welton allow to have a good work more later (lawyer, juge, banker) and ensure a stable life : no unemployment, a good salary...A similar school allow too to have the better education of the country. Moreover this type of school are places favourable at studies thanks to calms which regns there and at the atmosphere studious. But these schools don't have only good points.
I wouldn't like to study in a school like Welton because the life is too centered on the work and the scholl success : to have good mark,a lot of peroids and homework...Then the discipline is very harsh : corporal punishment, no right of dispute. In addition a school no coeducational doesn't allow to vary its knowledge and all that make lives the pupils of theses school in world with share, there is a gap with the people of their age. Moreover the professors don't learn to think by oneself, to develop the critical direction and don't leave any place with the creativity.
merci d'avance
Message de marguerite36 posté le 31-10-2006 à 16:43:43 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour je suis en seconde anglais LV1 et j'aurais besoin de quelqu'un qui puisse m'aider à corriger les fautes les plus énormes de mon expression écrite. Le sujet est : Would you like to study in a school like Welton? Why? Why not?(environ 200 mots; Welton est l'école du film le cercle des poètes disparus)
I would like to study in a school like Welton because I can meet people who share the same ambition :that favour the agrement among the pupils because they have all the same target. On the other hand a school like Welton allow to have a good work more later (lawyer, juge, banker) and ensure a stable life : no unemployment, a good salary...A similar school allow too to have the better education of the country. Moreover this type of school are places favourable at studies thanks to calms which regns there and at the atmosphere studious. But these schools don't have only good points.
I wouldn't like to study in a school like Welton because the life is too centered on the work and the scholl success : to have good mark,a lot of peroids and homework...Then the discipline is very harsh : corporal punishment, no right of dispute. In addition a school no coeducational doesn't allow to vary its knowledge and all that make lives the pupils of theses school in world with share, there is a gap with the people of their age. Moreover the professors don't learn to think by oneself, to develop the critical direction and don't leave any place with the creativity.
merci d'avance
Réponse: Besoin d'aide pour améliorer une E-E de jamesuk, postée le 31-10-2006 à 18:19:40 (S | E)
I would like to study in a school like Welton because I can meet people who share the same ambition :
On the other hand a school like Welton
I wouldn't like to study in a school like Welton because the life is too centered on the work and the scholl success : to have good mark,a lot of peroids and homework...Then the discipline is very harsh : corporal punishment, no right of dispute. In addition a school no coeducational doesn't allow to vary its knowledge and all that make lives the pupils of theses school in world with share, there is a gap with the people of their age. Moreover the professors don't learn to think by oneself, to develop the critical direction and don't leave any place with the creativity.
Je ne vais pas tout corriger parce que ca c'est ton boulot, m'ai j'espere t'avoir signaler qu'il ne faut pas traduire en anglais mot pour mot!
Réponse: Besoin d'aide pour améliorer une E-E de marguerite36, postée le 31-10-2006 à 22:44:19 (S | E)
merci beaucoup pour votre aide je pense avoir compris mes principales fautes.
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