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Immigration
Message de minouchette13 posté le 05-11-2006 à 17:19:38 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour.
J'ai un texte à rédiger sur l'immigration, j'aurai voulu savoir si il est correct. Merci de me corriger!
Immigration is a real problem for France,and Europe. French government try to limit immigration, but Spain has legalized lot of illegal immigrants : So, they are european, and are able to live in FRance.
Some of politicians, like the extremist J-M Le Pen think that we must expell immigrants. He says that they are responsible for unemployment, and that they must stay in their own country. Some of people, often working class, are agree with him, that's why they have voted for extremists during the last elections.The rioting in the [i]banlieue[/i] has reinforced fear about illegal migrations.
But this point of view is not shared by most of people. In fact, it could be inhuman to not help immigrants. These people are often in extrem difficulty, they leave their country because of the lack of education, job, money, security that there are in the country. We live in a rich and developed state, that's why we have to help them, to give them a chance to succed in their life. But we haven't always the possibility to help them. For example, immigrants have often no qualification, and there is not lot of job with no qualification in europe! Perhaps should we try to drain immigration more than we do nowadays.
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Modifié par bridg le 05-11-2006 17:32
Message de minouchette13 posté le 05-11-2006 à 17:19:38 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour.
J'ai un texte à rédiger sur l'immigration, j'aurai voulu savoir si il est correct. Merci de me corriger!
Immigration is a real problem for France,and Europe. French government try to limit immigration, but Spain has legalized lot of illegal immigrants : So, they are european, and are able to live in FRance.
Some of politicians, like the extremist J-M Le Pen think that we must expell immigrants. He says that they are responsible for unemployment, and that they must stay in their own country. Some of people, often working class, are agree with him, that's why they have voted for extremists during the last elections.The rioting in the [i]banlieue[/i] has reinforced fear about illegal migrations.
But this point of view is not shared by most of people. In fact, it could be inhuman to not help immigrants. These people are often in extrem difficulty, they leave their country because of the lack of education, job, money, security that there are in the country. We live in a rich and developed state, that's why we have to help them, to give them a chance to succed in their life. But we haven't always the possibility to help them. For example, immigrants have often no qualification, and there is not lot of job with no qualification in europe! Perhaps should we try to drain immigration more than we do nowadays.
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Modifié par bridg le 05-11-2006 17:32
Réponse: Immigration de pyan, postée le 05-11-2006 à 17:57:43 (S | E)
Definite artice needed in front of "Government", "working class" and "people."
"Expell" - check the spelling.
"Extrem" - check the spelling.
Either "agree with him" or "are in agreement with him" - but not "are agree with him".
You can use "fear" in the singular or plural but "fears" is more current.
"Inhuman not to help" is more natural.
"Jobs" in plural, (or "employment" in singular.)
"But it is not always possible for us to help them."
"Qualifications" in plural, and it is not jobs that don't have qualifications!
You could say "There are few jobs for people with no qualifications" or "there are few jobs which need no qualifications."
I do not understand "drain."
In spite of all these corrections, I wish I could write French as well as you write English.
Good luck
Pyan
Réponse: Immigration de jean31, postée le 05-11-2006 à 18:09:57 (S | E)
Bonjour,
=> French government est forcément défini. Il doit donc être précédé de ...?
=> lot of est incomplet, donc incorrect tel quel.
=> double faute sur european. C'est un nom propre et le sujet ainsi que le verbe qui le gouvernent est au pluriel.
=> some traduit des + 1 nom pluriel. Supprime le mot parasite. A 2 reprises !
=> être d'accord = to agree. To be agree est un vilain barbarisme !
=> banlieues = suburbs. Tu n'as donc pas de dictionnaire, pauvre de toi ?
=> most + nom = la plupart de
=> infinitif négatif = not to
=> extreme, même orthographe qu'en français.
=> to succeed in life. Orthographe.
=> there is not lot of job with no qualification est du plus pur charabia.
Tu peux sûrement arranger ça.
=> Europe est un nom propre !
Allez, un petit effort pour rectifier tout ça. You have to deserve a good mark!
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