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Correct my mistakes
Message de kiruban posté le 11-03-2007 à 10:54:36 (S | E | F | I)
Hello.guys,
Can someone correct my mistakes? Please...
1/ I am having a bad life since my birth.
2/ Even now I remember the day when I opened my eyes for the first time.
3/ Indeed I was almost dead when I came into the world. Moreover I was told that woman are afraid of me.
4/ Nowadays, I hate humans being whereas when I was young, I thought that humans were right, that humans were sensitive.
5/ In other words, I was convinced that humans were humans and not dogs although dogs are more reliable.
6/ I thought my dreams would became true but unfortunately my dreams runned into nightmares.
Thanks in advance.
Bye.
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Modifié par whynot95 le 11-03-2007 11:44
Message de kiruban posté le 11-03-2007 à 10:54:36 (S | E | F | I)
Hello.
Can someone correct my mistakes? Please...
1/ I am having a bad life since my birth.
2/ Even now I remember the day when I opened my eyes for the first time.
3/ Indeed I was almost dead when I came into the world. Moreover I was told that woman are afraid of me.
4/ Nowadays, I hate humans being whereas when I was young, I thought that humans were right, that humans were sensitive.
5/ In other words, I was convinced that humans were humans and not dogs although dogs are more reliable.
6/ I thought my dreams would became true but unfortunately my dreams runned into nightmares.
Thanks in advance.
Bye.
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Modifié par whynot95 le 11-03-2007 11:44
Réponse: Correct my mistakes de nick27, postée le 11-03-2007 à 11:16:06 (S | E)
Hello,
1/ I am having a bad life since my birth.
=> Opte pour le "present perfect continuous"
2/ Even now I remember the day when I opened my eyes for the first time.
OK
3/ Indeed I was almost dead when I came into the world. Moreover I was told that woman are afraid of me.
=> "woman" est faux. Regarde la forme du verbe qui le suit.
4/ Nowadays, I hate humans being whereas when I was young, I thought that humans were right, that humans were sensitive.
=> "whereas" n'a pas sa place ici.
=> Tu détestais les humains quand tu étais jeune ? Alors "hate" est au mauvais temps.
5/ In other words, I was convinced that humans were humans and not dogs although dogs are more reliable.
OK
6/ I thought my dreams would became true but unfortunately my dreams runned into nightmares.
=> "became true" est faux. (I'd like my dreams to come true one day - inspire-toi de cet exemple).
=> "runned" faux ! C'est un verbe irrégulier.
=> peut-être : My dreams turned into nightmares.
Bye
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Réponse: Correct my mistakes de jean31, postée le 11-03-2007 à 14:38:53 (S | E)
Bonjour à vous deux,
4/ Nowadays, I hate humans being whereas when I was young, I thought that humans were right, that humans were sensitive.
=> "whereas" n'a pas sa place ici.
=> Tu détestais les humains quand tu étais jeune ? Alors "hate" est au mauvais temps.
=> Attention kiruban, le S du groupe humans being est mal placé !
=> mp27, je pense au contraire que notre jeune ami a souhaité opposer l'opinion qu'il a actuellement sur les êtres humains à celle qu'il avait d'eux dans sa prime jeunesse.
Donc, même si la phrase n'est pas construite au mieux, le "whereas" se justifie.
=> C'est pourquoi aussi il emploie avec raison le présent dans la première proposition : Nowadays I hate... whereas I thought ...
See you.
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Réponse: Correct my mistakes de mp27, postée le 11-03-2007 à 14:44:22 (S | E)
Hello jean!
Je sais bien que "27" est un point commun entre nick et moi.... mais je ne suis pas nick
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Genre d'erreur que je prends avec un petit sourire amical vis à vis de toi, et vis à vis de nick!
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Have a lovely afternoon!
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Réponse: Correct my mistakes de nick27, postée le 11-03-2007 à 15:22:48 (S | E)
Oui, nick et mp ne se ressemblent pas vraiment mais bon ...
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Ah oui, merci Jean. Mais quand j'ai lu sa phrase en anglais je n'ai pas compris ce sens-là du tout
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Bon après-midi
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Réponse: Correct my mistakes de jean31, postée le 11-03-2007 à 17:00:18 (S | E)
C'est donc doublement
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Je jurerais pourtant que je n'avais pas bu plus que de coutume et que j'avais bien chaussé mes lunettes.
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Réponse: Correct my mistakes de kiruban, postée le 11-03-2007 à 19:26:30 (S | E)
Hello,
I am happy to see you back.
1/ I have been having a bad life since my birth.
2/ Even now I remember the day when I opened my eyes for the first time.
3/ Indeed I was almost dead when I came into the world. Moreover I was told that women are afraid of me.
4/ Nowadays, I hate human beings whereas when I was young I thought that humans were right and sensitive.
5/ In other words, I was convinced that humans were humans and not dogs although dogs are more reliable.
6/ I thought my dreams will come true but unfortunately my dreams turned into nightmares.
merci encore
Réponse: Correct my mistakes de willy, postée le 11-03-2007 à 20:31:34 (S | E)
Hello !
Dans la 6e phrase, pourquoi avoir mis "will" alors que le "would" de ta première version est correct (concordance avec "thought") ?
Réponse: Correct my mistakes de jean31, postée le 11-03-2007 à 21:41:05 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
4/ Nowadays, I hate human beings whereas when I was young I thought that humans were right and sensitive.
Décidément, cette phrase me chagrine dans sa construction.
Le voisinage "whereas when" me paraît en effet inopportun.
Il serait donc préférable d'écrire :
=> Nowadays I hate human beings whereas I thought they were right and sensitive when I was young.
Qu'en dis-tu ?
Réponse: Correct my mistakes de kiruban, postée le 11-03-2007 à 22:01:40 (S | E)
Oui, c'est mieux.
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6/ I thought my dreams would come true but unfortunately my dreams turned into nightmares.