Disadvantage / cigarette

Disadvantage / cigarette
Message de minho posté le 12-11-2017 à 05:26:40 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Could you help me with the correction of that text please?
Thanks for any reply.
People over around smoke a cigarette. When they smoke it for a long time, they are will addictive. So they are difficult to stop using it. When they continue to smoke it, they will have Diseases such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer.Furthermore,They are not hungry and asleep when their body get it. In addition, they will have a bad skin and thin than before. they will die someday. In short, The cigarette is not good for health. If someone never use it before, please don't dry it.It is not useful.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-11-2017 08:53

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de laure95, postée le 12-11-2017 à 17:04:24 (S | E)
Good evening,
People over around smoke a cigarette (pluriel). When they smoke it (pluriel)for a long time, they are will (enlever will)addictive . So they are difficult (mal dit) to stop using it. When they continue to smoke it (pluriel), they will have Diseases such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer.Furthermore,They are not hungry and asleep when their body (pluriel) get it. In addition, they will have a bad skin and thin than before. they will die someday. In short, The cigarette is not good for health. I
- f someone never use it before: mal construit.
- don't dry (faute de frappe?) it

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de minho, postée le 17-11-2017 à 08:00:27 (S | E)
People over around the world smoke the cigarettes.When they smoke it for a long time, they are addictive. It is not easy to avoid it.When they continue to smoke it, they will have Disease such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer.Furthermore,They are not hungry and asleep when their body to get it.In addition, they are will thin and bad skin than before.they will die someday.In short, the cigarette is not good for health. We should avoid it.It is not useful.

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de laure95, postée le 17-11-2017 à 10:34:52 (S | E)
Hello,
People over around the world smoke the (not the)cigarettes.When they smoke it (put one instead of "it")for a long time, they are addictive. It is not easy to avoid it.When they continue to smoke it (continue + verb + -ing), they will have Disease (plural)such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer.Furthermore,They are not hungry and asleep when their body to (not to) get (not the good form of the verb) it.In addition, they are will thin and bad skin than before .they (mettre une majuscule à "t")will die someday.In short, the cigarette is not good for health. We should avoid it.It is not useful.

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de minho, postée le 18-11-2017 à 09:03:12 (S | E)
Hello,
People over around the world smoke cigarettes.When they smoke for a long time, they are addictive.It is not easy to avoid it. When they continue smoking it, they will have Diseases such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer. Furthermore,They are not hungry and asleep when their body get it. In addition, they will change their skins and more different than before. They will die someday. In short, the cigarette is not good for health. We should avoid it. It is not useful.

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de laure95, postée le 18-11-2017 à 10:18:34 (S | E)
Hello,
People over (not the right preposition)around the world smoke cigarettes.When they smoke for a long time, they are addictive.It is not easy to avoid it. When they continue smoking it (not "it"), they will have Diseases such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer. Furthermore,They (enlever la majuscule à "t")are not hungry and asleep when their body get (not the good form of the verb)it. In addition, they will change their skins and more different than before (not clear). They will die someday. In short, the cigarette is not good for health. We should avoid it. It is not useful.

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Réponse : Disadvantage / cigarette de minho, postée le 18-11-2017 à 11:41:27 (S | E)
Hello,
All people around the world smoke cigarettes. When they smoke for a long time, they are addictive.It is not easy to avoid it. When they continue smoking, they will have Diseases such as liver cancer, Heart cancer and Lungs cancer. Furthermore,they are not hungry and asleep when they penetrate their body.In addition, it will change us brain to have more problem. They will die someday. In short, the cigarette is not good for health. We should avoid it. It is not useful.

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