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Message de many posté le 03-12-2018 à 20:32:13 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis étudiante en BTS AG à distance. Je bénéficie seulement d'une seule correction par mon professeur d'anglais.xxx Quelqu'un pourrait-il corriger mon rapport ? Je l'enverrai après correction à mon professeur pour qu'il me dise ce qu'il en pense. Cette matière est coef 6 pour moi.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Voilà ce que j'ai écrit :
1.My presentation
My name is Manèle xxx. I’m 23 years old . I live in xxx. I have an atypical and complicated educational background. In fact, after obtaining my economic and social baccalaureate in 2014, I have study more than 4 pathways : economy, law, town planning and management. After this, I was very discouraged and I have joined the working world : I did a training to work as an airport security officer and worked at xxx Airport during one year. Nevertheless, studies are a prority for me, I’ll never given up this idea ; so I enroled in the technical degree in administrative assistants studies and it’s the best choice that I made in my life. Consequently, I’m going to present you my first internship report in english in which I present you the company and the tasks that y carried out during 6 weeks.
I found this internship thanks to my friend who also made it at Permis Up of Clignancourt.
2.The compagny
Permis Up is an LLC created in 2014 by Mister xxx The principal activity is the dual control car hire. The headquarter is located in xxx.
In 5 years, 4 franchised agencies « Permis Up » have been created in each department of xxx. This agencies are financially and legally independant.
It’s an innovative market. Traditionnaly, aprentices drivers signed up at the driving school to learn driving but it’s very expensive expensive : hours go up quickly and the price to. The dual control car hire agencies are a good alternative : the car hire is cheap and it’s possible to drive with a friend. There are however some conditions to respect :
-The apprentice must have made at least 20 hours driving at the driving school.
-The person who accompanied the apprentice must have her driver’s license for, at least, 5 years.
The agency where I did my internship is located in xxx. The PDG, Mr. xxx, is an very young business owner who decided to open a franchised with his brother. It’s a very small company with only 3 employees :
• M. Alexandre xxx, the chief executive officer
• M. Christopher xxx, the general manager
• Mme Océane Jxx, the management assistant
The leadership style is participatif. All members of the company participate in the decision making. In fact, M. xxx consult us, his assistant and me, before every decison taking. According to him, we can bring good innovative ideas and favourable to de developpement of the company. He allows employees to participate in the management of the company. I have a trust relationship with his employees. Being a family business, human and social values are at the heart of the company's management.
Despite being an innovative concept, Permis Up knows some competitors.
3. My role at the company
I was management assistant in Permis Up from the 07th to the 18th of January 2019. I worked from Tuesday to Saturday, from 10:00 AM to 07:00 PM. It’s a very recent company. Consequently, there was not a lot of things to do.
At first, my job consisted in answering phone, welcoming, receving emails, posting mail. When Mr xxx was not here, I had to verify that the cars is in good condition before that the next customer picks it up.
At the begining, my tutor gave me a little more responsabilities. I started to be in charge of the registrations of the customers which can be done in 6 steps :
1. I welcomed
2. I proposed an option (=une formule)
3. I made the cost estimates on Excel
4. I made sign the contract (je faisais signer le contrat)
5. I made the invoicing : The payment can be made by cash, check or credit card. I had to take a 30 % deposit.
6. I created the customer’s folder which consists to 4 documents :
• Proof of identity
• Deposit cheque : 500 euros
• Learning booklet that the driving school gave to the customer
• Driving lisence (more than 5 years) of the person who driving with the customer
Otherwise, the directors of the agency wanted to develope the company. Besides the car hire, they wanted to proposed an other service.
They had the idea to embark on the selling of the license plate and the making car registration document because people can’t do the request at the prefecture anymore.
So, I made my project BTS in the theme of business development. I was in charge of the search for suppliers. I made :
- A specification
- A multicriteria table
- And I had to justify the choice of the supplier by writing a report to my manager.
4. Bilan
To conclude, this internship was very beneficial for me because I applied what I studied during this 2 years. I realized the difficulty once in the field, because there are several things to manage. This training taught me to be versatile and operational in all areas (HR, office, speaking and writing, etc.). Distance learning was very difficult but I gained some autonomy and it was a real challenge.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-12-2018 22:43
Message de many posté le 03-12-2018 à 20:32:13 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis étudiante en BTS AG à distance. Je bénéficie seulement d'une seule correction par mon professeur d'anglais.xxx Quelqu'un pourrait-il corriger mon rapport ? Je l'enverrai après correction à mon professeur pour qu'il me dise ce qu'il en pense. Cette matière est coef 6 pour moi.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Voilà ce que j'ai écrit :
1.My presentation
My name is Manèle xxx. I’m 23 years old . I live in xxx. I have an atypical and complicated educational background. In fact, after obtaining my economic and social baccalaureate in 2014, I have study more than 4 pathways : economy, law, town planning and management. After this, I was very discouraged and I have joined the working world : I did a training to work as an airport security officer and worked at xxx Airport during one year. Nevertheless, studies are a prority for me, I’ll never given up this idea ; so I enroled in the technical degree in administrative assistants studies and it’s the best choice that I made in my life. Consequently, I’m going to present you my first internship report in english in which I present you the company and the tasks that y carried out during 6 weeks.
I found this internship thanks to my friend who also made it at Permis Up of Clignancourt.
2.The compagny
Permis Up is an LLC created in 2014 by Mister xxx The principal activity is the dual control car hire. The headquarter is located in xxx.
In 5 years, 4 franchised agencies « Permis Up » have been created in each department of xxx. This agencies are financially and legally independant.
It’s an innovative market. Traditionnaly, aprentices drivers signed up at the driving school to learn driving but it’s very expensive expensive : hours go up quickly and the price to. The dual control car hire agencies are a good alternative : the car hire is cheap and it’s possible to drive with a friend. There are however some conditions to respect :
-The apprentice must have made at least 20 hours driving at the driving school.
-The person who accompanied the apprentice must have her driver’s license for, at least, 5 years.
The agency where I did my internship is located in xxx. The PDG, Mr. xxx, is an very young business owner who decided to open a franchised with his brother. It’s a very small company with only 3 employees :
• M. Alexandre xxx, the chief executive officer
• M. Christopher xxx, the general manager
• Mme Océane Jxx, the management assistant
The leadership style is participatif. All members of the company participate in the decision making. In fact, M. xxx consult us, his assistant and me, before every decison taking. According to him, we can bring good innovative ideas and favourable to de developpement of the company. He allows employees to participate in the management of the company. I have a trust relationship with his employees. Being a family business, human and social values are at the heart of the company's management.
Despite being an innovative concept, Permis Up knows some competitors.
3. My role at the company
I was management assistant in Permis Up from the 07th to the 18th of January 2019. I worked from Tuesday to Saturday, from 10:00 AM to 07:00 PM. It’s a very recent company. Consequently, there was not a lot of things to do.
At first, my job consisted in answering phone, welcoming, receving emails, posting mail. When Mr xxx was not here, I had to verify that the cars is in good condition before that the next customer picks it up.
At the begining, my tutor gave me a little more responsabilities. I started to be in charge of the registrations of the customers which can be done in 6 steps :
1. I welcomed
2. I proposed an option (=une formule)
3. I made the cost estimates on Excel
4. I made sign the contract (je faisais signer le contrat)
5. I made the invoicing : The payment can be made by cash, check or credit card. I had to take a 30 % deposit.
6. I created the customer’s folder which consists to 4 documents :
• Proof of identity
• Deposit cheque : 500 euros
• Learning booklet that the driving school gave to the customer
• Driving lisence (more than 5 years) of the person who driving with the customer
Otherwise, the directors of the agency wanted to develope the company. Besides the car hire, they wanted to proposed an other service.
They had the idea to embark on the selling of the license plate and the making car registration document because people can’t do the request at the prefecture anymore.
So, I made my project BTS in the theme of business development. I was in charge of the search for suppliers. I made :
- A specification
- A multicriteria table
- And I had to justify the choice of the supplier by writing a report to my manager.
4. Bilan
To conclude, this internship was very beneficial for me because I applied what I studied during this 2 years. I realized the difficulty once in the field, because there are several things to manage. This training taught me to be versatile and operational in all areas (HR, office, speaking and writing, etc.). Distance learning was very difficult but I gained some autonomy and it was a real challenge.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-12-2018 22:43
Réponse : Rapport/BTS AG de vaiana, postée le 08-12-2018 à 10:39:33 (S | E)
Hello! First part: it is only a first draft so please wait for another correction
1.My presentation
My name is Manèle xxx. I’m 23 years old . I live in xxx. I have an atypical and complicated educational background. In fact, after obtaining my economic and social baccalaureate in 2014, I have study (tense) more than 4 pathways : economy, law, town planning and management. After this, I felt very discouraged and I have joined (tense) the working world : I did a training to work as an airport security officer and worked at xxx Airport during one year. Nevertheless, studies are a prority for me, and I’ll never given up (tense) this idea ; so I enroled in the technical degree in administrative assistants studies and it’s the best choice that I made in my life. Consequently, I’m going to present you my first internship report in english in which I present (répétition) you the company and the tasks (that) I carried out during 6 weeks.
I found this internship thanks to my friend who also made it at Permis Up of Clignancourt.
2.The compagny
Permis Up is an LLC created in 2014 by Mister xxx The principal activity is the dual control car hire. The headquarter is located in xxx.
In 5 years, 4 franchised agencies « Permis Up » have been created in each department of xxx. This agencies are financially and legally independant.
It’s an innovative market. Traditionnaly, aprentices (adj) drivers signed up at the driving school to learn driving but it’s very expensive
-The apprentice must have made at least 20 hours XX driving at the driving school.
-The person who accompanies/escorts the apprentice must have her (the person can also be a man
) driver’s license for, at least, 5 years.The agency where I did my internship is located in xxx. The PDG, Mr. xxx, is an very young business owner who decided to open a franchised with his brother. It’s a very small company with only 3 employees :
• M. Alexandre xxx, the chief executive officer
• M. Christopher xxx, the general manager
• Mme Océane Jxx, the management assistant
The leadership style is participatif. All members of the company participate in the decision-making. In fact, M. xxx consult us, his assistant and me, before every decison taking. According to him, we can bring good innovative ideas and favourable to de developpement (spelling) of the company. He allows employees to participate in the management of the company. I have a trust relationship with his employees. Being a family business, human and social values are at the heart of the company's management.
Despite being an innovative concept, Permis Up knows some competitors.
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