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Message de cloclo0931 posté le 27-04-2019 à 14:55:26 (S | E | F)
Bonjour bonjour,
Je poste mon oral d'anglais pour la notion Lieux et Formes de pouvoir pour avoir des avis sur celui-ci par rapport à la problématique, fautes d'orthographe ou de syntaxe, les exemples donnés ou encore sur la longueur étant en LV1 anglais.
Merci pour votre attention et vos commentaires si présents.
The notion « Paces and forms of power » implies power which can be defined as a right or ability to control people or things.
On the other hand the power refer to the form of autority inside a state. Thus the gournment have many control over the population.
States choices has a lot of repercussions, two examples show. The first is the death penalty , and the second is their involment for a climatic changes.
The question is : How do the choices of states affect our society?
The death penalty is a important decisions for the justice. Some countries have ordered an end to this practice because of the policy in place, which concerns a large number of state are a democracy.
But certain gouvernment have not integrated this point of view, like US, Egypt, Ethiopia, China or Qatar. By the way a few are considered abolitionist or retain the death penalty only for wartime crimes, crimes against humanity or terrorist acts. There are a progression step by step but this one is slow.
In class, we have studied a document : Support the death penalty? Then assist with an execution by The Boston Globe. This document explain why the capital punishment must abolish in the United States.
This execution method eliminates criminals, serial killers, psycopath and it’s considered beneficial and indispensable for some for a better society but some people who were executed were not guilty and a real doubt can involve.
It’s a superintendent of the Oregon State Penitentiary who speak and his opinion is contradictory compared to his choices. He explain that there is a problem with death penalty beacause the gouvernment not things the consequences for a participation in executions, like post-traumatic stress disorder, with all its related maladies — substance abuse, suicide, depression.
The government has a decision on a person's life and on the staff who participle.
The political system has nowadays a problem with climate change because it’s a burning issue for states. If they not change their agagement a lot of things could change. Since december 2015 many alerts issued by COP21 but did not bring about a major political decisions. The earth exerts a massive extinction of biodiversity because of global warming. Ocean warming is accelerating and destroying corals and sea ice.
To unite government must quickly be done even if it remains a chalenge. The states has a power on futur of earth which is litle by litle damaging.
Political systems need to take into account the successive strikes and protests for the climate in the world. Because even if the degradation of biodiversity not touch our in now but touch animal plants and some people said contraire like Diarmid Campbell-Lendrum ,Climate Change and Health Team Leader of WHO, he said that 23 per cent of all fatalities around the globe.
To conclude the power of the states is important, but their consequences have all the more. In many respects the countries have an opinion which has an important role, as in the case of the death penalty, which is given by a law cour which possesses a life. On the other hand this power takes into account our future, and especially that of our planet because the state holds in hand our survival.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2019 20:31
Places au lieu de paces!
Message de cloclo0931 posté le 27-04-2019 à 14:55:26 (S | E | F)
Bonjour bonjour,
Je poste mon oral d'anglais pour la notion Lieux et Formes de pouvoir pour avoir des avis sur celui-ci par rapport à la problématique, fautes d'orthographe ou de syntaxe, les exemples donnés ou encore sur la longueur étant en LV1 anglais.
Merci pour votre attention et vos commentaires si présents.
The notion « Paces and forms of power » implies power which can be defined as a right or ability to control people or things.
On the other hand the power refer to the form of autority inside a state. Thus the gournment have many control over the population.
States choices has a lot of repercussions, two examples show. The first is the death penalty , and the second is their involment for a climatic changes.
The question is : How do the choices of states affect our society?
The death penalty is a important decisions for the justice. Some countries have ordered an end to this practice because of the policy in place, which concerns a large number of state are a democracy.
But certain gouvernment have not integrated this point of view, like US, Egypt, Ethiopia, China or Qatar. By the way a few are considered abolitionist or retain the death penalty only for wartime crimes, crimes against humanity or terrorist acts. There are a progression step by step but this one is slow.
In class, we have studied a document : Support the death penalty? Then assist with an execution by The Boston Globe. This document explain why the capital punishment must abolish in the United States.
This execution method eliminates criminals, serial killers, psycopath and it’s considered beneficial and indispensable for some for a better society but some people who were executed were not guilty and a real doubt can involve.
It’s a superintendent of the Oregon State Penitentiary who speak and his opinion is contradictory compared to his choices. He explain that there is a problem with death penalty beacause the gouvernment not things the consequences for a participation in executions, like post-traumatic stress disorder, with all its related maladies — substance abuse, suicide, depression.
The government has a decision on a person's life and on the staff who participle.
The political system has nowadays a problem with climate change because it’s a burning issue for states. If they not change their agagement a lot of things could change. Since december 2015 many alerts issued by COP21 but did not bring about a major political decisions. The earth exerts a massive extinction of biodiversity because of global warming. Ocean warming is accelerating and destroying corals and sea ice.
To unite government must quickly be done even if it remains a chalenge. The states has a power on futur of earth which is litle by litle damaging.
Political systems need to take into account the successive strikes and protests for the climate in the world. Because even if the degradation of biodiversity not touch our in now but touch animal plants and some people said contraire like Diarmid Campbell-Lendrum ,Climate Change and Health Team Leader of WHO, he said that 23 per cent of all fatalities around the globe.
To conclude the power of the states is important, but their consequences have all the more. In many respects the countries have an opinion which has an important role, as in the case of the death penalty, which is given by a law cour which possesses a life. On the other hand this power takes into account our future, and especially that of our planet because the state holds in hand our survival.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2019 20:31
Places au lieu de paces!
Réponse : Notion/Places and Forms of power de gerondif, postée le 27-04-2019 à 18:56:51 (S | E)
Bonjour
Votre anglais m'inquiète : Vous êtes capable, en terminale :
de mettre un nom pluriel derrière un : a climatic changes.a important decisions
de mettre un verbe au singulier derrière un sujet pluriel : States choices has a lot of repercussions,
de mettre un verbe pluriel derrière un sujet singulier: the gournment have many control
de mettre un nom singulier derrière many : the gournment have many control
de ne pas connaitre le s du présent simple troisième personne, I play ,he plays : power refer to the form of autority inside a state. This document explain. He explain .
de penser que certains gouvernements est singulier : certain gouvernment
de penser que "il y a" peut être pluriel avec un sujet réel singulier : There are a progression
de confondre participer (to take part in) et un participe présent ou passé : participle. the staff who participle.
de ne pas savoir conjuguer un présent simple à la forme négative : the gouvernment not things the consequences (the governement doesn't think about the consequences).even if the degradation of biodiversity not touch
de laisser des mots en français : some people said contraire
de ne pas mettre de verbe dans une complétive : he said that 23 per cent of all fatalities around the globe (elles font quoi, ces 23% de victimes ?).
de confondre être et avoir : leurs conséquences le sont d'autant plus : their consequences have all the more.
de confondre le nous COD, us et le notre adjectif possessif, our : even if the degradation of biodiversity not touch our
Je veux bien indiquer vos erreurs en bleu mais à quoi cela va-t-il servir ? J'ai en plus du mal à trouver une logique à votre texte.
erreurs en bleu
The notion « Paces and forms of power » implies power which can be defined as a right or ability to control people or things.
On the other hand the power refer(le s) to the form of autority inside a state. Thus the gournment(orthographe) have many control over the population.
States choices has a lot of repercussions, two examples show it. The first is the death penalty , and the second is their(leur implication à aui ?) involment (orth) for a climatic changes.
The question is : How do the choices of states affect our society?
The death penalty is a an important decisions(singulier) for the justice. Some countries have ordered an end to this practice because of the policy in place, which concerns a large number of state(pluriel) (construction bancale, il qoit manquer "qui sont des démocraties au pluriel)are a democracy.
But certain gouvernment (orth + pluriel) have not integrated this point of view, like the US, Egypt, Ethiopia, China or Qatar. By the way a few are considered abolitionist or retain the death penalty only for wartime crimes, crimes against humanity or terrorist acts. There are(singulier) a progression step by step but this one is slow.
In class, we have studied a document : Support the death penalty? Then assist with (sujet du verbe ? temps du verbe ?)an execution by The Boston Globe. This document explain (le s) why the capital punishment must be abolished in the United States.
This execution method eliminates criminals, serial killers, psycopath(pluriel) and it’s considered beneficial and indispensable for some for a better society but some people who were executed were not guilty and a real doubt can involve(s'impliquer ou s'apliquer ? Un vrai doute peut s'impliquer ne veut rien dire).
It’s a superintendent of the Oregon State Penitentiary who speak(le s) and his opinion is contradictory compared to his choices. He explain (le s) that there is a problem with the death penalty because the gouvernment not things(a thing = une chose) the consequences for a participation in executions, like post-traumatic stress disorder, with all its related maladies — substance abuse, suicide, depression.
The government has a decision(ne convient pas) on a person's life and on the staff who participle.
The political system has nowadays a problem with climate change because it’s a burning issue for states. If they not change (conjugaison) their agagement(orth) a lot of things could change. Since december 2015 many alerts have been issued by COP21 but did not bring about a(à ôter) major political decisions. The earth (non, ce n'est pas la planête qui exerce l'extinction, meais l'activité des hommes)exerts a massive extinction of biodiversity because of global warming. Ocean warming is accelerating and destroying corals and sea ice.
To unite(metez unite en ing sans le to) government must quickly be done even if it remains a challenge. The states has(pluriel) a power on the future of the earth which is little by little damaging(participe passé).
Political systems need to take into account the successive strikes and protests for the climate in the world. Because even if the degradation of biodiversity not touch(conjugaison) our(mettez le nous pronom personnel objet) in now but touch(le s du présent) animal plants and some people said contraire like Diarmid Campbell-Lendrum ,Climate Change and Health Team Leader of WHO, he said that 23 per cent of all fatalities around the globe (manque la fin de la phrase).
To conclude, the power of the states is important, but their consequences have(verbe être) all the more.(mal dit) In many respects the countries have an opinion which has an important role, as in the case of the death penalty, which is given by a law cour which possesses(mal utilisé) a life. On the other hand this power takes into account our future, and especially that of our planet because the state holds our survival in its hand.
Réponse : Notion/Places and Forms of power de cloclo0931, postée le 28-04-2019 à 19:32:10 (S | E)
Merci tout de même de votre attention, après relecture et revision de ce que je voulais exprimer voici la correction que j'ai faite.
The notion of "pace and power" implies a power that can be defined as a right or ability to control people or things.
On the other hand, power refers to the form of authority within a state. Thus, the government has no control over the population.
State choices have many implications, as shown by two examples. The first is the death penalty and the second is their involvement in climate change.
The question is: how do state choices affect our society?
The death penalty is an important decision for justice.
Some countries like the United States, Egypt, Ethiopia, China or Qatar still practice this method they say beneficial and concrete for a better society.
But a large number of states have ordered the end of this practice, most of them are a democracy. Others are considered abolitionist (no longer practice it) or retain the death penalty only for war crimes, crimes against humanity or terrorist acts.
In class, we studied a document: "Supporting the death penalty? Then attend the performance" by the Boston Globe. This document explains why the death penalty must be abolished in the United States.
This method of execution eliminates criminals, serial killers, psychopaths, but some people executed are not guilty and this can cause a real doubt.
It is a director of the penitentiary of Oregon who speaks, he explains that the death penalty is a problem for these employees. Due to the participation in these executions, it causes them to post-traumatic stress syndromes and all the diseases related to addiction, suicide, depression.
The government, therefore, has real freedom over the life of a person and subsequently over that of the executors.
Today, the political system is facing a climate change problem because it is a burning issue for states.
Their commitment has not changed much and this has irreversible consequences.
Since December 2015, many warnings have been issued by COP21 but have not led to major political decisions. The activity of men exerts a massive extinction of the biodiversity because of global warming. The warming of the oceans has accelerated and destroyed massive corals and sea ice.
Political systems must, therefore, take into account successive strikes and protests for the world's climate. Furthermore, the uniqueness of the government must be done quickly, even if it remains a challenge because they have power over the future of the Earth, which is gradually deteriorating. And this degradation of biodiversity that affects plants, animals. Diarmid Campbell-Lendrum, head of the WHO climate change and health team, says 23 per cent of the world's deaths are the cause.
The power of states is important, but their consequences are all the more serious. In many ways, countries have an opinion that plays an important role, as in the case of the death penalty, which is pronounced by a court, where life is at stake. On the other hand, this power takes into account our future, and in particular that of our planet, because the state holds our survival in hand.
Réponse : Notion/Places and Forms of power de lucile83, postée le 28-04-2019 à 21:01:03 (S | E)
Hello,
'Paces and forms of power' devrait être remplacé par 'Places and forms of power'.
Réponse : Notion/Places and Forms of power de gerondif, postée le 29-04-2019 à 00:14:21 (S | E)
Bonsoir
Pourquoi "tout de même" ?
Ce deuxième texte est meilleur, presque comme écrit par un autre écrivain.
Erreurs en bleu.
The notion of "pace and power" implies a power that can be defined as a right or ability to control people or things.
On the other hand, power refers to the form of authority within a state. Thus, the government has no control over the population.
State choices have many implications, as shown by two examples. The first is the death penalty and the second is their involvement in climate change.
The question is: how do state choices affect our society?
The death penalty is an important decision for justice.
Some countries like the United States, Egypt, Ethiopia, China or Qatar still practice this method they say beneficial and concrete for a better society.
But a large number of states have ordered the end of this practice, most of them are a democracy(pluriel). Others are considered abolitionist (no longer practise it) or retain the death penalty only for war crimes, crimes against humanity or terrorist acts.
In class, we studied a document: "Supporting the death penalty? Then attend the performance" by the Boston Globe. This document explains why the death penalty must be abolished in the United States.
This method of execution eliminates criminals, serial killers, psychopaths, but some people executed are not guilty and this can cause a real doubt.
It is a director of the penitentiary of Oregon who speaks, he explains that the death penalty is a problem for these pour ses (his) employés ou ces (these )employés ?)employees. Due to the participation in these executions, it causes them to post-traumatic stress syndromes and all the diseases related to addiction, suicide, depression.
The government, therefore, has real freedom over the life of a person and subsequently over that of the executors.
Today, the political system is facing a climate change problem because it is a burning issue for states.
Their commitment has not changed much and this has irreversible consequences.
Since December 2015, many warnings have been issued by COP21 but have not led to major political decisions. The activity of men exerts a massive extinction of the biodiversity because of global warming. The warming of the oceans has accelerated and destroyed massive corals and sea ice.
Political systems must, therefore, take into account successive strikes and protests for the world's climate. Furthermore, the uniqueness (sens??) of the government must be done quickly, even if it remains a challenge because they have power over the future of the Earth, which is gradually deteriorating. And this degradation of biodiversity
The power of states is important, but their consequences are all the more serious. In many ways, countries have an opinion that plays an important role, as in the case of the death penalty, which is pronounced by a court, where life is at stake. On the other hand, this power takes into account our future, and in particular that of our planet, because the state holds our survival in hand.
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