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Biographie/aide
Message de missmanga posté le 18-05-2019 à 19:22:21 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je suis en 4eme,je dois faire une biographie sur Annie Moore; pourriez-vous me dire s'il y a des fautes?
Merci pour vos réponses.

Annie Moore was born in 1874 in Cork. when she was 18 years old the Irish girl decided to join her parents in New York, with his two younger brothers.
The teenager had departed Queenstown, Ireland on December 20 1891, aboard the steamship Nevada.
After spending 12 days at sea, they were ready to reuniting with her family after four years apart.
On New years day a flag on Elis Island was dipped to signal the first boat of immigrant, She and his younger brothers was the first immigrant to the united states went to Ellis Island.
Later Annie Moore was married with a baker and had 11 children , however she was died in Lower East Side the December 6 December 1924 of heart attack.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-05-2019 21:51

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Réponse : Biographie/aide de lucile83, postée le 19-05-2019 à 08:45:58 (S | E)
Anyone?

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Réponse : Biographie/aide de laure95, postée le 19-05-2019 à 10:54:37 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- when (majuscule)she was 18 years old
- the Irish girl decided to join her parents in New York, with his (pas le bon possessif,ce sont les frères d'une fille) two younger brothers.
- The teenager had (enlever had)departed Queenstown, Ireland on December 20 1891,
- After spending 12 days at (pas la bonne préposition)sea, they were ready to reuniting (to + infinitif)with her family
- On New years (Year's) day a flag on Elis Island was dipped to signal the first boat of immigrant (pluriel),
- She and his (pas le bon possessif)younger brothers was (faute de conjugaison: le sujet est au pluriel)the first immigrant (pluriel) to the united states (majuscule)went to Ellis Island .
-Later Annie Moore was (enlever was)married with (enlever with)a baker
- however she was (pas de was)died in Lower East Side (préposition) the (pas de the à l'écrit)December 6 December (faute de frappe?)1924 of (article) heart attack.

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Réponse : Biographie/aide de here4u, postée le 19-05-2019 à 10:56:08 (S | E)
Hello!

Annie Moore was born in 1874 in Cork. when she was 18 years old the Irish girl decided to join her parents in New York, with his two younger brothers.
The teenager had departed Queenstown, Ireland on December 20 1891, aboard the steamship Nevada.
After spending 12 days at sea, they were ready to reuniting with her family after four years apart.
On New years day, a flag on Elis Island was dipped to signal the first boat of immigrant, She and his younger brothers was the first immigrant to the united states went to Ellis Island.
Later Annie Moore was married with a baker and had 11 children , however she was died in NY’ s Lower East Side XX the December 6 December 1924 of X heart attack.

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Réponse : Biographie/aide de missmanga, postée le 19-05-2019 à 17:14:57 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour vos réponses ;
je viens de comprendre la différence entre his et her, lol
Désolée encore de vous embetez ennuyer , j'ai rajouté un petit truc passage mais je ne suis pas sûre que c'est correct.
Merci encore

Today a bronze statue located at port of Cobh represents Annie Moore and her 2 brothers,to commemorate her passage, it symbolizes all the hope and history of former immigrants leaving Ireland for America .

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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-05-2019 18:53

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