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Message de eperw46 posté le 27-03-2021 à 11:11:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pourriez-vous me corriger cet écrit ? C'est un article sur le thème : What makes you feel really happy ?
Merci beaucoup.

The activity which makes me feel really happy is definitely going on holiday.

Indeed, I am always eager to go abroad ! Even if I could be quite exhausted after the journey, the trip makes me feel totally excited. In fact, I love finding myself in situations which are a little bit worring because of the fact you are far from home and also because you are in a new environnement. In these extreme moments, I have a rush of adrenaline and I feel good.

Moreover, when I go on holiday, I always take some time in order to visit some famous landmarks. It’s very thrilling how some monuments can be as imposing ! And I could pass hours admiring incredible landscapes ! Plus, when I am tired, I take this opportunity to enjoy a drink or as well to do shoppping in souvenir shops.

To sum up, when I go on holidays, I love feeling anxious and, once I arrive in the country, I always loose track of time...

Réponse : Correction/feelings de laure95, postée le 27-03-2021 à 13:12:56 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Even if I could (ou can, car vous utilisez du présent après)be quite exhausted after the journey, the trip makes me feel totally excited.
- worring: orthographe: le verbe est TO WORRY auquel on ajoute -ing, sans modification orthographique.
- And (éviter and en début de phrase)I could pass hours admiring incredible landscapes !
- to enjoy a drink: pour to have a drink?

- I go on holidays (au singulier dans cette expression)
- I always loose (orthographe)

Réponse : Correction/feelings de gerold, postée le 28-03-2021 à 18:56:27 (S | E)
Bonjour eperw46

... It’s very thrilling how some monuments can be as so imposing (avec "as", il faudrait un autre "as" = as ... as = aussi ... que) ! And I could pass hours (les heures passent = hours are passing (by), mais passer des heures = to spend hours) admiring incredible landscapes ! ~~Plus,~~ In addition when I am tired, I take this opportunity to enjoy a drink or ~~as well~~ to do shoppping in souvenir shops.

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Modifié par gerold le 28-03-2021 18:57

Réponse : Correction/feelings de eperw46, postée le 06-04-2021 à 15:47:43 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup, j'ai corrigé :

The activity which makes me feel really happy is definitely going on holiday.

Indeed, I am always eager to go abroad ! Even if I can be quite exhausted after the journey, the trip makes me feel totally excited. In fact, I love finding myself in situations which are a little bit worrying because of the fact you are far from home and also because you are in a new environnement. In these extreme moments, I have a rush of adrenaline and I feel good.

Moreover, when I go on holiday, I always take some time in order to visit some famous landmarks. It’s very thrilling how some monuments can be so imposing ! I could spend hours admiring incredible landscapes ! In addition, when I am tired, I take this opportunity to have a drink or as well to do shopping in souvenir shops.

To sum up, when I go on holiday, I love feeling anxious and, once I arrive in the country, I always lose track of time...

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