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Message de miss92 posté le 11-11-2007 à 17:40:42 (S | E | F | I)
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Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte qui concerne l'histoire du téléphone svp.
Désolé pour la longueur du texte
The telephone is a telecommunications device which is used to transmit and receive sound, usually two people conversing but occasionally three or more.
In 10th march 1876, Alexander Graham Bell Scottish inventor invents the telephone. He goes baptized the telephone vibraphone and he manages for the first time to pass on at distance the voice of his inventor. Then, we have the manual telephone. It consists for the subscriber to lift his telephone in order to prevent the operator that she can put in relation the both interlocutors. It is a mural telephone Then, in 1977 the Hand Telephone created by the professor Pierce have the same function that the manual telephone.
From the apparition of the automatic telephone we have a change in the world of telephone.
This telephone appears towards 1890 created by Almon Stowger in the United States. It consists to call directly the correspondent without passing by an operator. The user lifts his telephone and numbers the number thanks to dial the correspondent number. Moreover, the telephone changed receiver According to time at the beginning we had to deal with a device consisted of a block while now it is not any more the case. Indeed now, we are a device in 2 blocks first of all the case where we can see touches and functions diverse and receiver which allow receiving and from emitter sounds. Nowadays thanks to the evolution of techniques we have the cordless phone but with a base connected have the telephone line and to finish the revolutionary telephone is the mobile phone which had for simple use the receipt and the sending of call while now thanks to the new technology. The mobile phone can serve as radio of television of mp3 of bank card and quite other functions diverse we can make everything with and take him with one carefree.
je vous en remercie d'avance
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Message de miss92 posté le 11-11-2007 à 17:40:42 (S | E | F | I)
bonsoir
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte qui concerne l'histoire du téléphone svp.
Désolé pour la longueur du texte
The telephone is a telecommunications device which is used to transmit and receive sound, usually two people conversing but occasionally three or more.
In 10th march 1876, Alexander Graham Bell Scottish inventor invents the telephone. He goes baptized the telephone vibraphone and he manages for the first time to pass on at distance the voice of his inventor. Then, we have the manual telephone. It consists for the subscriber to lift his telephone in order to prevent the operator that she can put in relation the both interlocutors. It is a mural telephone Then, in 1977 the Hand Telephone created by the professor Pierce have the same function that the manual telephone.
From the apparition of the automatic telephone we have a change in the world of telephone.
This telephone appears towards 1890 created by Almon Stowger in the United States. It consists to call directly the correspondent without passing by an operator. The user lifts his telephone and numbers the number thanks to dial the correspondent number. Moreover, the telephone changed receiver According to time at the beginning we had to deal with a device consisted of a block while now it is not any more the case. Indeed now, we are a device in 2 blocks first of all the case where we can see touches and functions diverse and receiver which allow receiving and from emitter sounds. Nowadays thanks to the evolution of techniques we have the cordless phone but with a base connected have the telephone line and to finish the revolutionary telephone is the mobile phone which had for simple use the receipt and the sending of call while now thanks to the new technology. The mobile phone can serve as radio of television of mp3 of bank card and quite other functions diverse we can make everything with and take him with one carefree.
je vous en remercie d'avance
Bonsoir
Réponse: texte à corriger svp de mariebru, postée le 11-11-2007 à 17:49:43 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Il faudrait aussi le texte français.
Le mieux est de faire une présentation paragraphe par paragraphe : c'est plus facile pour vous suggérer des corrections, car cela évite des aller et retour.
Donc : un paragraphe français, suivi de sa traduction et ainsi de suite.
Merci.
Réponse: texte à corriger svp de miss92, postée le 11-11-2007 à 18:04:04 (S | E)
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d'accord pour le premier paragraphe je ne me suis pas basé sur un texte en fançais.Autrement dit je l'ai directement écrit sans passer par le français.
Donc voilà
The telephone is a telecommunications device which is used to transmit and receive sound, usually two people conversing but occasionally three or more.
In 10th march 1876, Alexander Graham Bell Scottish inventor invents the telephone. He goes baptized the telephone vibraphone and he manages for the first time to pass on at distance the voice of his inventor. Then, we have the manual telephone. It consists for the subscriber to lift his telephone in order to prevent the operator that she can put in relation the both interlocutors. It is a mural telephone Then, in 1977 the Hand Telephone created by the professor Pierce have the same function that the manual telephone.
From the apparition of the automatic telephone we have a change in the world of telephone.
This telephone appears towards 1890 created by Almon Stowger in the United States. It consists to call directly the correspondent without passing by an operator. The user lifts his telephone and numbers the number thanks to dial the correspondent number.
merci d'avance
bonsoir
Réponse: texte à corriger svp de miss92, postée le 11-11-2007 à 18:08:38 (S | E)
voici maintenant une autre partie avec sa traduction
De plus, le téléphone a changé d'appareil ,au fur et a mesure du temps au début on avait affaire à un appareil composé que d’un bloc alors que maintenant ce n’est plus le cas. en effet maintenant, nous avons un appareil à 2 blocs: tout d’abord le boitier où on peut voir les touches et les diverses fonctions et le combiné qui permet de recevoir et d’emettre des sons.
Moreover, the telephone changed receiver According to time at the beginning we had to deal with a device consisted of a block while now it is not any more the case. Indeed now, we are a device in 2 blocks first of all the case where we can see touches and functions diverse and receiver which allow receiving and from emitter sounds
merci
Réponse: texte à corriger svp de miss92, postée le 11-11-2007 à 18:12:44 (S | E)
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voici la derniere partie du texte
De nos jours, grâce a l'évolution des techniques nous avons le telephone sans fil mais avec une base relié a la ligne téléphonique .Et pour finir le telephone revolutionnaire est le telephone portable qui avait comme simple utilisation le reçu et l’envoi d’appel alors que maintenat grâce a la nouvelle technologie le telephone mobile peut servir de radio de tv de mp3 de carte bancaire et toutes autres diverses functions on peut tout faire avec et l'emporter avec soi sans souci.
Nowadays thanks to the evolution of techniques we have the cordless phone but with a base connected have the telephone line and to finish the revolutionary telephone is the mobile phone which had for simple use the receipt and the sending of call while now thanks to the new technology. The mobile phone can serve as radio of television of mp3 of bank card and quite other functions diverse we can make everything with and take him with one carefree.
merci
Réponse: texte à corriger svp de violet91, postée le 11-11-2007 à 19:06:46 (S | E)
Hello,Miss-Telephone,technology (ots généraux) mots "abstraits":pas d'article.
-On March 10th
-A Scottish scientist (apposition,il faut donc un article :I work as a teacher)
-He will call it"telephone" in Greek :tele=wire ;phonos=voix..;so ,the voice "running"on a wire)
-It consists in + gérondif
-To prevent from + gérondif.
- Professor...:pas d'article devt un nom propre sg ou un titre.
-Both (sans the)
-The same.....as (cf.comparatifs)
- About,around,by 1890
-To pick up thr receiver (combiné)
-We have# we are !
-wireless:sans fils(ancienne TSF=radio),en fait "mobile" phone pour la maison.
-le portable :cellular phone
-to allow to
-"diverse" functions (place de l'épithète anglais :PREposé)
-to do (agir)#to make (fabriquer)
-a cellular phone (neutre)=it
- oneself?
Voilà quelques indices..je n'ai pas tout corrigé. J'espère vous avoir aidée. Good luck !
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