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Madeleine McCann /Correction
Message de thebestfriends posté le 04-01-2008 à 20:17:31 (S | E | F | I)
Hi! Can you corrige my comm please ??
Bonjour j'ai un commentaire a faire sur un article de journal anglo-saxon
voici l'article:
THIS is missing Madeleine McCann as she has never been seen before. The picture -- one of several released yesterday -- was taken last Christmas as she excitedly opens a parcel containing the same pink bag she took on the Praia da Luz holiday in May when she disappeared.
Her distraught parents have released a series of video clips of the daughter they still hope will be returned to them.
They did so as part of an emotional Christmas message for her missing daughter in front of the Christmas tree at their Leicestershire home in the hope that it will been seen by their daughter.
voila mon commentaire:
Madeleine McCann disappeared on the evening of Thursday, 3 May 2007 in the resort of Praia da Luz in the Algarve, Portugal, just few days before here fourth birthday. The little girl was on holiday with her parents, Kate and Gerry McCann, and siblings when she disappeared from an apartment in the central area of the resort.
On May 9th, Interpol broadcasts a worldwide alert to all its members for its disappearing.
In effect, there were several rebounds in this disappearing such as the evidence of a Norwegian tourist, this one said that he have seen the little girl in Marrakech or else the rifaine baby that they suspected of being Maddy
the marocan baby that they suspected of being Maddy because for them it was possible that the little has been victim of a surgical operation and that she carries lenses.
We being however informed at some point by the press that it was Miss Mc Cann who can be responsible of this disappearing, accusing the mother of having wanted to get ride of her daughter. Although all these lanes exist but no seem to be the good and there was not in this affair once again and unfortunately they always not found the baby Maddy.
The article which we have comes from the Irish newspaper known under the name of ........... This last was published on Saturday, December 22nd, 2007. During this period of Christmas the newspaper is aimed of reminding to people that Maddy was still in danger.
But it's also a means to get the message of this parents. They decided to give the photograph of last Christmas to induce people of being hurt and emotionaly touched. In this picture we can the little girl trying to unpack its present with such hapiness ,smiling to her parents. In the video she takes the bag which that she carried during her disappearing.
In fact, it's a picture which sensitizes people because it is very hard to cross Christmas without his own child still with the age to dream of this period of the year. NO one has to spend christmas like that. Morever the couple Mc Cann publishes many videos believing that in this way they will have more chance to get maddy's backgirl. They also created an official site for this affair (............)
At the end the report which we can make with France is that in this period of the year which is an instant of charity,love,support distribution, and listening. Tabloid and all those medias tries to syndicate articles that conduce people to chip in charitable works as “le resto du coeur” in France or also in this instance, just to have a thoughts,to make effort by thinking or helping people who are in straits such is the case here.
Je vous remercie de me parvenir une correction svp !!
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Modifié par bridg le 04-01-2008 20:23
Votre fiche dit: 13 ans??
Il est demandé aux membres qui auront la gentillesse de répondre de signaler les fautes, d'aider le demandeur à se corriger mais de ne jamais faire le travail à sa place. Cette règle est incontournable sur ce site d'apprentissage. Merci de votre participation.
Message de thebestfriends posté le 04-01-2008 à 20:17:31 (S | E | F | I)
Hi! Can you corrige my comm please ??
Bonjour j'ai un commentaire a faire sur un article de journal anglo-saxon
voici l'article:
THIS is missing Madeleine McCann as she has never been seen before. The picture -- one of several released yesterday -- was taken last Christmas as she excitedly opens a parcel containing the same pink bag she took on the Praia da Luz holiday in May when she disappeared.
Her distraught parents have released a series of video clips of the daughter they still hope will be returned to them.
They did so as part of an emotional Christmas message for her missing daughter in front of the Christmas tree at their Leicestershire home in the hope that it will been seen by their daughter.
voila mon commentaire:
Madeleine McCann disappeared on the evening of Thursday, 3 May 2007 in the resort of Praia da Luz in the Algarve, Portugal, just few days before here fourth birthday. The little girl was on holiday with her parents, Kate and Gerry McCann, and siblings when she disappeared from an apartment in the central area of the resort.
On May 9th, Interpol broadcasts a worldwide alert to all its members for its disappearing.
In effect, there were several rebounds in this disappearing such as the evidence of a Norwegian tourist, this one said that he have seen the little girl in Marrakech or else the rifaine baby that they suspected of being Maddy
the marocan baby that they suspected of being Maddy because for them it was possible that the little has been victim of a surgical operation and that she carries lenses.
We being however informed at some point by the press that it was Miss Mc Cann who can be responsible of this disappearing, accusing the mother of having wanted to get ride of her daughter. Although all these lanes exist but no seem to be the good and there was not in this affair once again and unfortunately they always not found the baby Maddy.
The article which we have comes from the Irish newspaper known under the name of ........... This last was published on Saturday, December 22nd, 2007. During this period of Christmas the newspaper is aimed of reminding to people that Maddy was still in danger.
But it's also a means to get the message of this parents. They decided to give the photograph of last Christmas to induce people of being hurt and emotionaly touched. In this picture we can the little girl trying to unpack its present with such hapiness ,smiling to her parents. In the video she takes the bag which that she carried during her disappearing.
In fact, it's a picture which sensitizes people because it is very hard to cross Christmas without his own child still with the age to dream of this period of the year. NO one has to spend christmas like that. Morever the couple Mc Cann publishes many videos believing that in this way they will have more chance to get maddy's backgirl. They also created an official site for this affair (............)
At the end the report which we can make with France is that in this period of the year which is an instant of charity,love,support distribution, and listening. Tabloid and all those medias tries to syndicate articles that conduce people to chip in charitable works as “le resto du coeur” in France or also in this instance, just to have a thoughts,to make effort by thinking or helping people who are in straits such is the case here.
Je vous remercie de me parvenir une correction svp !!
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Modifié par bridg le 04-01-2008 20:23
Votre fiche dit: 13 ans??
Il est demandé aux membres qui auront la gentillesse de répondre de signaler les fautes, d'aider le demandeur à se corriger mais de ne jamais faire le travail à sa place. Cette règle est incontournable sur ce site d'apprentissage. Merci de votre participation.
Réponse: Madeleine McCann /Correction de hobbes007, postée le 06-01-2008 à 19:23:02 (S | E)
Here are your mistakes, can you make some corrections.
Good luck
Madeleine McCann disappeared on the evening of Thursday, 3 May 2007 in the resort of Praia da Luz in the Algarve, Portugal, just few days before here fourth birthday. The little girl was on holiday with her parents, Kate and Gerry McCann, and ? siblings when she disappeared from an apartment in the central area of the resort.
On May 9th, Interpol broadcasts a worldwide alert to all its members for its disappearing.
In effect, there were several rebounds in this disappearing such as the evidence of a Norwegian tourist, this one said that he have seen the little girl in Marrakech or else the rifaine? baby that they suspected of being Maddy
the marocan baby that they suspected of being Maddy because for them (who?) it was possible that the little (what?) has been victim of a surgical operation and that she carries lenses.
We verb? being informed however at some point by the press that it was Miss Mc Cann who can be responsible of this disappearing, accusing the mother of having wanted to get ride of her daughter. Although all these lanes (?) exist but no seem to be the good one and there was not in this affair once again and unfortunately they always not found the baby Maddy.
This article comes from the Irish newspaper known under the name of ........... It was published on Saturday, December 22nd, 2007. During this period of Christmas the newspaper is aimed of reminding to people that Maddy was still in danger.
But it's also a means to get the message of this parents. They decided to give the photograph of her last Christmas to induce people of being hurt and emotionaly touched. In this picture we can see the little girl trying to unpack its present with such hapiness ,smiling to her parents. In the video she takes the bag which she was carrying during her disappearing.
In fact, it's a picture which sensitizes people because it is very hard to cross Christmas without his own child still with the age to dream of this period of the year. NO one has to spend christmas like that. Morever the Mc Cann couple publishes many videos believing that in this way they will have more chance to get maddy back. They also created an official site for this affair (............)
At the end the report which we can make with France is that in this period of the year which is an instant of charity,love,support distribution, and listening. Tabloid and all those medias tries to syndicate articles that conduce people to chip in charitable works as “le resto du coeur” in France or also in this instance, just to have a thoughts,to make effort by thinking or helping people who are in straits such is the case here.
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