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Message de zirha posté le 13-04-2008 à 13:43:22 (S | E | F)
bonjour je m'appelle Hélène je suis étudiante en DUT Techniques de commercialisation. Tout ce passe bien pour moi cette année mais mon gros point faible c'est l'anglais. Je dois presenté une publicité dans peu de temps, je voudrais avoir une bonne note pour garder une bone moyenne generale, est ce que quelqu'un aurait la gentillesse de me coriger mon texte pour m'aider? merci d'avance
vous allez voir pr kelk1 ki sen sor pa tp mal ds lé etude superieur c assez desesperan...
Description
Its publicity for two creams anti-wrinkle called Once Upon a Time.
Shows a naked woman who wears a snake
A woman has long wavy red hair. The red represents the colour of the evil, of the temptation.
Snake is winded around woman as if it’s winded to branch. Snake is symbol of the hell, of the life. The symbol of the medicine is a snake winded a drink.
Snake is sloughing of his skin. The woman can’t to change of skin when she wants.
Snake has a skin rugged and it looks toward the low. The low is the Hell. The snake is the opposite of the woman. Snake looks the Hell and the woman looks the paradise
.
Snake is utilized in medicine for make medicine; snake is maybe the “antidote” against the wrinkle.
They look to the right
In the top right hand corner, there is a sun in gold and in the top left hand corner there is a moon in gold. The publicity is divided on two parts; the day and the night.
The part of the night is very dark and the writing of the night cream is black.
The part of the day is illuminated by the sun and the writing of the day cream is white
.Analysing
The head of the woman is leaning toward the right. The right is the future.
It’s a young woman who doesn’t fear to grow old with her cream Once Upon a Time
The words ‘antidote”, “ritual”, the snake and the red woman shows the world of the sorcery. Woman is a sorcerer who uses an antidote for to be beautiful. Creams are made by a sorcerer.
Snake looks toward the low. The low is the Hell. The snake is the opposite of the woman. Snake looks the Hell and the woman looks the paradise
Woman can’t to change of skin whereas the snake can change of skin, but with creams woman has always a beautiful skin.
Solving the problem
The target is the women who start to have wrinkle, the women who don’t wan grow old.
The message is: Do not be afraid to grow old, with Once Upon Time your skin is ever young and beautiful.
To Have ever a young skin is not natural.
Message de zirha posté le 13-04-2008 à 13:43:22 (S | E | F)
bonjour je m'appelle Hélène je suis étudiante en DUT Techniques de commercialisation. Tout ce passe bien pour moi cette année mais mon gros point faible c'est l'anglais. Je dois presenté une publicité dans peu de temps, je voudrais avoir une bonne note pour garder une bone moyenne generale, est ce que quelqu'un aurait la gentillesse de me coriger mon texte pour m'aider? merci d'avance
vous allez voir pr kelk1 ki sen sor pa tp mal ds lé etude superieur c assez desesperan...
Description
Its publicity for two creams anti-wrinkle called Once Upon a Time.
Shows a naked woman who wears a snake
A woman has long wavy red hair. The red represents the colour of the evil, of the temptation.
Snake is winded around woman as if it’s winded to branch. Snake is symbol of the hell, of the life. The symbol of the medicine is a snake winded a drink.
Snake is sloughing of his skin. The woman can’t to change of skin when she wants.
Snake has a skin rugged and it looks toward the low. The low is the Hell. The snake is the opposite of the woman. Snake looks the Hell and the woman looks the paradise
.
Snake is utilized in medicine for make medicine; snake is maybe the “antidote” against the wrinkle.
They look to the right
In the top right hand corner, there is a sun in gold and in the top left hand corner there is a moon in gold. The publicity is divided on two parts; the day and the night.
The part of the night is very dark and the writing of the night cream is black.
The part of the day is illuminated by the sun and the writing of the day cream is white
.Analysing
The head of the woman is leaning toward the right. The right is the future.
It’s a young woman who doesn’t fear to grow old with her cream Once Upon a Time
The words ‘antidote”, “ritual”, the snake and the red woman shows the world of the sorcery. Woman is a sorcerer who uses an antidote for to be beautiful. Creams are made by a sorcerer.
Snake looks toward the low. The low is the Hell. The snake is the opposite of the woman. Snake looks the Hell and the woman looks the paradise
Woman can’t to change of skin whereas the snake can change of skin, but with creams woman has always a beautiful skin.
Solving the problem
The target is the women who start to have wrinkle, the women who don’t wan grow old.
The message is: Do not be afraid to grow old, with Once Upon Time your skin is ever young and beautiful.
To Have ever a young skin is not natural.
Réponse: presentation oral de joey93, postée le 13-04-2008 à 14:19:36 (S | E)
it is a publicity....
It shows a wavy red-haired woman who is naked and wears a snake.Red represents the colour of evil and temptation.The snake is winding around the woman as if it were winded to a branch. Snake is the symbol of hell and life. The symbol of medicine is a snake winding a drink.
The woman can't change her skin when she wants to. THE snake has...The low is hell. The snake looks at...the woman looks at...
The publicity is divided into...
The right is future.
.....the snake and the woman show the world of sorcery.The woman is a witch who uses an antidote in order to be beautiful...
The snake looks towards the low. The low is hell....the snake looks at...The woman looks at...
the woman can't change her skin contrary to the snake...,but thanks to this cream, the woman has...
the target is women who start to have wrinkles,women who don't want to look old.
......with once upon a time your skin is always young and beautiful.
J'espère t'avoir aidé. Joey93.
Réponse: presentation oral de zirha, postée le 13-04-2008 à 16:08:27 (S | E)
merci beaucoup Joey93!c'est sympa de m'aider!
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