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Muhammad Yunus (correction)
Message de mascol posté le 01-05-2008 à 17:07:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjours, je dois faire un exercice en anglais. Le sujet de cet exercice tourne autour de cette question: "Comment quelqu'un que vous considérez comme un héros peut vous influencer ?" Mais j'ai peur d'avoir fait quelques fautes. Est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait me corriger s'il vous plaît? Merci.
The person I consider as a hero is called Muhammad Yunus. It is a Bangladeshi economist and businessman known for having founded the first microcredit institution, the Grameen Bank, which earned him the Nobel Peace Prize in 2006. It is dubbed the "banker of the poor." The institution of microcredit allows the poorest to be able borrow small sums easily refundable to improve their living conditions.
I think that the action of Muhammad Yumus is an example that everyone should follow. Each person should in his life of every day to make action to fight against poverty and misery to help the poorest. His action made me realize the importance of solidarity throughout the world. I encourage my family and friends often make donations to organizations that help the most disadvantaged. If everyone took example on Muhammad Yumus, and carries out actions in solidarity, we would live in a better world.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-05-2008 17:29
Merci aux membres qui ont le gentillesse de répondre, de simplement signaler les erreurs, et de permettre au membre demandeur de s'auto corriger.
Message de mascol posté le 01-05-2008 à 17:07:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjours, je dois faire un exercice en anglais. Le sujet de cet exercice tourne autour de cette question: "Comment quelqu'un que vous considérez comme un héros peut vous influencer ?" Mais j'ai peur d'avoir fait quelques fautes. Est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait me corriger s'il vous plaît? Merci.
The person I consider as a hero is called Muhammad Yunus. It is a Bangladeshi economist and businessman known for having founded the first microcredit institution, the Grameen Bank, which earned him the Nobel Peace Prize in 2006. It is dubbed the "banker of the poor." The institution of microcredit allows the poorest to be able borrow small sums easily refundable to improve their living conditions.
I think that the action of Muhammad Yumus is an example that everyone should follow. Each person should in his life of every day to make action to fight against poverty and misery to help the poorest. His action made me realize the importance of solidarity throughout the world. I encourage my family and friends often make donations to organizations that help the most disadvantaged. If everyone took example on Muhammad Yumus, and carries out actions in solidarity, we would live in a better world.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-05-2008 17:29
Merci aux membres qui ont le gentillesse de répondre, de simplement signaler les erreurs, et de permettre au membre demandeur de s'auto corriger.
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de chrislondon, postée le 01-05-2008 à 22:37:15 (S | E)
Bonsoir. Votre texte est très bien mais il faut regarder ces phrases:
it is a Bangladeshi economist...
it is dubbed the 'banker of the poor'.... Personne, pas chose.
each person should in his life of every day...Il faut utiliser 'everyday' comme adjectif.
to make action... pas 'make'.
I encourage my family and friends often make....infinitif avec 'to' ici.
If everyone took example on... pas 'took' et pas 'on'.
and carries out action in solidarity.. temps du verbe.
J'espère vous avoir aidé un peu.
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de mascol, postée le 02-05-2008 à 16:27:47 (S | E)
ok merci, je vais essayer de me corriger.
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de mascol, postée le 02-05-2008 à 16:36:31 (S | E)
J'ai essayé de corriger mes erreurs, et voila ce que j'ai fait:
The person I consider as a hero is called Muhammad Yunus. He is a Bangladeshi economist and businessman known for having founded the first microcredit institution, the Grameen Bank, which earned him the Nobel Peace Prize in 2006. He is dubbed the "banker of the poor." The institution of microcredit allows the poorest to be able borrow small sums easily refundable to improve their living conditions.
I think that the action of Muhammad Yumus is an example that everyone should follow. Each person should in his life of everyday to make actions to fight against poverty and misery to help the poorest. His action made me realize the importance of solidarity throughout the world. I encourage my family and friends often to make donations to organizations that help the most disadvantaged. If everyone takes example such Muhammad Yumus, and carries out actions in solidarity, we will live in a better world.
Reste t-il des erreurs que je dois corriger ?
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de chrislondon, postée le 02-05-2008 à 16:45:10 (S | E)
Bonjour,
C'est très bien, juste ces phrases:
Je dirais: in his everyday life......
to take action...
I often encourage....
If everyone took.... as an example and carried out..... 2nd conditional...we would live in a better world.
Your text is really very well done and these are small points.
Best Wishes
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de mascol, postée le 02-05-2008 à 17:22:27 (S | E)
Ok, merci de m'avoir aidé à me corriger.
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Modifié par mascol le 02-05-2008 17:23
Réponse: Muhammad Yunus (correction) de denia57, postée le 05-05-2008 à 14:58:15 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Je ne sais pas si le devoir est déjà rendue mais je tente quand même:
for having founded= for having found (to find, found, found) -ed est pour les verbes irréguliers, toi tu as mixé les deux...
to be able borrow = to be able to borrow , je pense
I encourage my family and friends often = often après le sujet I
to make donations = to donate
If everyone takes example such Muhammad Yumus: If everyone takes MY's example
Tu nous diras combien tu as eu...
Good luck
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