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Carol (correction)
Message de anays_ posté le 27-09-2008 à 17:41:42 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
Je n'ai pas un haut niveau en Anglais et je dois faire une courte description sur un personnage nommée Carol.
Le problème et que: il doit y avoir beaucoup de fautes et je dois utiliser des pronoms relatifs mais je n'ai pas su et pas trouvé ou les placer. Pouvez-vous m'aider ?
Je vous remercie d'avance !!

Firstly, her name is Carol and she is born in France. She left sixteen years ago, she want to Boston with her family. She go in high school who in Boston. She studies in NOtherstern University, she is in 2 bachelor’s degrees in biology and environmental engineering and « il lui reste 1 an d’étude ».
Secondly, she travelled, she maid journey to the USA, Canada and Alaska and she was obliged to hitchhike because she had no money . Eventually, as regards USA, she learned and to jorns a womans cooperative. In a nutshell, she is delibarate.
To conclude, she had a bit nervous, she didn’t speak spanish !!!

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Réponse: Carol (correction) de anays_, postée le 27-09-2008 à 18:30:40 (S | E)
Her name is Carol and she was born in France. She left sixteen years ago, she wants to in Boston with her family. She goes high school who is in Boston. She studies in NOtherstern University, she is in 2 bachelor’s degrees in biology and environmental engineering and « il lui reste 1 an d’étude ».
She travelled, she maids journey to the USA, Canada and Alaska and she was obliged to hitchhike because she had no money . Eventually, as regards USA, she learned and to jorns a womans cooperative (je voulais dire qu'elle apprend et qu'elle fait parti d'une coopérative de femme). In a nutshell, she is delibarate.
She have a bit nervous, she doesn’t speak spanish !!!

Réponse: Carol (correction) de intrepid34, postée le 27-09-2008 à 22:27:22 (S | E)
Perhaps a little suggestion: ..........

Passive Preterit : She was born in France. ....... she went to Boston with her family and attended a high school in Boston. She is studying Biology and Enviromentanl Engineering at Northern University, and is in the second year of a 3 year course for her Bachelor's Degree.

She had to hitch hike through the USA, Canada and Alaska because of lack of money. She learned a lot and now belongs to a Women's Group. She is someone who is very independant.

Après ça, je ne comprends pas la connection entre cette fille qui est nerveuse et ne parle pas espagnole. Que faccio?

Please enlighten and I shall try to help you.
*Intrepid

Réponse: Carol (correction) de dolfy2008, postée le 10-10-2008 à 10:16:06 (S | E)
son nom est carol et elle travail comme ménagère en france.Elle a 16 ans,elle veut aller vivre à boston avec sa famille. le reste je ferai des recherches pour toi

Réponse: Carol (correction) de pascus, postée le 26-10-2008 à 09:25:14 (S | E)
Hi, I have read the other response and have to give some correction. (voici mes corrections)

- she went to Boston with her family and attended a high school in Boston
Correction: She went to Boston with her family where she attended high school.

- She is studying Biology and Enviromentanl Engineering at Northern University, and is in the second year of a 3 year course for her Bachelor's Degree.
Correction: She is now studying Biology and Enviromental Engineering at Northwestern University......

- She had to hitch hike through the USA, Canada and Alaska because of lack of money. She learned a lot and now belongs to a Women's Group. She is someone who is very independant.
Correction: During her travel journey she had to hitchhike due to lack of money. She went to the US, Canada and Alaska. She learned a lot and now belongs to a Women's Group. She has become an strong independent woman.

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