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Message de sophie35235 posté le 27-11-2008 à 15:09:41
sophie35235 le 27-11-2008 16:22
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Message de sophie35235 posté le 27-11-2008 à 15:09:41
sophie35235 le 27-11-2008 16:22
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Modifié par bridg le 27-11-2008 16:39
Ce membre a eu l'irrespect d'effacer le contenu de son topic après avoir lu les réponses et ce sans remercier les professaeurs l'ayant aidée.
Elle ne pourra plus poster sur les forums.
Merci à ceux qui l'on aidée.
Topic fermé.
Réponse: Essay d'anglais de ariette, postée le 27-11-2008 à 16:04:54
quelques commentaires :
des répétitions dans la première phrase 'family, life, important'
Je ne comprends pas le sens de la dernière, qui doit laisser le lecteur sur une bonne impression
cas possessif (the members of a family)relationship -relations-
divorce for broken marriage
aux prépositions for (to)have come custody ??? sens ?
a source of conflict
would like their children to...
entraîner => lead to...
the take of drugs = drug addiction
3° paragraph
superbon courage
Réponse: Essay d'anglais de violet91, postée le 27-11-2008 à 16:21:45
Family life is very important because a happy family life is the most important thing to contribute to the happiness of the family members. It is a well-known fact that their relationchip must be respectful, peaceful and friendly. However it’s very often difficult to have good relations in a family.
First, I would say that a broken marriage*** is not very good to the hapiness of the children **Because parents will fight over the children's custody and will criticize each other in front of them. Children feel guilty and believe they must choose** take sides. On the other hand, I think multiracial couples are quite liable to have a happy family life, because their family gives them the opportunity of discovering other cultures and traditions. Thus, they are more tolerant and understanding and they easily accept that their children should choose to have new ways of life. Nevertheless I guess that if the differences are too important – religious differences in particular – they may become a conflict. Parents must be respectful and friendly with their children but they must also supervise them.
Teenagers often have arguments with their parents because parents would like that their children to succeed at school and become serious whereas teenagers would like to have fun and go to parties. This generation gap lead to delinquency and drug addiction because the young generation feels disheartened. A teenager must never forget filial love and he must respect his parents for that love.
I believe that grandparents have to play an important part in the upbringing of their grandchildren. Indeed Grandparents should be asked for advice when necessary because they can share their valuable experience of life with their grandchildren and give them priceless advice. Moreover, grandparents have the advantages of being older without the drawbacks: they can be affectionate and loving without being strict. That's the parents’role.
Finally, it’s important that families supported themselves through painful times. That shows the most important thing for everyone is the family.
Certaines phrases sont à retoucher un peu..préférer la forme toujours pleine dans un essay de cette "tenue". Cheers!..
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