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Message de graph-girl posté le 11-12-2008 à 19:43:34 (S | E | F)
Re-Bonjour à tous!
Oui, je sais je demande beaucoup de corrections...
Je fais "Section Européenne" dans mon collège, & j'ai beaucoup de devoirs en plus, sous forme de sketch/résumés/rédactions...
Pourriez vous une nouvelle fois m'aider à voir mes erreurs ? :O


Sketch :
Une jeune fille souhaitant devenir « Au-Pair » a un entretien chez une famille anglaise…



Pauline ringing the bell.
- I’m coming!
- Hello, you are Miss Bredi, aren’t you?
- No, no, I’m Queen Elizabeth - -‘
You’re stupid! It’s me, Miss Bredi. Pauline Breeeeedi.
- I know you’ve got to have a sense of humor… I’m Christie Gertrude Marilyn Kennedy.
Come in! I had a good impression on the phone.
- Really? I’m surprising. What do you think about me?
I’ve a question… John Kennedy was a member of your family?!
- No… You know, there are a lot of families who have this name…
Come into the dining-room.
- Ok…
- Every girl I had on the phone was C-R-A-Z-Y…
- Oh! I’m note crazy! I’m 2o, I live in Paris, I’m French…
- What a beautiful town!
- Oh yeah. I was born on the 1st of May 1988. Have you got any questions?
- Yes, a lot. I want to know EVERYTHING. Where do you live exactly? What’s your phone number?
- I live at 1o; rue de la Paix in Paris. My phone number’s o6.67.58.29.1o. Do you want my email address? It’s ***@****pour votre sécurité, les adresses emails sont interdites sur le site, merci de communiquer par messages privés****
your level of English?
- I’m quite good at English.
- Did you get married? What’s your religion?
- Oh no, I’m single. I’m catholic.
- What’s your profession?
- I did a lot of profession.
- Can you prepare me you Curriculum Vite?
- What?
- Your CV! I’m going to the kitchen to search cakes, I’ll be back.
Pauline prepares her CV with a lipstick…
- I’m back!
- This is my CV.









- Ok… I’m reading here you were a hairdresser, a graphic designer… for dogs?! A teacher for deaf, a mime artist for blinds…
- Yeahh, I worked a lot.
- Are you sure you will be able to keep my children?
- Yeah! I could keep my dog, but he died 3 days after…
- Oh, poor dog!
- Yeah, but that’s the life!
- What are you parents’ professions? Have you got any brothers or sisters?
- I don’t know. I ran away when I was 15. I’ve got 2 brothers and 3 sisters, but I don’t know if my parents had more children after my depart.
- Humm… Why did you leave?
- My mother didn’t buy my IPhone so I left.
- Ok…! I’ve more questions for you. Can you swim?
- No, sorry. I’ve never been to the swimming-pool.
- Uh! Can you cook?
- Just spaghettis.
- Do you smoke? Do you take any drugs? Do you drink alcohol?
- I smoke every day. I love crack-cocaine! And I drink vodka, whisky, beer and more… Do you drink with me?
- Oh No! Never! I don’t want my children to drink, to take drugs and to smoke! Sorry, I think you’re not the right person to take care of my children…
- You’re sure? I’m a very good Nanny!
- Yes, I’m sure… Thank you very much. Bye!
- You know, you fail anything!
- No, no… Bye!!
After Pauline’s depart, Christie’s demoralise…
- She’s crazy too… Where can I found the good nanny, the nanny of my dreams?



Le numéro de téléphone & l'adresse email n'est pas la notre, c'est une inventée ;)

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de linsey34, postée le 11-12-2008 à 20:25:05 (S | E)
Dear graph-girl,

voici les erreurs relevées:

Pauline ringing the bell.
- I’m coming!
- Hello, you are Miss Bredi, aren’t you?
- No, no, I’m Queen Elizabeth - -‘
You’re stupid! It’s me, Miss Bredi. Pauline Breeeeedi.
- I know you’ve got to have a sense of humor… I’m Christie Gertrude Marilyn Kennedy.
Come in! I had a good impression on the phone.
- Really? I’m surprising. What do you think about me?
I’ve a question… John Kennedy was a member of your family?!
- No… You know, there are a lot of families who have this name…
Come into the dining-room.
- Ok…
- Every girl I had on the phone was C-R-A-Z-Y…
- Oh! I’m note crazy! I’m 2o, I live in Paris, I’m French…
- What a beautiful town!
- Oh yeah. I was born on the 1st of May 1988. Have you got any questions?
- Yes, a lot. I want to know EVERYTHING. Where do you live exactly? What’s your phone number?
- I live at 1o; rue de la Paix in Paris. My phone number’s o6.67.58.29.1o. Do you want my email address? It’s ***@****pour votre sécurité, les adresses emails sont interdites sur le site, merci de communiquer par messages privés****
votre sécurité, les adresses emails sont interdites sur le site, merci de communiquer par messages privés****
your level of English?
- I’m quite good at English.
- Did you get married? What’s your religion?
- Oh no, I’m single. I’m catholic.
- What’s your profession?
- I did a lot of profession.- Can you prepare me you Curriculum Vite?
- What?
- Your CV! I’m going to the kitchen to search cakes, I’ll be back.
Pauline prepares her CV with a lipstick…
- I’m back!
- This is my CV.









- Ok… I’m reading here you were a hairdresser, a graphic designer… for dogs?! A teacher for deaf, a mime artist for blinds…
- Yeahh, I worked a lot.
- Are you sure you will be able to keep my children?
- Yeah! I could keep my dog, but he died 3 days after…
- Oh, poor dog!
- Yeah, but that’s the life!
- What are you parents’ professions? Have you got any brothers or sisters?
- I don’t know. I ran away when I was 15. I’ve got 2 brothers and 3 sisters, but I don’t know if my parents had more children after my depart.
- Humm… Why did you leave?
- My mother didn’t buy my IPhone so I left.
- Ok…! I’ve more questions for you. Can you swim?
- No, sorry. I’ve never been to the swimming-pool.
- Uh! Can you cook?
- Just spaghettis.
- Do you smoke? Do you take any drugs? Do you drink alcohol?
- I smoke every day. I love crack-cocaine! And I drink vodka, whisky, beer and more… Do you drink with me?
- Oh No! Never! I don’t want my children to drink, to take drugs and to smoke! Sorry, I think you’re not the right person to take care of my children…
- You’re sure? I’m a very good Nanny!
- Yes, I’m sure… Thank you very much. Bye!
- You know, you fail anything!
- No, no… Bye!!
After Pauline’s depart, Christie’s demoralise…
- She’s crazy too… Where can I found the good nanny, the nanny of my dreams?

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de graph-girl, postée le 12-12-2008 à 18:10:05 (S | E)
Pauline ringing the bell.
- I’m coming!
- Hello, you are Miss Bredi, aren’t you?
- No, no, I’m Queen Elizabeth - -‘
You’re stupid! It’s me, Miss Bredi. Pauline Breeeeedi.
- I know you’ve got to have a sense of humor… I’m Christie Gertrude Marilyn Kennedy.
Come in! I had a good impression on the phone.
- Really? I’m surprise?. What do you think about me?
I’ve a question… John Kennedy is ? a member of your family?!
- No… You know, there are a lot of families who have this name…
Come into the dining-room.
- Ok…
- Every girl I had on the phone was C-R-A-Z-Y…
- Oh! I’m not crazy! I’m 2o, I live in Paris, I’m French…
- What a beautiful town!
- Oh yeah. I was born on the 1st of May 1988. Have you got any questions?
- Yes, a lot. I want to know EVERYTHING. Where do you live exactly? What’s your phone number?
- I live at 1o; rue de la Paix in Paris. My phone number’s o6.67.58.29.1o. Do you want my email address? It’s AdresseEmailauHasard
- What's your level of English?
- I’m quite good at English.
- Did you get married? What’s your religion?
- Oh no, I’m single. I’m catholic.
- What’s your job?
- I had a lot of job.
- Can you prepare me you Curriculum Vite?
- What?
- Your CV! I’m going to the kitchen to search cakes, I’ll be back.
Pauline prepares her CV with a lipstick…
- I’m back!
- This is my CV.
- Ok… I’m reading here you were a hairdresser, a graphic designer… for dogs?! A teacher for deaf, a mime artist for blind…
- Yeahh, I worked a lot.
- Are you sure you will be able to keep my children?
- Yeah! I could keep my dog, but he died 3 days after…
- Oh, poor dog!
- Yeah, but that’s life!
- What are you parents’ job? Have you got any brothers or sisters?
- I don’t know. I ran away when I was 15. I’ve got 2 brothers and 3 sisters, but I don’t know if my parents had more children after my depart.
- Humm… Why did you leave?
- My mother didn’t buy a IPhone so I left.
- Ok…! I’ve more questions for you. Can you swim?
- No, sorry. I’ve never been to the swimming-pool.
- Uh! Can you cook?
- Just spaghettis.
- Do you smoke? Do you take any drugs? Do you drink alcohol?
- I smoke every day. I love crack-cocaine! And I drink vodka, whisky, beer and more… Would you drink with me?
- Oh No! Never! I don’t want my children to drink, to take drugs or to smoke! Sorry, I think you’re not the right person to take care of my children…
- Are you sure? I’m a very good Nanny!
- Yes, I’m sure… Thank you very much. Bye!
- You know, you [Je ne sais pas comment traduire "vous perdez quelque chose"]!
- No, no… Bye!!
After Pauline’s departure?, Christie’s demoralise…
- She’s crazy too… Where can I find the good nanny, the nanny of my dreams?

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Modifié par graph-girl le 12-12-2008 18:10

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de intrepid34, postée le 13-12-2008 à 08:53:39 (S | E)
Good morning!

Lindsey is doing a great job. However, one suggestion that seems to be baffling you both- how about for.......perdre qqchose :
"Oh well, you can't win 'em all!" or "Win some, lose some!"

Intrepid

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de graph-girl, postée le 13-12-2008 à 16:13:39 (S | E)
Mercii :D

- I’m coming!
- Hello, you are Miss Bredi, aren’t you?
- No, no, I’m Queen Elizabeth - -‘
You’re stupid! It’s me, Miss Bredi. Pauline Breeeeedi.
- I know you’ve got to have a sense of humor… I’m Christie Gertrude Marilyn Kennedy.
Come in! I had a good impression on the phone.
- Really? I’m surprise?. What do you think about me?
I’ve a question… John Kennedy is ? a member of your family?!
- No… You know, there are a lot of families who have this name…
Come into the dining-room.
- Ok…
- Every girl I had on the phone was C-R-A-Z-Y…
- Oh! I’m not crazy! I’m 2o, I live in Paris, I’m French…
- What a beautiful town!
- Oh yeah. I was born on the 1st of May 1988. Have you got any questions?
- Yes, a lot. I want to know EVERYTHING. Where do you live exactly? What’s your phone number?
- I live at 1o; rue de la Paix in Paris. My phone number’s o6.67.58.29.1o. Do you want my email address? It’s AdresseEmailauHasard
- What's your level of English?
- I’m quite good at English.
- Did you get married? What’s your religion?
- Oh no, I’m single. I’m catholic.
- What’s your job?
- I had a lot of job.
- Can you prepare me you Curriculum Vite?
- What?
- Your CV! I’m going to the kitchen to search cakes, I’ll be back.
Pauline prepares her CV with a lipstick…
- I’m back!
- This is my CV.
- Ok… I’m reading here you were a hairdresser, a graphic designer… for dogs?! A teacher for deaf, a mime artist for blind…
- Yeahh, I worked a lot.
- Are you sure you will be able to keep my children?
- Yeah! I could keep my dog, but he died 3 days after…
- Oh, poor dog!
- Yeah, but that’s life!
- What are you parents’ job? Have you got any brothers or sisters?
- I don’t know. I ran away when I was 15. I’ve got 2 brothers and 3 sisters, but I don’t know if my parents had more children after my depart.
- Humm… Why did you leave?
- My mother didn’t buy a IPhone so I left.
- Ok…! I’ve more questions for you. Can you swim?
- No, sorry. I’ve never been to the swimming-pool.
- Uh! Can you cook?
- Just spaghettis.
- Do you smoke? Do you take any drugs? Do you drink alcohol?
- I smoke every day. I love crack-cocaine! And I drink vodka, whisky, beer and more… Would you drink with me?
- Oh No! Never! I don’t want my children to drink, to take drugs or to smoke! Sorry, I think you’re not the right person to take care of my children…
- Are you sure? I’m a very good Nanny!
- Yes, I’m sure… Thank you very much. Bye!
- You know, Win some, lose some!
- No, no… Bye!!
After Pauline’s departure?, Christie’s demoralise…
- She’s crazy too… Where can I find the good nanny, the nanny of my dreams?


Normalement c'est bon...Pourriez vous corriger svp?

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de linsey34, postée le 14-12-2008 à 00:02:04 (S | E)
Dear graph-girl,

"je suis surprise" = I'm surprised (participe passé)
Tu poses une question donc inverse le sujet et le verbe !
Was Kennedy...?
- I had a lot of jobs.
after my depart
départ = departure or "after I left"
- My mother didn’t buy a IPhone so I left.
didn't buy me an I-Phone

Christie’s demoralise…
Christie became demoralized

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de graph-girl, postée le 14-12-2008 à 12:31:51 (S | E)
- I’m coming!
- Hello, you are Miss Bredi, aren’t you?
- No, no, I’m Queen Elizabeth - -‘
You’re stupid! It’s me, Miss Bredi. Pauline Breeeeedi.
- I know you’ve got to have a sense of humor… I’m Christie Gertrude Marilyn Kennedy.
Come in! I had a good impression on the phone.
- Really? I’m surprised. What do you think about me?
I’ve a question… Was John Kennedy a member of your family?!
- No… You know, there are a lot of families who have this name…
Come into the dining-room.
- Ok…
- Every girl I had on the phone was C-R-A-Z-Y…
- Oh! I’m not crazy! I’m 2o, I live in Paris, I’m French…
- What a beautiful town!
- Oh yeah. I was born on the 1st of May 1988. Have you got any questions?
- Yes, a lot. I want to know EVERYTHING. Where do you live exactly? What’s your phone number?
- I live at 1o; rue de la Paix in Paris. My phone number’s o6.67.58.29.1o. Do you want my email address? It’s AdresseEmailauHasard
- What's your level of English?
- I’m quite good at English.
- Did you get married? What’s your religion?
- Oh no, I’m single. I’m catholic.
- What’s your job?
- I had a lot of jobs.
- Can you prepare me you Curriculum Vite?
- What?
- Your CV! I’m going to the kitchen to search cakes, I’ll be back.
Pauline prepares her CV with a lipstick…
- I’m back!
- This is my CV.
- Ok… I’m reading here you were a hairdresser, a graphic designer… for dogs?! A teacher for deaf, a mime artist for blind…
- Yeahh, I worked a lot.
- Are you sure you will be able to keep my children?
- Yeah! I could keep my dog, but he died 3 days after…
- Oh, poor dog!
- Yeah, but that’s life!
- What are you parents’ job? Have you got any brothers or sisters?
- I don’t know. I ran away when I was 15. I’ve got 2 brothers and 3 sisters, but I don’t know if my parents had more children after I left.
- Humm… Why did you leave?
- My mother didn’t buy me an IPhone so I left.
- Ok…! I’ve more questions for you. Can you swim?
- No, sorry. I’ve never been to the swimming-pool.
- Uh! Can you cook?
- Just spaghettis.
- Do you smoke? Do you take any drugs? Do you drink alcohol?
- I smoke every day. I love crack-cocaine! And I drink vodka, whisky, beer and more… Would you drink with me?
- Oh No! Never! I don’t want my children to drink, to take drugs or to smoke! Sorry, I think you’re not the right person to take care of my children…
- Are you sure? I’m a very good Nanny!
- Yes, I’m sure… Thank you very much. Bye!
- You know, Win some, lose some!
- No, no… Bye!!
After Pauline’s departure, Christie became demoralized…
- She’s crazy too… Where can I find the good nanny, the nanny of my dreams?

Merci (L)

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Réponse: Sketch Section Européenne de linsey34, postée le 17-12-2008 à 14:15:51 (S | E)
Hi back !

just one thing:

What are you parents’ job?

What is your parents' job?

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