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School of the future
Message de charlemagne91 posté le 19-02-2009 à 12:26:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pour la rentrée j'ai un travail de rédaction: imaginer une école dans le futur. J'ai fait ce que j'ai pu, est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon texte car je pense qu'il y a pas mal de petites fautes ? merci d'avance.
The wonderful school of the future.
I will talk about school of the future
The real school is sometimes boring. In this project, we will improve the educative system and add a lot of things.
In the first, the timetable will be very good. We start school at 10 O clock and finish at 15 h 30.
If we want, we will breakfast with our friend.
They won’t have notebook. The student will have their computer.
If the weather is nice, we will arrive at school with animals.
They will be a local of cycle and stables.
In summer we will go to the swimming pool, and in winter to the skating rink.
In the court, there will be a skate park, some fountains. The break will be long.
For the cours, we will choose matters and teachers!
We will go In small groups in ateliers. We will eat at the school’s restaurants (French, Chinese and Spanish).
The afternoon, we will make film and theatre; speak in internet with English or German peoples.
In the end of afternoon, we will not have homework for the after day, when we bring at home.
So , this school will be perfect but a little expensive!
I forget a detail: teachers and students will have holiday during 3 months.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-02-2009 12:31
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Message de charlemagne91 posté le 19-02-2009 à 12:26:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pour la rentrée j'ai un travail de rédaction: imaginer une école dans le futur. J'ai fait ce que j'ai pu, est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon texte car je pense qu'il y a pas mal de petites fautes ? merci d'avance.
The wonderful school of the future.
I will talk about school of the future
The real school is sometimes boring. In this project, we will improve the educative system and add a lot of things.
In the first, the timetable will be very good. We start school at 10 O clock and finish at 15 h 30.
If we want, we will breakfast with our friend.
They won’t have notebook. The student will have their computer.
If the weather is nice, we will arrive at school with animals.
They will be a local of cycle and stables.
In summer we will go to the swimming pool, and in winter to the skating rink.
In the court, there will be a skate park, some fountains. The break will be long.
For the cours, we will choose matters and teachers!
We will go In small groups in ateliers. We will eat at the school’s restaurants (French, Chinese and Spanish).
The afternoon, we will make film and theatre; speak in internet with English or German peoples.
In the end of afternoon, we will not have homework for the after day, when we bring at home.
So , this school will be perfect but a little expensive!
I forget a detail: teachers and students will have holiday during 3 months.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-02-2009 12:31
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Réponse: School of the future de linsey34, postée le 19-02-2009 à 13:16:59 (S | E)
Dear Charlemagne,
en rouge les erreurs à corriger:
The wonderful school of the future.
I will talk about school of the future
the school of the future / school in the future
The real school is sometimes boring. In this project, we will improve the educative system and add a lot of things.
In the first, the timetable will be very good. We start temps? school at 10 O' clock and finish at 15 h 30. 3.30 pm
If we want, we will breakfast verbe? with our friends.
They won’t have notebooks. The students will have their computer.
If the weather is nice, we will arrive at school with animals.
They will be a local of cycle and stables.
In summer we will go to the swimming pool, and in winter to the skating rink.
In the court, there will be a skate park, some fountains. The break will be long.
For the cours, we will choose matters and teachers!
We will go In small groups in ateliers. We will eat at the school’s restaurants (French, Chinese and Spanish).
In the afternoon, we will make films and theatre; speak in internet with English or German peoples.
In the end of afternoon, we will not have homework for the after day, when we bring at home.
So , this school will be perfect but a little expensive!
I forget a detail: teachers and students will have holiday during 3 months.
Réponse: School of the future de ariette, postée le 19-02-2009 à 13:45:43 (S | E)
I was just wondering...
Do you think teachers are still welcome ? wouldn't it be better without, in this ideal school ?
Have you ever thought of getting rid of them ?
Do you think teachers will disappear in the future school ?
just a little food for thought !
Réponse: School of the future de charlemagne91, postée le 19-02-2009 à 13:58:36 (S | E)
Thank you very much
Réponse: School of the future de charlemagne91, postée le 19-02-2009 à 14:13:26 (S | E)
So,
I have correct my mistakes
The wonderful school of the future.
I will talk about school in the future
The real school is sometimes boring. In this project, we will improve the educative system and add a lot of things.
First, the timetable will be very good. We start at 10 O' clock and finish at 3.30 pm.
If we want, we will have a breakfast with our friends.
There won’t have notebooks. The students will have their computer.
If the weather is nice, we will arrive at school with animals.
There will be a local of cycle and stables.
In summer we will go to the swimming pool, and in winter to the skating rink.
In the playground, there will be a skate park, some fountains. The break will be long.
For the cours, we will choose matters and teachers!
We will go In small groups in ateliers. We will eat at the school’s restaurants (French, Chinese and Spanish).
On afternoon, we will make films and drama; speak on internet with English or German peoples.
On evening, we will not have homework for tomorrow, when we bring at home.
So , this school will be perfect but a little expensive!
I forget a detail: teachers and students will have holiday during 3 months.
en rose les erreurs que je n'ai pas trouvé. Merci de votre aide.
Réponse: School of the future de linsey34, postée le 19-02-2009 à 14:34:16 (S | E)
En rouge les erreurs
en bleu ma proposition
The wonderful school of the future.
I will talk about school in the future
The real school is sometimes boring. In this project, we will improve the educative system and add a lot of things.
First, the timetable will be very good. We will start at 10 O' clock and finish at 3.30 pm.
If we want, we will have
There won’t
If the weather is nice, we will arrive at school with animals.
There will be a local of cycle for bikes and stables.
In the summer we will go to the swimming pool, and in winter to the skating rink.
In the playground, there will be a skate park, some fountains. The break will be long.
For
We will go In small groups in ateliers. We will eat at the school’s restaurants (French, Chinese and Spanish).
On In the afternoon, we will make films and drama; speak on the internet with English or German people
On In the evening, we will not have homework for tomorrow the day after, when we bring at home.
when we go back home? Is that what you mean??
So , this school will be perfect but a little expensive!
I forget have forgotten a detail: teachers and students will have holiday during 3 months.
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Modifié par linsey34 le 19-02-2009 14:35
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Modifié par linsey34 le 19-02-2009 14:35
Réponse: School of the future de charlemagne91, postée le 19-02-2009 à 14:41:44 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour toute votre aide.