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Message de nija posté le 20-02-2009 à 14:19:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous, j'ai besoin d'une aide, j'apprends encore l'anglais mais j'ai un exposé à préparer. J'ai déjà fait un effort pour exprimer mes opinions sur le sujet et j'ai essayé ce texte. Je demande une correction. Voici le texte.
Je vous remercie d'avance
UNEMPLOYMENT
We can define that unemployment happens when a person who’s available to work is without job.
There are several causes of unemployment and there are two types about it: voluntary unemployment and involuntary unemployment.
Voluntary unemployment is qualified to the individual's decisions; a person is unemployed in case he doesn’t find any employer accepts the conditions which he requires.
Whereas involuntary unemployment is structural and unemployment is largely involuntary.
At first, unemployment depends generally to the situation socioeconomic of the nation and to the government program of politico-economic.
It is chronic unemployment because there are imbalances between the skills of workers in the job market and the needs of employers, a disparity between workers looking for jobs and the vacancies available. In this case, the unemployed workers lack the specific skills required for the jobs, or the job which they find is located too far from their usual residence even necessary to move whole family.
The principal problem is the insufficiency or unavailability of professional training center to provide training so that the needs for job can be demanded.
On the other hand there is also unemployment after closing of some establishment caused by a sociopolitical event or by a bad management, the laid employees become unemployed.
The consequences of unemployment are very much:
During a long period of unemployment, workers can lose their skills and their abilities.
Unemployment can cause underemployment because the worker accepts even a job which does not correspond to his skills and capacity for the reason that it must work to be nourished.
The results of unemployment may increase poverty.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-02-2009 14:22
titre complété + minuscules
Message de nija posté le 20-02-2009 à 14:19:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous, j'ai besoin d'une aide, j'apprends encore l'anglais mais j'ai un exposé à préparer. J'ai déjà fait un effort pour exprimer mes opinions sur le sujet et j'ai essayé ce texte. Je demande une correction. Voici le texte.
Je vous remercie d'avance
UNEMPLOYMENT
We can define that unemployment happens when a person who’s available to work is without job.
There are several causes of unemployment and there are two types about it: voluntary unemployment and involuntary unemployment.
Voluntary unemployment is qualified to the individual's decisions; a person is unemployed in case he doesn’t find any employer accepts the conditions which he requires.
Whereas involuntary unemployment is structural and unemployment is largely involuntary.
At first, unemployment depends generally to the situation socioeconomic of the nation and to the government program of politico-economic.
It is chronic unemployment because there are imbalances between the skills of workers in the job market and the needs of employers, a disparity between workers looking for jobs and the vacancies available. In this case, the unemployed workers lack the specific skills required for the jobs, or the job which they find is located too far from their usual residence even necessary to move whole family.
The principal problem is the insufficiency or unavailability of professional training center to provide training so that the needs for job can be demanded.
On the other hand there is also unemployment after closing of some establishment caused by a sociopolitical event or by a bad management, the laid employees become unemployed.
The consequences of unemployment are very much:
During a long period of unemployment, workers can lose their skills and their abilities.
Unemployment can cause underemployment because the worker accepts even a job which does not correspond to his skills and capacity for the reason that it must work to be nourished.
The results of unemployment may increase poverty.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-02-2009 14:22
titre complété + minuscules
Réponse: Unemployment/correction de azer3, postée le 20-02-2009 à 16:59:37 (S | E)
Bonjour,
We can define that unemployment happens/tu peux choisir un autre verbe/ when a person who’s available to work is without job.
There are several causes of unemployment and there are two types about/on dit pas two types about it mais plutôt two types...it/it: voluntary unemployment and involuntary unemployment.
Voluntary unemployment is qualified to the individual's decisions; a person is unemployed in case he doesn’t find any employer/là ça manque quelque chose/ accepts the conditions which he requires.
Whereas involuntary unemployment is structural and unemployment is largely involuntary.
At first, unemployment depends generally to the situation socioeconomic/l'adjective se place avant le sujet/ of the nation and to the government program of politico-economic.
It is chronic unemployment because there are imbalances between the skills of workers in the job market and the needs of employers, a disparity between workers looking for jobs and the vacancies available. In this case, the unemployed workers lack the specific skills required for the jobs, or the job which they find is located too far from their usual residence even necessary to move whole family.
The principal problem is the insufficiency or /the/unavailability of professional training center to provide training so that the needs for job can be demanded.
On the other hand/virgule/ there is also unemployment after closing/the close/ of some establishment/au pluriel/ caused by a sociopolitical event or by a bad management, the laid employees become unemployed.
The consequences of unemployment are very much:
During a long period of unemployment, workers can lose their skills and their abilities.
Unemployment can cause underemployment because the worker accepts even a job which does not correspond to his skills and /his/capacity for the reason that it/he/ must work to be nourished.
/Also/The results of unemployment may increase poverty.
C'étaient quelques corrections mais il existe encore des fautes surtout de structuration et de formulation des phrases.
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Modifié par azer3 le 20-02-2009 17:00
Amicalement
Réponse: Unemployment/correction de pseudo, postée le 20-02-2009 à 19:04:55 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Quand dois-tu présenter ton exposé ? Car il y a pas mal de travail sur les plans grammatical et syntaxique. Le sens de certaines phrases également doit être revu. Enfin on reconnaît le mode d'expression français qu'il va falloir retravailler pour donner au texte la "consonnance" anglaise qu'il lui manque.
J'attends ta réponse au plus vite car j'aimerais pouvoir t'aider avant de partir en vacances...
Réponse: Unemployment/correction de pseudo, postée le 20-02-2009 à 19:08:04 (S | E)
oops! Je rectifie... "la consonnance anglaise qui lui manque".
Réponse: Unemployment/correction de azer3, postée le 25-02-2009 à 19:35:39 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Every one understand that unemployment happens when a person who's available to work is jobless.
There are several causes of unemployment and there are two types of it: Voluntary unemployment and Involuntary unemployment.
Voluntary unemployment is with relation of the individual's decisions, so a person is unemployed because he doesn't find any employer how accepts the conditions which he required.
Whereas, involuntary unemployment is structural and the unemployment is mostly voluntary.
firstly, the unemployment depends generally on the socioeconomic situation of the nation and on the government's politico-economic program.
Unemployment is chronic because there are deferences between the skills of the workers in the marketing and the employer's needs, and there is also a disparity between workers who are looking for a jobs and the available vacancies. In this case, the unemployed workers lack the specific skills required for the jobs, or the job which they find is located too far from their usual residence and they even become obliged to move their whole family.
The principal problem is the insufficiency or the unavailability of professional training center in order to provide training so that the needs for job can be demanded.
On the other hand, there is also some workers, who, after the close of some establishments for a socio political event, or by a bad management, they become jobless.
The unemployment consequences are very much:
During a long period of unemployment, workers can lose their skills and their abilities.
Unemployment can cause underemployment because the worker accepts even a job which does not correspond to his skills and his capacity for the reason that he must work to be nourished.
Also, unemployment may increase poverty.
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