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Correction rédaction sur la pollution
Message de chato posté le 10-03-2009 à 19:20:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pouvez vos me corriger ma rédaction s'il vous plait ? merci d'avance.
Voici ma rédaction:
The earth is in dangerous because there is the green house effect.
the inhabitants can help our planet if the inhabitants have got a car electric, the CFCs (gaz carbonique) decreases. If the inhabitants recycle their scrap, the nuclear waste decrease. If the inhabitants switch off the lamp, the nuclear energy decrease. If the inhabitants will take the public transport, less of car will circulate.
So, if every the inhabitants of the earth will protect the planet, we will save the nature.
Message de chato posté le 10-03-2009 à 19:20:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pouvez vos me corriger ma rédaction s'il vous plait ? merci d'avance.
Voici ma rédaction:
The earth is in dangerous because there is the green house effect.
the inhabitants can help our planet if the inhabitants have got a car electric, the CFCs (gaz carbonique) decreases. If the inhabitants recycle their scrap, the nuclear waste decrease. If the inhabitants switch off the lamp, the nuclear energy decrease. If the inhabitants will take the public transport, less of car will circulate.
So, if every the inhabitants of the earth will protect the planet, we will save the nature.
Réponse: Correction rédaction sur la pollution de laure95, postée le 11-03-2009 à 11:56:13 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici les erreurs à corriger:
The earth is in dangerous (mettre le nom) because there is (of) the green house effect.
the inhabitants can help our planet if the inhabitants (utilise 1 pronom pour éviter 1 répétition) have got a car electric (revois la place de l'adjectif accompagant 1 nom), the CFCs (gaz carbonique) decreases. If the inhabitants recycle their scrap, the nuclear waste decrease (pas le bon temps: if + présent, futur dans la 2é partie de la phrase). If the inhabitants switch off the lamp, the nuclear energy decrease. If the inhabitants will take the public transport, less of car will circulate.
So, if every the (choisi 1 des 2 mots)inhabitants of the earth will protect the planet, we will save
Réponse: Correction rédaction sur la pollution de hugotachini, postée le 11-03-2009 à 20:26:07 (S | E)
"Voici ma rédaction:
The earth is in dangerous danger because there is of the green house effect.
The inhabitants can help our planet if the inhabitants they have got car electric electric cars, the CFCs (gaz carbonique) decreases might/will decrease. If the inhabitants recycle their scrap, the nuclear waste decrease waste will decrease. If the inhabitants they switch off the lamp, the nuclear energy decrease. If the inhabitants they take the public transports, less of cars will circulate.
So, if every each of them the inhabitants of on the earth will protect the planet decides to protect the planet, we will all save the nature"
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