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Motivation for medicine/correction
Message de younes91 posté le 16-04-2009 à 18:40:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, je souhaite que vous me corrigiez cet extrait d'une lettre de motivation que j'ai écrite.
The choice I made in paragraph 5 is due to my motivation for medicine. I am interested in this field since my youth and I would like to acquire skills by solid studies at your university. On the other hand, medicine is a field at once exciting, mysterious and unlimited. In addition, being a doctor is a humanitarian employement, where we provide assistance to society. This is consistent with my personality: I am sociable and I want to be useful and beneficial to society.
Moreover, the openings (les débouchés) in this field are much sought-after.
Je vous remercie d'avance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-04-2009 18:45
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Message de younes91 posté le 16-04-2009 à 18:40:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, je souhaite que vous me corrigiez cet extrait d'une lettre de motivation que j'ai écrite.
The choice I made in paragraph 5 is due to my motivation for medicine. I am interested in this field since my youth and I would like to acquire skills by solid studies at your university. On the other hand, medicine is a field at once exciting, mysterious and unlimited. In addition, being a doctor is a humanitarian employement, where we provide assistance to society. This is consistent with my personality: I am sociable and I want to be useful and beneficial to society.
Moreover, the openings (les débouchés) in this field are much sought-after.
Je vous remercie d'avance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-04-2009 18:45
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Réponse: Motivation for medicine/correction de jean31, postée le 16-04-2009 à 18:56:03 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Quelques retouches en vert.
Bonne chance.
The choice I made in paragraph 5 is due to my motivation for medicine. I have been interested in this field since my younger days and I would like to acquire a deep knowledge through solid studies at your university. On the other hand, medicine is an exciting, mysterious and unlimited field. In addition, being a doctor is a humanitarian job by means of which we can give assistance to society. This is consistent with my personality: I am sociable and I want to be useful and beneficial to society.
Moreover, prospects in this field are much sought-after.
Réponse: Motivation for medicine/correction de younes91, postée le 16-04-2009 à 18:59:25 (S | E)
Merci Jean3 pour ta réponse rapide et très claire.
Réponse: Motivation for medicine/correction de jean31, postée le 16-04-2009 à 19:09:56 (S | E)
Avec plaisir.
Mais saurais-tu me dire par quelle mystérieuse intervention ce post a disparu du forum principal ?
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