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Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora
Message de emii3108 posté le 29-04-2009 à 18:33:21 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous,
Je dois réaliser une rédaction en anglais sur le lieu de nos rêves rédigé en "would+infinitif du verbe".
Je vous présente mon texte et je recherche des personnes qui auraient l'amabilité de jeter un oeil sur cette rédaction et me dire si , il y a des fautes notamment de grammaire ou de formulation.
Je vous remercie d'ore et déjà pour l'attention que vous m'accorderez.
If I had the oppurtunity. I would go to Bora-Bora. It's between Nouvelle Zélande and Amérique du Sud. It's in the French Polynesia but it's a island. The sea is blue. My ideal companion would can my twin sister. There, my means of transport would be on foot or on taxi to visit historical sites as temple. I would wear an skirt and tee-shirt or an dress because the weather is good and the sun is brillant. I would buy the souvenirs for my family and the special clothes.
On Bora-Bora, I would eat a special meal and I would drink a soda or a cofee.
My essential item would take with me is a camero. I would like to meet Kate Olsen. I would send a postcard for my mum and my dad. My perfect weekend would spoil if I would meet a bad people.
Message de emii3108 posté le 29-04-2009 à 18:33:21 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous,
Je dois réaliser une rédaction en anglais sur le lieu de nos rêves rédigé en "would+infinitif du verbe".
Je vous présente mon texte et je recherche des personnes qui auraient l'amabilité de jeter un oeil sur cette rédaction et me dire si , il y a des fautes notamment de grammaire ou de formulation.
Je vous remercie d'ore et déjà pour l'attention que vous m'accorderez.
If I had the oppurtunity. I would go to Bora-Bora. It's between Nouvelle Zélande and Amérique du Sud. It's in the French Polynesia but it's a island. The sea is blue. My ideal companion would can my twin sister. There, my means of transport would be on foot or on taxi to visit historical sites as temple. I would wear an skirt and tee-shirt or an dress because the weather is good and the sun is brillant. I would buy the souvenirs for my family and the special clothes.
On Bora-Bora, I would eat a special meal and I would drink a soda or a cofee.
My essential item would take with me is a camero. I would like to meet Kate Olsen. I would send a postcard for my mum and my dad. My perfect weekend would spoil if I would meet a bad people.
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de fezfzze, postée le 29-04-2009 à 19:02:50 (S | E)
hey.
on ne peut pas mettre deux modaux ensemble.
Donc my ideal partner would be my sister.
a skirt
the weather is fair
the sun is shining
and traditional clothes.
At bora bora
the essential item I would bring with me is ...
Send a poscard to
My perfect week end would be ruined if i meet nasty people.( pas deux fois would dans une meme phrase)
A+
Xavier
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de vigile, postée le 29-04-2009 à 19:09:52 (S | E)
"It would be great if i have the opportunity to go to Bora-Bora. It is an island in the french polynesia, which located between New Zeeland and South America. My ideal companian would be my twin sister. We would enjoy swiming in the blue sea and laying under the shining sun. We would wear skirts and T-shirts. We would visit the historical sites and temples on foot or by taxi. We would eat special meals and drink soda or cofee. I would take with me the camera so we can take some nice pictures of us and of the monuments of Bora-Bora. I would like to meet Kate Olsen and i would send a postcard to my parents whom i would not forget to bring them a souvenir and special colothes from Bora-Bora. I would not like to meet people who would spoil my journey in Bora-Bora."
i won't say that my text is perfect but i tried to re-write it otherwise. If it contains faults please correct it. And i hope you will understand when i use (I) and when i use (WE).
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de sarah1906, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:35:14 (S | E)
il y a beaucoup de fautes... a toi de trouver lesquelles!!!^^
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de emii3108, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:42:10 (S | E)
Bonsoir Sarah,
je me permet de vous adresser ce message car je ne sais pas à qui s'adresse votre message. C'est à propos de mon texte ou à propos du texte de vigile?
Merci d'avance.
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de sarah1906, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:47:36 (S | E)
à propos de celui de vigile, enfin selon moi, mais je ne suis pas bilingue j'apprends l'anglais tout comme toi alors il se peut que je me trompe...
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de sarah1906, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:49:28 (S | E)
escuse moi je viens de relire le texte de vigile et effectivement il n'y a pas de fautes, la synthaxe est excellente!
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de emii3108, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:49:32 (S | E)
D'accord.
Merci pour votre réponse ;).
à bientôt
Réponse: Correction-My dream is Bora-Bora de emii3108, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:49:38 (S | E)
D'accord.
Merci pour votre réponse ;).
à bientôt
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