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Correction Dubaï
Message de e0diie posté le 29-04-2009 à 18:54:14 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous, je suis étudiante dans l'option "Techniques sociales" et je possède des difficultés pour mon cours d'anglais. C'est pour cela, que j'aimerais que quelqu'un possède du temps à me consacrer pour la correction de mon texte. Je vous en remercie d'avance.
If, I had the opportunity, I would go to Dubaï. It's in the south-east of Belgium ???. It's in the United Arab Emirates. My ideal companion would be my boyfriend for this travel. There, I would get around on foot or on taxi. Because my hotel is near to the town centre. Often, I would wear light clothes because the temperature would be between 25° and 45°. I would buy the souvenirs for my family and of course, the news clothes. My essential items would take with me, would be my camera and my mobile phone. At Dubaï, I would eat speciality culinary. And I would drink wather for my diet. There, I would like to meet my friends but it would be impossible. Three day after my arrival, I would send a postcard to my family and my friends. And my perfect travel would spoil if I would see my enemy.
Je vous remercie encore une fois d'avance,
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Modifié par bridg le 29-04-2009 19:34
Message de e0diie posté le 29-04-2009 à 18:54:14 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous, je suis étudiante dans l'option "Techniques sociales" et je possède des difficultés pour mon cours d'anglais. C'est pour cela, que j'aimerais que quelqu'un possède du temps à me consacrer pour la correction de mon texte. Je vous en remercie d'avance.
If, I had the opportunity, I would go to Dubaï. It's in the south-east of Belgium ???. It's in the United Arab Emirates. My ideal companion would be my boyfriend for this travel. There, I would get around on foot or on taxi. Because my hotel is near to the town centre. Often, I would wear light clothes because the temperature would be between 25° and 45°. I would buy the souvenirs for my family and of course, the news clothes. My essential items would take with me, would be my camera and my mobile phone. At Dubaï, I would eat speciality culinary. And I would drink wather for my diet. There, I would like to meet my friends but it would be impossible. Three day after my arrival, I would send a postcard to my family and my friends. And my perfect travel would spoil if I would see my enemy.
Je vous remercie encore une fois d'avance,
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Modifié par bridg le 29-04-2009 19:34
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de emii3108, postée le 29-04-2009 à 20:51:48 (S | E)
Bonsoir chère amie ,
Je suis contente que tu t'es inscrite ici tout comme moi. J'espère que des personnes ayant plus de compétences de que moi et pourront jeter un oeil sur ta rédaction.
Bonne soirée et à demain
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de e0diie, postée le 30-04-2009 à 06:58:58 (S | E)
Bonjour, merci pour vos messages. Quelqu'un serait-il me dire comment puis-je traduire cette phrase: Dubaï se situe au sud-est de la Belgique.
Je vous remercie d'avance
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de laure95, postée le 30-04-2009 à 10:55:22 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici ce que tu dois corriger:
If, I had the opportunity, I would go to Dubaï. It's in the south-east of Belgium ???. It's (pour éviter la répétition de BE, tu peux utiliser IS LOCATED OU IS SUTUATED) in the United Arab Emirates. My ideal companion would be my boyfriend for this travel. There, I would get around on foot or on taxi. Because my hotel is (temps) near to the town centre. Often (mal placé), I would wear light clothes because the temperature would be between 25° and 45°. I would buy the (some) souvenirs for my family and of course, the news (jamais de "s" aux adjectifs) clothes. My essential items I would take with me, would be my camera and
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de e0diie, postée le 30-04-2009 à 15:40:07 (S | E)
Bonjour, je vous remercie énormément pour le temps et la correction que vous avez accordé à mon texte.
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de sadie72, postée le 30-04-2009 à 20:21:15 (S | E)
If (no comma needed here)I had the opportunity, I would go to Dubaï. It's in the south-east of Belgium ??? (are you sure???
It's in the United Arab Emirates. My ideal companion for this travel would be my boyfriend. There, I would get around on foot or by taxi( no need for a full stop here) because my hotel is near (without 'to') the town centre. (put your adverb 'often' between the modal 'would' and the verb)I would often wear light clothes because the temperature would be between 25° and 45°. I would buy (no need for a definite article) souvenirs for my family and of course, (again, no need for an article. Then, no 's' for adjectives in English) new clothes. The most necessary things I would take with me would be my ... My essential items would take with me, would be my camera and I hope this helps.
Réponse: Correction Dubaï de e0diie, postée le 30-04-2009 à 20:53:50 (S | E)
Bonsoir, je vous remercie énormément pour votre correction !
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