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Hope and glory - correction
Message de sylefmo posté le 05-05-2009 à 13:12:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour(s), aujourd'hui je vous soumets mon résumé en anglais sur un film bien connu "hope and glory".
J'aurais besoin de votre aide, pourm'aider dans corriger mes fautes d'anglais (je ne suis pas très très bon, et peut-être que quelques traductions du dictionnaire seront fausse).
Merci d'avance.
" Hope and glory " realized by John Boorman is a film for entertainment but also a film of memory which describes the war seen by a child of 7ans: Billy.
The film takes place in a suburb of London during the second world war. It stages Billy, a child whom the father left to the war and which shares its life between the school, the stupidities, and the air attacks.
His life does not seem to have so changed, even if after it.
His life does not seem to have so changed, even if after the destruction of its house, him and his family are obliged of moved to the country at his grandfather's home.
This film describes the life of the children during the war, which does not seem to be very different of them customs. The author in wanted to realize a documentary film about the behavior of the English during the war.
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Modifié par bridg le 05-05-2009 16:02
Message de sylefmo posté le 05-05-2009 à 13:12:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
J'aurais besoin de votre aide, pour
Merci d'avance.
" Hope and glory " realized by John Boorman is a film for entertainment but also a film of memory which describes the war seen by a child of 7ans: Billy.
The film takes place in a suburb of London during the second world war. It stages Billy, a child whom the father left to the war and which shares its life between the school, the stupidities, and the air attacks.
His life does not seem to have so changed, even if after it.
His life does not seem to have so changed, even if after the destruction of its house, him and his family are obliged of moved to the country at his grandfather's home.
This film describes the life of the children during the war, which does not seem to be very different of them customs. The author in wanted to realize a documentary film about the behavior of the English during the war.
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Modifié par bridg le 05-05-2009 16:02
Réponse: Hope and glory - correction de twista, postée le 05-05-2009 à 17:17:36 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Je t'a corrigé quelques fautes que je voyais comme ça mais je epux toujours en avoir manqué. Bonne chance !
" Hope and glory " realized by John Boorman is a film for entertainment but also a film of memory which describes the war seen by a child of 7ans (seven-year old child): Billy.
The film (story?) takes place in a suburb of London during the second world war. It stages Billy, a child whom the (whose) father left to the war and which (who) shares its (his) life between
(His life does not seem to have so changed, even if after it.)
His life does not seem to have
This film describes the life of
Réponse: Hope and glory - correction de sylefmo, postée le 05-05-2009 à 18:09:16 (S | E)
Voila ma correction, merci pour ton aide, effectivement j'ai fait beaucoup d'erreur d'inatention bête et méchante O_o !
" Hope and glory " realized by John Boorman is a film for entertainment but also a film of memory which describes the war seen by a seven-year old child: Bill Rowan.
The story takes place in a suburb of London during the second world war. It stages Billy, a child whose father left to the war and who shares his life between school, stupidities, and air attacks.
His life does not seem to have changed so much, even if after the destruction of them house , him and his family has obliged to moved to the country in his grandfather's home.
This film describes the life of the children during the war, which does not seem to be very different of them customs. The director wanted to make us realize the English haven't changed their behaviour during the war.
Réponse: Hope and glory - correction de brettdallen, postée le 05-05-2009 à 21:24:02 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Quelques corrections complémentaires..
" Hope and glory " realized(choisissez un autre verbe! vérifiez..) by John Boorman is a film for entertainment but also a film of memory which describes the war seen by a seven-year(-)old child: Bill Rowan.
The story takes place in a suburb of London during the second world war. It stages Billy, a child whose father left to the war and who shares his life between school, stupidities, and air attacks("raids").
His life does not seem to have changed so much, even if after the destruction of them house , him ("he")and his family has obliged(mauvais choix de verbe, et la structure doit être passive: "Be + Participe passé) to moved(après "To": BV ou -Ing, vous choissisez quoi?) to the country in his grandfather's home.
This film describes the life of the children during the war, which does not seem to be very different of them customs("de leurs habitudes"? à revoir..). The director wanted to make us
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