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Message de bobii971 posté le 09-09-2009 à 16:30:34 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir tout le monde.
Commme le dit le titre j'aurais besoin d'une correction.Merci d'avance.
My name is ...I was born on september 1th 1990,so I am 18 years old.I live in France at ... rue...My phone number is....I like doing sport, playing music(Piano or drum), reading and doing computer.
After my studies,I would like to become doctor.In last years, my level in english was enough good because in the first term (in 2nd), I had 9 in English and I evoluted, I had 12, and the last years in the last term I had 16 in English.
I have a twin brother.He is Johann.I already have left, when I have been schoolgirl we have gone in England in Houst Family(famille d'acceuil).We have visited the important monuments of England.
I am enough cheerfully, extrovert but serious when it is necessary.
I enjoy to look on television American movies, because in generally they are fascinating but I don't think that I already have seen many English movies.
At musical level,I liste all music style but especially raggae dance hall,reggea and another music of Caribbean.I am keen on reading books where are many actions and books where make reflect.I am fond of Albert Camus.
Thanks you..
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-09-2009 16:36
Message de bobii971 posté le 09-09-2009 à 16:30:34 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir tout le monde.
Commme le dit le titre j'aurais besoin d'une correction.Merci d'avance.
My name is ...I was born on september 1th 1990,so I am 18 years old.I live in France at ... rue...My phone number is....I like doing sport, playing music(Piano or drum), reading and doing computer.
After my studies,I would like to become doctor.In last years, my level in english was enough good because in the first term (in 2nd), I had 9 in English and I evoluted, I had 12, and the last years in the last term I had 16 in English.
I have a twin brother.He is Johann.I already have left, when I have been schoolgirl we have gone in England in Houst Family(famille d'acceuil).We have visited the important monuments of England.
I am enough cheerfully, extrovert but serious when it is necessary.
I enjoy to look on television American movies, because in generally they are fascinating but I don't think that I already have seen many English movies.
At musical level,I liste all music style but especially raggae dance hall,reggea and another music of Caribbean.I am keen on reading books where are many actions and books where make reflect.I am fond of Albert Camus.
Thanks you..
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-09-2009 16:36
Réponse: Correction/presentation in English de laure95, postée le 09-09-2009 à 18:35:06 (S | E)
Bonsoir, voici ce que tu dois reprendre:
My name is ...I was born on september 1th (th est utilisé à partir de 4) 1990,so I am 18 years old.I live in France at ... rue...My phone number is....I like doing (cherche 1 verbe + précis et nomme des sports) sport, playing music(the Piano or the drum), reading and doing (même remarque que plus haut) computer.
After my studies,I would like to become doctor (toujours l'article A/ AN devant les noms de métier).In last (mal dit) years, my level in english (majuscule) was enough (quite) good because in the first term (in 2nd), I had 9 in English and I evoluted, I had 12, and the last years ? in the last term I had 16 in English.
I have a twin brother.He is Johann (his name is...).I already have left (mal dit), when I have been (pourquoi le présent perfect?) a schoolgirl we have gone in England in Houst (orthographe) Family(famille d'acceuil).We have visited the important monuments of England.
I am enough cheerfully (adverbe), extrovert but serious when it is necessary.
I enjoy to look on (vocabulaire) television American movies, because in general
At musical level,I liste (faute de frappe?) all music style (pluriel) but especially raggae dance hall,reggea and another music of Caribbean.I am keen on reading books where (in which+ où est le sujet de are?)) are many actions and books where make reflect ?.I am fond of Albert Camus.
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