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Message de loupevivante posté le 17-09-2009 à 13:32:58
Hello,
Could you correct my text please?
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't seem to want to be there. That part of the world, which saw the evolution of the famous and immortal Beatles band, doesn't blow its own trumpet in spite of the rich and diversified history that it hides like a treasure showed little by little thanks to the castles and the publics gardens. Hid through all these attractions that represents United Kingdom, that geographical concept that includes England, Wale, Scotland and Northern Ireland, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.3
In the middle of those green lands covered by trees through which meander roads and rivers, was established, in 1279, a little town. In spite of the natural resources presented around them, which could have been use to develop some industries, the inhabitants of that place based their city on trade. So, it was as a market town that Hull was first knew. Effectively, its business, at that time, rose again the importing wool from monasteries activity. Because of the love he had for that welcoming and lively (busy) place, which was growing up as quickly as its trade activities did, the King Edward I decided to buy the town a few years after its foundation, in 1293, and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". As life works for century and century, time went by and the popularity of that locality follows the same path as the children development. This is to say that the local port activity, which included fishing and whaling, and markets bringing in textiles contributed to the Hull's fame increase. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: the half of those inhabitants, which worked hard to contribute to the evolution of their society, died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, thanks to the strong and collective spirit of those people, Hull took the horn by the bills and reached it most prosperous period, with about 350 000 residents, just before the First World War. But, after every sun light always come some big black clouds. It was exactly what happened during the Second World War when 95% of the town was destroyed because of the bombs attacks. Still today, the rebuilding effort is not done yet! However, it represents the tip the iceberg in comparison with the social problems which were going to follow the war. An example of that is that the fishing industry completely collapsed in the 1970's. All those difficulties led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280 000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities which put their shoulder to the wheel for years to change the situation, Hull stays in a bad position, what affects negatively its economy, education and health systems. The fact that 20 % of the children aged around eleven are illiteracy illustrates the actual situation. The accent which characterizes that town may represent, with the several socials problems like drugs habits and unemployment, one cause of the _______ that happens these days.
However, instead of the Hull’s high rate of life, that city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions with two rugby teams, the Humber Bridge and the Maritime Museum. For the time being takes place the regeneration of that locality which introduced the construction of a new stadium of 55 000 places, the development of the city centre and resolution of the tides problem. All these improvements show the government’s willpower to turn the tables!
In the middle of that hubbub, sometimes negative sometimes reformer and visionary, life continues and leads the Hulltonians through its different steps. Then, the natural wheel never stops to turn to see to it that birth and death live together day after day. Some of those new inhabitants have become famous because of what they were or of what they did. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930 before she died in 1941 while she was working as a pilot in the air force. This list can continue even more longer than that with Philip Larkin, this dark vision poems writer, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim, the Beautiful South and Everything But the Girl.
To sum up, between a football game and a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, was this dynamic city where everybody is ready to bite the bullet whatever happens to improve their situation: Kingston-Upon-Hull. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Nerver Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true! So, pay attention to that part of the world because London may not stay the capital for a long time!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-09-2009 09:47
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Modifié par bridg le 14-10-2009 18:23
fermé car repris par un autre membre hors sujet
Message de loupevivante posté le 17-09-2009 à 13:32:58
Hello,
Could you correct my text please?
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't seem to want to be there. That part of the world, which saw the evolution of the famous and immortal Beatles band, doesn't blow its own trumpet in spite of the rich and diversified history that it hides like a treasure showed little by little thanks to the castles and the publics gardens. Hid through all these attractions that represents United Kingdom, that geographical concept that includes England, Wale, Scotland and Northern Ireland, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.3
In the middle of those green lands covered by trees through which meander roads and rivers, was established, in 1279, a little town. In spite of the natural resources presented around them, which could have been use to develop some industries, the inhabitants of that place based their city on trade. So, it was as a market town that Hull was first knew. Effectively, its business, at that time, rose again the importing wool from monasteries activity. Because of the love he had for that welcoming and lively (busy) place, which was growing up as quickly as its trade activities did, the King Edward I decided to buy the town a few years after its foundation, in 1293, and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". As life works for century and century, time went by and the popularity of that locality follows the same path as the children development. This is to say that the local port activity, which included fishing and whaling, and markets bringing in textiles contributed to the Hull's fame increase. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: the half of those inhabitants, which worked hard to contribute to the evolution of their society, died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, thanks to the strong and collective spirit of those people, Hull took the horn by the bills and reached it most prosperous period, with about 350 000 residents, just before the First World War. But, after every sun light always come some big black clouds. It was exactly what happened during the Second World War when 95% of the town was destroyed because of the bombs attacks. Still today, the rebuilding effort is not done yet! However, it represents the tip the iceberg in comparison with the social problems which were going to follow the war. An example of that is that the fishing industry completely collapsed in the 1970's. All those difficulties led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280 000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities which put their shoulder to the wheel for years to change the situation, Hull stays in a bad position, what affects negatively its economy, education and health systems. The fact that 20 % of the children aged around eleven are illiteracy illustrates the actual situation. The accent which characterizes that town may represent, with the several socials problems like drugs habits and unemployment, one cause of the _______ that happens these days.
However, instead of the Hull’s high rate of life, that city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions with two rugby teams, the Humber Bridge and the Maritime Museum. For the time being takes place the regeneration of that locality which introduced the construction of a new stadium of 55 000 places, the development of the city centre and resolution of the tides problem. All these improvements show the government’s willpower to turn the tables!
In the middle of that hubbub, sometimes negative sometimes reformer and visionary, life continues and leads the Hulltonians through its different steps. Then, the natural wheel never stops to turn to see to it that birth and death live together day after day. Some of those new inhabitants have become famous because of what they were or of what they did. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930 before she died in 1941 while she was working as a pilot in the air force. This list can continue even more longer than that with Philip Larkin, this dark vision poems writer, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim, the Beautiful South and Everything But the Girl.
To sum up, between a football game and a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, was this dynamic city where everybody is ready to bite the bullet whatever happens to improve their situation: Kingston-Upon-Hull. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Nerver Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true! So, pay attention to that part of the world because London may not stay the capital for a long time!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-09-2009 09:47
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Modifié par bridg le 14-10-2009 18:23
fermé car repris par un autre membre hors sujet
Réponse: Hull/correction de seb06000, postée le 17-09-2009 à 13:48:45
bonjour,
je vous donne les indications de correction 
Somewhere on the earth , on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't seem to want to be there( cette structure est un peu trop complexe). That part of the world, which saw (je ne suis pas certain du choix du verbe=> calque du français) the evolution of the famous and immortal Beatles band, doesn't blow its own trumpet in spite of the rich and diversified history that it hides like a treasure showed little by little thanks to the castles and the publics (attention au S, public est adjectif ici) gardens. Hid through all these attractions that represents United Kingdom, that geographical concept that includes England, Wale (orth), Scotland and Northern Ireland, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.3
In the middle of those green lands covered by trees through which meander roads and rivers (attention n'inversez pas le sujet et le verbe comme en français), was established, in 1279, a little town. In spite of the natural resources presented around them, which could have been use (il manque la marque du participe passé) to develop some industries, the inhabitants of that place based their city on trade. So, it was as a market town that Hull was first knew ( attention à la forme de to know). Effectively, its business, at that time, rose again the importing wool from monasteries activity. Because of the love he had for that welcoming and lively (busy) place, which was growing up as quickly as its trade activities did, the (Pas de d'article devant un titre officiel) King Edward I decided to buy the town a few years after its foundation, in 1293, and renamed it 'Kynges Town Upon Hull'. As life works for century and century ( marque du pluriel manquante), time went by and the popularity of that locality follows the same path as the children development. This is to say that the local port activity, which included fishing and whaling, and markets bringing in textiles contributed to the Hull's fame increase. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: the half of those inhabitants, which worked hard to contribute to the evolution of their society, died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, thanks to the strong and collective spirit of those people, Hull took the horn by the bills and reached it most prosperous period, with about 350 000 residents, just before the First World War. But, after every sun light always come some big black clouds. It was exactly what happened during the Second World War when 95% of the town was destroyed because of the bombs attacks (je mettrais simplement ' bombings'). Still today, the rebuilding effort is not done yet! However, it represents the tip the iceberg in comparison with the social problems which were going to follow the war. An example of that is that the fishing industry completely collapsed in the 1970's. All those difficulties led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the 'Crap town' competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280 000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities which put their shoulder to the wheel for years to change the situation, Hull stays in a bad position, what ( erreur de relatif) affects negatively its economy, education and health systems. The fact that 20 % of the children aged around eleven are illiteracy (c'est le substantif vous avez besoin de l'adjectif) illustrates the actual situation. The accent which characterizes that town may represent (sens de la structure?) , with the several socials (social est en position d'adjectif donc invariable) problems like drugs habits and unemployment, one cause of the _______ that happens these days.
However, instead of the Hull’s high rate of life, that city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions with two rugby teams, the Humber Bridge and the Maritime Museum. For the time being takes place( évitez ces inversions sujet/verbe, ce n'est pas très anglais) the regeneration of that locality which introduced the construction of a new stadium of 55 000 places, the development of the city centre and resolution of the tides problem. All these improvements show the government’s willpower to turn the tables!
In the middle of that hubbub, sometimes negative sometimes reformer and visionary, life continues and leads the Hulltonians through its different steps. Then, the natural wheel never stops to turn to see to it that birth and death live together day after day. Some of those new inhabitants have become famous because of what they were or of what they did. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930 before she died in 1941 while she was working as a pilot in the air force. This list can continue (verbe inadequat) even more longer (attention à la construction du comparatif de supériorité) than that with Philip Larkin, this dark vision poems writer, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim, the Beautiful South and Everything But the Girl.
To sum up, between a football game and a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, was this dynamic city where everybody is ready to bite the bullet whatever happens to improve their situation: Kingston-Upon-Hull. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Nerver Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true! So, pay attention to that part of the world because London may not stay the capital for a long time!
Voilà n'hésitez pas si vous souhaitez des précisions!
Amicalement
sebastien
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Modifié par seb06000 le 17-09-2009 14:06
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 18-09-2009 à 22:26:03
I try to improve my test thanks to your advices. However, I'm still not sure of some parts like the relatif changement (what) and some changements of verbs (know and saw). Could check if it's correct now? Thank you
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't want to be there. That part of the world, which attended the evolution of the famous and immortal Beatles band, doesn't blow its own trumpet in spite of the rich and diversified history that it hides like a treasure showed little by little thanks to the castles and the public gardens. Hid through all these attractions that represents United Kingdom, that geographical concept that includes England, Wale, Scotland and Northern Ireland, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.3
In the middle of those green lands covered by trees through which roads and rivers meander, was established, in 1279, a little town. In spite of the natural resources presented around them, which could have been used to develop some industries, the inhabitants of that place based their city on trade. So, it was as a market town that Hull was first known. Effectively, its business, at that time, rose again the importing wool from monasteries activity. Because of the love he had for that welcoming and lively (busy) place, which was growing up as quickly as its trade activities did, King Edward I decided to buy the town a few years after its foundation, in 1293, and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". As life works for centuries and centuries, time went by and the popularity of that locality follows the same path as the children development. This is to say that the local port activity, which included fishing and whaling, and markets bringing in textiles contributed to the Hull's fame increase. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: the half of those inhabitants, which worked hard to contribute to the evolution of their society, died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, thanks to the strong and collective spirit of those people, Hull took the horn by the bills and reached it most prosperous period, with about 350 000 residents, just before the First World War. But, after every sun light always come some big black clouds. It was exactly what happened during the Second World War when 95% of the town was destroyed because of the bombings. Still today, the rebuilding effort is not done yet! However, it represents the tip the iceberg in comparison with the social problems which were going to follow the war. An example of that is that the fishing industry completely collapsed in the 1970's. All those difficulties led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280 000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities which put their shoulder to the wheel for years to change the situation, Hull stays in a bad position, which one affects negatively its economy, education and health systems. The fact that 20 % of the children aged around eleven are illiterate illustrates the actual situation. The accent which characterizes that town may represent, with the several social problems like drugs habits and unemployment, one cause of the _______ that happens these days.
However, instead of the Hull’s high rate of life, that city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions with two rugby teams, the Humber Bridge and the Maritime Museum. For the time being, the regeneration of that locality takes place, which introduced the construction of a new stadium of 55 000 places, the development of the city centre and resolution of the tides problem. All these improvements show the government’s willpower to turn the tables!
In the middle of that hubbub, sometimes negative sometimes reformer and visionary, life continues and leads the Hulltonians through its different steps. Then, the natural wheel never stops to turn to see to it that birth and death live together day after day. Some of those new inhabitants have become famous because of what they were or of what they did. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930 before she died in 1941 while she was working as a pilot in the air force. This list can go on even longer than that with Philip Larkin, this dark vision poems writer, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim, the Beautiful South and Everything But the Girl.
To sum up, between a football game and a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, was this dynamic city where everybody is ready to bite the bullet whatever happens to improve their situation: Kingston-Upon-Hull. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Nerver Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true! So, pay attention to that part of the world because London may not stay the capital for a long time!
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 19-09-2009 à 09:37:24
Good morning Mrs Wolf!
Great essay, great choice, great city. Seb has given you some good advice (no "s") but may I give you a little more?
L.2. where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't want to be.
L.2. That place, which saw the birth of the famous .....
L.3. diverse history
L.4. Hidden.......... Wales avec un "s")
L.6. a small town (sounds better than a little town)
L.8. rose again importing wool from monastic industries
L.9. as its trade activities were, Kind Edward 1 decided, in 1293, to buy
the town a few years after it was founded and renamed it ....
L.9. As life went on throughout the centuries, the popularity of that locality
grew following much the same path as a child would develop.
That is to say, ...... famed increase...
L.12 Half of those inhabitants who ... because of the Plague (I think Black Death is a synonym for The Plague).
L.13 Hull took the bull by the horns (le taureau par les cornes!!)and reached
its most prosperous period, by now with a population of about 350,000
citizens, just prior to the First World War. But good fortune doesn't
last long and with the onset of the Second World War, 95% of the town was
destroyed by bombs. The town is still undergoing massive reconstruction,
and there is more to follow. However, this is only the tip of the
iceberg concerning the social problems which followed the war. One
example being the fishing industry which completely collapsed in the
1970s
L.20 ... which negatively affects its economy
L.21 ... one cause of the ____ (crime rate?) that is happening today.
L.23 However, in spite of Hull's social problems, the city is overflowing ...
L.24 For the time being, the regeneration of Hull that is taking place boasts a new stadium seating 55,000, the development ....... tidal problem
L.28 So, the natural wheel never stops turning
L.30? Phillip Larkin, the dark visions poet
L.31 To sum up, whether it be a football game ...... this dynamic city is
ready to bite the bullet ...
Because London may not be the capital city for long!!
Je n'ai pas le temps de vérifier mais j'espère que ces petites suggestions peuvent t'aider.
Regards
Intrepid
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-09-2009 09:46
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 19-09-2009 à 23:20:30
Thank you very much for those suggestions.
This is better?
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't want to be. That place, which attended(saw) the birth of the famous and immortal Beatles band, doesn't blow its own trumpet in spite of the rich and diverse history that it hides like a treasure showed little by little thanks to the castles and the public gardens. Hidden through all these attractions which characterize United Kingdom, that geographical concept that includes England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.
In the middle of those green lands covered by trees through which roads and rivers meander, was established, in 1279, a small town. In spite of the natural resources presented around them, which could have been used to develop some industries, the inhabitants of that place based their city on trade. So, it was as a market town that Hull was first known. Effectively, its business rose again importing wool from monastic industries. Because of the love he had for that welcoming and lively place, which was growing up as quickly as its trade activities were, Kind Edward I decided, in 1293, to buy the town a few years after it was founded and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". As life went on throughout the centuries, the popularity of that locality grew following much the same path as a child would develop. That is to say that the local port activity, which included fishing and whaling, and markets bringing in textiles contributed to the Hull's famed increase. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: half of those inhabitants who worked hard to contribute to the evolution of their society died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, thanks to the strong and collective spirit of those people, Hull took the bull by the horns and reached its most prosperous period, by now with a population of about 350,000 citizens, just prior to the First World War. But good fortune doesn't last long and with the onset of the Second World War, 95% of the town was destroyed by bombs. The town is still undergoing massive reconstruction, and there is more to follow. However, this is only the tip of the iceberg concerning the social problems which followed the war. One example being the fishing industry which completely collapsed in the 1970s. All those difficulties led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280 000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities which put their shoulder to the wheel for years to change the situation, Hull stays in a bad position, which negatively affects its economy, education and health systems. The fact that 20 % of the children aged around eleven are illiterate illustrates the actual situation. The accent which characterizes that town may represent, with the several social problems like drugs habits and unemployment, one cause of the exodus that is happening today.
However, in spite of Hull's social problems, the city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions with two rugby teams, the Humber Bridge and the Maritime Museum. For the time being, the regeneration of Hull that is taking place boasts a new stadium seating 55,000, the development of the city centre and the resolution of the tidal problem. All these improvements show the government’s willpower to turn the tables!
In the middle of that hubbub, sometimes negative sometimes reformer and visionary, life continues and leads the Hulltonians through its different steps. So, the natural wheel never stops turning to see to it that birth and death live together day after day. Some of those new inhabitants have become famous because of what they were or of what they did. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930 before she died in 1941 while she was working as a pilot in the air force. This list can go on even longer than that with Phillip Larkin, the dark visions poet, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim, the Beautiful South and Everything But the Girl.
To sum up, whether it be a football game or a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, this dynamic city, Kingston-Upon-Hull, is ready to bite the bullet to improve its situation. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Nerver Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true! So, pay attention to that part of the world because London may not be the capital city for long!
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 20-09-2009 à 09:34:53
Good morning!
First of all, thank you Lucile for correcting my shocking spelling in French!!
Mrs. Wolf!
Going good!!! Try this :-
L.3. punctuation here - a really long sentence Puff Puff!!
L.4. which characterise the United Kingdom, that .... which includes ...
L.9. which was growing as quickly as were its trade activites, King .. (sounds better)
L.20? which have put their shoulder to the wheel.. Hull remains in a....
All in all, it's quite good - you need to watch your punctuation, new paragraphs etc. but don't worry darling, it'll be fine. Please let us know what mark you get.
Kind regards
Intrepid
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 20-09-2009 à 15:09:06
Thank you...
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 21-09-2009 à 19:25:48
I know, it's me again! But, it's because I had to edit my text because it was too long. So, I hope you can check it again and maybe suggest me some ways to say it with more beautiful and shorter sentences.
Thank you for your help...
It’s Never Dull in ‘Ull
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't want to be. Hidden through all these facts which characterise the United Kingdom, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.
In the middle of those green lands, was established, in 1279, a small town. First known as a market town, its business rose again importing wool from monastic industries. Because of the love he had for that welcoming place, Kind Edward I decided, in 1293, to buy the town and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". Following that, the popularity of that locality grew thanks to the local port activity and the markets bringing in textiles. After those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: half of those inhabitants died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, Hull took the bull by the horns and reached its most prosperous period, by now with a population of about 350,000 citizens, just prior to the First World War. But good fortune doesn’t last long and with the onset of the Second World War, 95% of the town was destroyed by bombs. However, this is only the tip of the iceberg concerning the social problems which followed the war and led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280,000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities to change the situation, Hull remains in a bad position, which negatively affects its economy, education and health systems. The accent which characterises this town may represent, with its social troubles, some of the causes of the exodus that is happening today.
However, in spite of Hull's social problems, the city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions. For the time being, the regeneration of Hull that is taking place boasts a new stadium seating 55,000, the development of the city centre and the resolution of the tidal problem.
In the middle of that hubbub, some of those Hulltonians have become famous. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930. This list can go on even longer than that with Phillip Larkin, the dark visions poet, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim.
To sum up, whether it is a football game or a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, this dynamic city, Kingston-Upon-Hull, is ready to bite the bullet to improve its situation. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Never Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true!
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 22-09-2009 à 08:03:49
Hello Mrs Wolf!!
Indeed, there are a couple of "very French" sentences, so I will try and look at your essay this afternoon, because I have to dash now!!
Regard
Intrepid
P.S. What a shame you had to edit your essay, because it was very good and you had obviously done a lot of work on it. Never mind.
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 22-09-2009 à 19:33:38
I know, but I had to edit it because it was too long. I try to make some improvements in my text. I don't know if it,s better now.
P.S. I need it for the end of this afternoon because I have to give it tomorrow morning. Thank you!!!
It’s Never Dull in ‘Ull
Somewhere on the earth, on a continent called Europe, is a place where nature gets along well with industries, where coffee doesn't represent a miraculous drink anymore, where the sun, unfortunately, doesn't want to be. Hidden through all these facts which characterise the United Kingdom, is a town that the present doesn't know a lot about but that the future will make popular for sure: Kingston-Upon-Hull.
In the middle of those green lands, was established, in 1279, a small town. First known as a market town, Hull’s business rose again importing wool from monastic industries. Because of the love he felt for that welcoming place, Kind Edward I decided, in 1293, to buy the town and renamed it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". Then, thanks to the local port activity and the markets bringing in textiles, that locality gained in popularity. Nevertheless, after those glory times, that town's population went to hell and back: half of those inhabitants died in 1349 because of the Black Death and the Plague. Even though, Hull took the bull by the horns and reached its most prosperous period, by now with a population of about 350,000 citizens, just prior to the First World War. But good fortune doesn’t last long and with the onset of the Second World War, 95% of the town was destroyed by bombs. However, this is only the tip of the iceberg concerning the social problems which followed the war and led to the nomination of Hull as the winner of the "Crap town" competition in 2003.
Effectively, that city, which represents today the living place of more than 280,000 people, doesn't have a shiny reputation. In spite of the efforts of the authorities to turn the tables, Hull remains in a bad position, which negatively affects its economy, education and health systems. The accent which characterises this town may represent, with its social troubles, some of the causes of the exodus that is happening today.
However, in spite of these Hull's hard nuts to crack, the city is overflowing with sport teams and tourism attractions. For the time being, the regeneration of Hull that is taking place boasts a new stadium seating 55,000, the development of the city centre and the resolution of the tidal problem.
Intermingled through that hubbub, some of those Hulltonians have seen their destiny taking part of the history. William Wilberforce, the leader of the movement to abolish the slave trade in Britain, is one of them like Amy Johnson, who completed the first solo flight from London to Darwin (Australia) in May 1930. This list can go on even longer than that with Phillip Larkin, the dark visions poet, and some musicians such as Fatboy Slim.
To sum up, whether it is a football game or a Queen’s declaration, going through some social troubles and famous destiny people, Kingston-Upon-Hull is ready to bite the bullet to improve its situation. Definitively, this town, after some hard past times, will soon break the mould and its slogan: “It’s Never Dull in ‘Ull”, will come true!
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 23-09-2009 à 07:14:57
Good morning Mrs. Wolf
I hope I'm not too late - but I fear so.
L.2. Hidden among all these ...
L.4. Due to the importation of wool from monastic industries, Hull was put on the map as an important trading town. King Ed 1 decided to buy the town in 1293 because of his love for it and named it "Kynges Town Upon Hull". Later on, its popularity grew thanks to ........... Unfortunately, Hull plunged and the town's population went to hell and back due to the Great Plague in 1349 where half its inhabitants died. But Hull took the bull by the horns and just prior to the First World War with 350,000 citizens, Hull reached its most prosperous period only to be devasted once again with the onset of the Second World War with 95% of the town destroyed by the Blitz.
3° paragraph: social problems
4° paragraph: However, in spite of this, Hull is a hard nut to crack. The city overflows with numerous sports teams and toutist atractions.....
Grea essay and you have done some good corrections yourself.
Hope this is in time.
Good luck and please let us know how you get on.
Intrepid
Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 23-09-2009 à 13:23:47
THANK YOU...and no you're not too late but just in time! Obvisously, I will let you know my mark but you should remember me this because I don't have a very good memory...
Have a nice day
Mrs. Wolf
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 23-09-2009 à 13:46:37
Bonjour!
You're most welcome - good luck!
By the way - you'd better (mieux que you should) remind me because I have the memory of a sieve!!!
Me too!!
Intrepid
P.S. advice (jamais "s") mais toujours pluriel donc - some advice.
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Réponse: Hull/correction de loupevivante, postée le 10-10-2009 à 17:49:13
Like I promised, I give you my mark...
I get 100%!!!!
THANK YOU again and agin for your help...!
Réponse: Hull/correction de intrepid34, postée le 13-10-2009 à 07:44:04
Fantastic!! Congratulations! You deserve it for the work you did on the essay and also the desire and interest to have something corrected and get a good mark.
Good on you. You'll go far in life.
Love
Intrepid
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