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Message de zarbie79 posté le 19-09-2009 à 21:28:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
j'ai un sujet d'invention à réaliser en anglais et au vu de mes piètres performances dans la langue de Shakespeare, j'aimerais qu'on me signale les endroits où j'ai commis des erreurs (et qu'on m'explique ... svp
, le but étant de progresser ^^) merci d'avance à tous ceux qui m'aideront !
Sujet : Do you think that a good education is essential to have a good job ?
I think that a good education isn't essential to have a good job.
First, what is a good job ? A job in which I will earn much money or a job which will please me ? A job in which I will work many or a job which will let to have time for me ?
Personally, I think that it's more interesting to do a trade in which I will be happy enven if I won't to earn much money rather than the contrary.
For example, if someone wants to be garage-man whereas
he would earn more money if he would be doctor, he won't have receipt necessarily a good education and nevertheless he will be a good trade because he will be happy. By contrast, someone who wants to doctor to earn much money, will have maybe receipt a good education but if his job don't interesting him, that won't be a good job.
However, that's true what to receive a good education may be advantageous to be able to do studies and to do professions by dreams as to be engineer, astronaut ... and earn one's living.
Nonetheless, everybody can be a success, good education or not. You just need a little of luck and a lot of courage.
Moreover, all people are differents, some privilege their family, the others their professional life. Each his choices, each his life, each his vision of "good job".
Finally, for me, a good job will be a job in which I would be happy because I wouldtake advantageof the life and because I will like my job. A good education won't be essential ...
The END
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Modifié par bridg le 19-09-2009 21:43
Message de zarbie79 posté le 19-09-2009 à 21:28:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
j'ai un sujet d'invention à réaliser en anglais et au vu de mes piètres performances dans la langue de Shakespeare, j'aimerais qu'on me signale les endroits où j'ai commis des erreurs (et qu'on m'explique ... svp
, le but étant de progresser ^^) merci d'avance à tous ceux qui m'aideront !Sujet : Do you think that a good education is essential to have a good job ?
I think that a good education isn't essential to have a good job.
First, what is a good job ? A job in which I will earn much money or a job which will please me ? A job in which I will work many or a job which will let to have time for me ?
Personally, I think that it's more interesting to do a trade in which I will be happy enven if I won't to earn much money rather than the contrary.
For example, if someone wants to be garage-man whereas
he would earn more money if he would be doctor, he won't have receipt necessarily a good education and nevertheless he will be a good trade because he will be happy. By contrast, someone who wants to doctor to earn much money, will have maybe receipt a good education but if his job don't interesting him, that won't be a good job.
However, that's true what to receive a good education may be advantageous to be able to do studies and to do professions by dreams as to be engineer, astronaut ... and earn one's living.
Nonetheless, everybody can be a success, good education or not. You just need a little of luck and a lot of courage.
Moreover, all people are differents, some privilege their family, the others their professional life. Each his choices, each his life, each his vision of "good job".
Finally, for me, a good job will be a job in which I would be happy because I wouldtake advantageof the life and because I will like my job. A good education won't be essential ...
The END
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Modifié par bridg le 19-09-2009 21:43
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de seb06000, postée le 19-09-2009 à 21:39:00 (S | E)
bonsoir,
je vous indique les choses à corriger
First, what is a good job ? A job in which I will earn much money or a job which will please me ? A job in which I will work many or a job which will let to have time for me ?
"Personally, I think that it's more interesting to do a trade in which I will be happy enven (orthographe) if I won't to earn (construction du futur) much money rather than the contrary.
For example, if someone wants to be garage-man (voc+ article) whereas
he would earn more money if he wouldbe doctor (article manquant), he won't have receipt ( calque du français) necessarily a good education and nevertheless he will be a good trade (voc) because he will be happy. By contrast, someone who wants to doctor (sens?) to earn much money, will have maybe receipt (idem) a good education but if his job don't (conjugaison de l'auxiliaire) interesting (non!)him, that won't be a good job.
However, that's true what (relatif à revoir) to receive a good education may be advantageous to be able to do studies and to do professions (voc) by dreams (voc) as to be engineer, astronaut (articles devant les professions?) ... and earn one's living.
Nonetheless, everybody can be a success (tout le monde peut être un succès?, sens?) , good education or not(phrase à revoir). You just need a little of luck and a lot of courage.
Moreover, all people are differents pluriel sur un adjectif? ), some privilege their family, the others their professional life. Each his choices, each his life, each his vision of "good job".
Finally, for me, a good job will be a job in which I would be happy because I would take advantage of the life (life est un concept pas d'article.) and because I will like my job. A good education won't be essential ...
Voilà si vous avez un souci n'hésitez pas
Amicalement
sebastien
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de zarbie79, postée le 20-09-2009 à 02:11:39 (S | E)
merci beaucoup sébastien
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de zarbie79, postée le 20-09-2009 à 02:37:54 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour ton aide Sébastien, cela m'a permis de corriger la quasi-totalité de mes fautes. Cependant "he won't have receipt" je ne vois pas comment tourner la phrase pour que l'anglais soit correct :s
Ensuite il y a encore quelques passages dont je doute encore après correction :
"that's true which...?? "
", everybody can succeed... "
merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-09-2009 08:10
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de lucile83, postée le 20-09-2009 à 08:14:46 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Merci de poster votre corrigé afin qu'il soit lu et que l'on vous indique les fautes restantes.
Best wishes.
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de semperreg, postée le 20-09-2009 à 10:39:05 (S | E)
Pour moi le style est trop lourd.
En fait j'arrive au bout et je n'ai rien suivi de votre raisonnement.
De plus : on indique aux étudiants qu'il faut utiliser des mots de liaison mais là vous faites une liste ???
Les idées peuvent s'enchaîner sans en mettre trop (c'est vraiment pour insister, pour marquer un contraste et pas forcément une opposition : en français on ne dit pas "j'aime les bananes mais dans le cas contraire j'aime les cerises ou néanmoins j'aime les cerises" -
L'anglais, c'est une langue fluide. xxxxx
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-09-2009 18:35
Remarque finale effacée car elle pouvait heurter les sensibilités.
Réponse: Sujet d'invention anglais de zarbie79, postée le 20-09-2009 à 12:27:18 (S | E)
Voilà j'ai reposté mon sujet en partie corrigé ... merci à tous pour votre aide c'est vraiment simpa de votre part !
First, what is a good job ? A job in which I will earn much money or a job which will please me ? A job in which I will work many or a job which will let to have time for me ?
"Personally, I think that it's more interesting to do a trade in which I will be happy even if I won't earn much money rather than the contrary.
For example, if someone wants to be a mechanic whereas
he would earn more money if he would be a doctor, he won't have received ( calque du français là je vois pas quoi mettre…”had”) necessarily a good education, nevertheless he will be a good job because he will be happy. By contrast, someone who wants to be a doctor to earn much money, will have may be received (idem, je pensais à “had” mais je suis pas sur) a good education but if his job doesn't interesting, that won't be a good job.
However, that's true that(relatif à revoir, là je suis pas sur :s) to receive a good education may be advantageous to be able to do studies and to do a gorgeous job as to be an engineer, an astronaut … and earn one's living.
Nonetheless, everybody can succeed (tout le monde peut réussir) , good education or not(là je voulais dire bonne éducation ou non …mais peut être qu’en anglais ça ne se dit pas ??? :s ). You just need a little of luck and a lot of courage.
Moreover, all people are different, some privilege their family, the others their professional life. Each his choices, each his life, each his vision of "good job".
Finally, for me, a good job will be a job in which I would be happy because I would take advantage of life and because I will like my job. A good education won't be essential ...
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Modifié par zarbie79 le 20-09-2009 16:05
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