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Correction /taking a photo
Message de mariane75 posté le 28-09-2009 à 17:40:20 (S | E | F)
Je sollicite votre aide car j'ai quelques (c'est un euphémisme
) difficultés en Anglais et j'ai une expression écrite à rendre, si vous pouviez me dire mes erreurs s'il vous plait afin de m'aider à progresser
je vous remercie d'avance pour votre aide, voici mon texte
I think that taking a photo is having fun in the present, we enjoy that time with our friends and family.
The fact of photographing a groupe of friends can allow to laugh over the moment of the head wich make people or the other one.However a photo is essentially taken to remember of the good moment in the futur.
We take all pleasure to look at the photos of 10 or 15 years ago, remembering (le gérondif se traduit bien par V+ING ?) itself good moments which we have to take( que l'on a passé, je ne suis pas sûr de la construction) and laughing again only watching at a photo, or on the contrary remembering moment moving as a birth or a marriage. To take a photo of somebody also allows for example to engrave still its image so as to forget never how he was. A photo often corresponds at the important moments of our life which it is important to engrave an image up to our death so as to remember us there always.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-09-2009 06:31
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Message de mariane75 posté le 28-09-2009 à 17:40:20 (S | E | F)
Je sollicite votre aide car j'ai quelques (c'est un euphémisme
) difficultés en Anglais et j'ai une expression écrite à rendre, si vous pouviez me dire mes erreurs s'il vous plait afin de m'aider à progresserje vous remercie d'avance pour votre aide, voici mon texte
I think that taking a photo is having fun in the present, we enjoy that time with our friends and family.
The fact of photographing a groupe of friends can allow to laugh over the moment of the head wich make people or the other one.However a photo is essentially taken to remember of the good moment in the futur.
We take all pleasure to look at the photos of 10 or 15 years ago, remembering (le gérondif se traduit bien par V+ING ?) itself good moments which we have to take( que l'on a passé, je ne suis pas sûr de la construction) and laughing again only watching at a photo, or on the contrary remembering moment moving as a birth or a marriage. To take a photo of somebody also allows for example to engrave still its image so as to forget never how he was. A photo often corresponds at the important moments of our life which it is important to engrave an image up to our death so as to remember us there always.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-09-2009 06:31
titre + forum
Réponse: Correction /taking a photo de squeeline, postée le 28-09-2009 à 23:56:11 (S | E)
Bonsoir Marianne,
Je ne connais pas le cadre de ce devoir ni votre niveau d'anglais mais l'ensemble est loin d'être catastrophique malgré des erreurs évitables:
I think that taking a photo is having fun in the present, we enjoy that time(attention à la confusion entre this et that) with our friends and family.
(The fact of )photographing a groupe (revoyez l'orthographe de ce mot) of friends can make (+pronom personnel complément+ laugh) over the moment
We take all (correct si all porte sur plaisir mais si il porte sur we, plus logique, alors placez le derrière ce pronom- ici préférez have à take) pleasure to look (in+V-ing)at the photos
Ici, je pense qu'il vaudrait mieux refaire une phrase, sans which) which it is important to engrave an image
Voilà, j'espère vous avoir aidée, surtout comprenez vos erreurs.
Bon courage
Squeeline
Réponse: Correction /taking a photo de mariane75, postée le 29-09-2009 à 19:37:44 (S | E)
I think that taking a photo is having fun in the present, we enjoy this time with our friends and family.
the fact of photographing a group of friends can make them laugh over the moment at the face which people make or for a other thing. However, a photo is essentially taken to remember the good moments in the future.
We all have pleasure in looking at the photos which we took ten or fifteen years ago, remembering good moments which we have spend and laughing again just watching photo, or on the contrary remembering moving moment such as a birth or a marriage. Taking a photo of somebody also allows him (or her) to engrave still his image so as to never forget never how he was. A photo often refers to important moments in our life, a moment that we won’t forget, it is important to burn this image until our death, and thus to remember it forever.
In the end, for me taking a picture is more for remembering the past that enjoy the present.
voici le texte modifié, merci beaucoup pour votre aide, ça m'a beaucoup aidé
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