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'Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

Air traffic kept rising as our economic became globalized: it rocketed about twenty years ago and doesn’t seem to have reached its highest level yet. It is a capital means of transport (voc) for both individuals and goods. Besides the fact that it is the quickest and safest way to travel all around the world, it also became incredibly cheap and accessible with the appearance of chartered (voc)planes. Therefore, taxing the flight tickets appears to present several drawbacks.
First of all, it seems to be a very discriminative proposition. Indeed, if the price of plane tickets rise (conjugaison), poorer passengers won’t be able to afford them, and it would lead to an elitist advantage for wealthier people. Moreover,one may consequently consider other means of transport (voc bis) such as train or cars. And this would obviously (position de l'adverbe + pourquoi un double modal?) won’t reduce the carbon emissions -the major stake involved by the reduction of air traffic- but on the contrary conduct to lots of pollution on the roads. Secondly, state interference could be harmful to the economy. Indeed, incomes breed by air traffic are tremendous and it is key to the tourism industry. But rise ( voc, il faut nominaliser Rise avec un Ing) taxes would surely reduce demand, and thus reduce the financial benefits.
To sum up, when bearing in mind the consequences of heavy taxes on plane tickets, it does not seem to be an appropriate solution against noise or pollution. Besides, travelling by plane is needed and important to maintain whether goods exchanges, tourism communication or technology developments.'


je crois que je n'ai rien oublié, votre texte est déjà d'une grande qualité!

Amicalement

sebastien