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Message de max2508 posté le 13-01-2010 à 18:36:12 (S | E | F)
Pouvez vous me donner un coup de main, j'ai un peu de mal en anglais, si quelqu'un peut regarder le texte ci-dessous et voir si tout est OK !!
Merci d'avance
B. Function of the student
1. Part in the administration
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I am attached particularly to the energy saving, indeed:
-I seek technological solutions to improve the reliability of our control system of lighting. (Teleprocessing)
-I control the power part of the electrical equipment boxes, by seeking solutions to save energy.
-I make also order of materials, because sometimes, I design street lighting projects. I carry out also a multitude of tasks around the street lighting, in the civil engineering for example.
-I deal with the administrative part by making files in order to making requests for subsidy and of launching invitations to tender.
Following many research on the energy saving we decided to set up an important program of energy saving. Here is one to summarize which will show my missions for the 3 following years.
2. Description of the project
With the increasing and upcoming impacts of climate change throughout the world, the city of Besançon (F) has decided to act strongly at its level by aiming to reduce its greenhouse gases' emissions.
The search for energy saving in street lighting started for Besancon in 2006 because of the diary 21 with two strong engagements:
To Reduce the ratio of megawatt-hour per enlightened kilometer by 26,3 to 15 in 2020 by a teleprocessing of the network.
The program is based on the extension of teleprocessing and the progressive replacement of the park of lanterns with three major steps. The realization is possible with several financial years:
1/ To finish, the installation of the system of teleprocessing on the whole of the network, with possibility to order to switch on the light or order the extinction of the street lighting.
2/ To order the city of night light from 22 H to 6 a.m. This action is possible thanks to the installation of voltage regulators which, installed with the system of teleprocessing, will lower the luminous power of 50% the night. For save 40% of the energy consumption.
Moreover and it is the originality of the Besancon project, the evenings of great cold, the setting out of night light could be actuated as of 18 h. That’s why, it could interest ERDF.
To replace the lanterns equipped with lamps Fluo Balloon (lamps with Mercury) and the lanterns which demand a lot of energy.
They are 3.500 lanterns equipped with lamps Fluo balloon and 500 consuming strong lanterns which will be replaced.
The Town of Besancon will be then in conformity with the European directive which envisages the disappearance of the lamps fluo balloon in 2014.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-01-2010 21:02
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Message de max2508 posté le 13-01-2010 à 18:36:12 (S | E | F)
Pouvez vous me donner un coup de main, j'ai un peu de mal en anglais, si quelqu'un peut regarder le texte ci-dessous et voir si tout est OK !!
Merci d'avance
B. Function of the student
1. Part in the administration
.
I am attached particularly to the energy saving, indeed:
-I seek technological solutions to improve the reliability of our control system of lighting. (Teleprocessing)
-I control the power part of the electrical equipment boxes, by seeking solutions to save energy.
-I make also order of materials, because sometimes, I design street lighting projects. I carry out also a multitude of tasks around the street lighting, in the civil engineering for example.
-I deal with the administrative part by making files in order to making requests for subsidy and of launching invitations to tender.
Following many research on the energy saving we decided to set up an important program of energy saving. Here is one to summarize which will show my missions for the 3 following years.
2. Description of the project
With the increasing and upcoming impacts of climate change throughout the world, the city of Besançon (F) has decided to act strongly at its level by aiming to reduce its greenhouse gases' emissions.
The search for energy saving in street lighting started for Besancon in 2006 because of the diary 21 with two strong engagements:
To Reduce the ratio of megawatt-hour per enlightened kilometer by 26,3 to 15 in 2020 by a teleprocessing of the network.
The program is based on the extension of teleprocessing and the progressive replacement of the park of lanterns with three major steps. The realization is possible with several financial years:
1/ To finish, the installation of the system of teleprocessing on the whole of the network, with possibility to order to switch on the light or order the extinction of the street lighting.
2/ To order the city of night light from 22 H to 6 a.m. This action is possible thanks to the installation of voltage regulators which, installed with the system of teleprocessing, will lower the luminous power of 50% the night. For save 40% of the energy consumption.
Moreover and it is the originality of the Besancon project, the evenings of great cold, the setting out of night light could be actuated as of 18 h. That’s why, it could interest ERDF.
To replace the lanterns equipped with lamps Fluo Balloon (lamps with Mercury) and the lanterns which demand a lot of energy.
They are 3.500 lanterns equipped with lamps Fluo balloon and 500 consuming strong lanterns which will be replaced.
The Town of Besancon will be then in conformity with the European directive which envisages the disappearance of the lamps fluo balloon in 2014.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-01-2010 21:02
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Réponse: Relecture/technological solutions de gerondif, postée le 13-01-2010 à 22:48:57 (S | E)
bonsoir,partie 1
B. Function of the student
1. Part in the administration (taking part in administrative tasks)
.
I am attached particularly(mettre devant attached) to the energy saving, indeed:
-I seek technological solutions to improve the reliability of our control system of lighting. (Teleprocessing)
-I control the power part of the electrical equipment boxes, by seeking solutions to save energy.
-I also order (verbe transitif) materials, because sometimes, I design street lighting projects. I carry out also a multitude of tasks around
-I deal with the administrative part by making files in order to making(infinitif) requests for subsidies(pluriel?) and of(construction) launching invitations to tender.(sens?)
(tender submissions: appels d'offres en double cliquant sur tender. )
Réponse: Relecture/technological solutions de gerondif, postée le 13-01-2010 à 23:05:41 (S | E)
partie 2
2. Description of the project
With the increasing and upcoming impacts of climate change throughout the world, the city of Besançon (F) has decided to act strongly at its level by aiming to reduce its greenhouse gases' emissions. (its emissions of greenhouse gases)
The search for energy saving in street lighting started for Besancon in 2006 because of the diary 21 (???)with two strong engagements:(= fiancailles !! utilisez commitments)
To Reduce the ratio of megawatt-hour per enlightened kilometer by(de 26 à 15 = from 26 to 15. unité? pourcentage?) 26,3 to 15 in 2020 by a teleprocessing of the network.
The program is based on the extension of teleprocessing and the progressive replacement of the park of lanterns with three major steps. The realization is possible with several financial years: ( on a 3 year dget ?)
1/ To finish,(bizarre en 1) n'était-ce pas: first, at first, to begin with ?) the installation of the system of teleprocessing on the whole of the network, with possibility to order to switch on the light or order the extinction of the street lighting (trop long, trop lourd,allowing us to switch on or off the street lighting.
2/ To
Moreover and it is the originality of the Besancon project, the evenings of great cold(on very cold evenings), the setting out of night light could be actuated as of (as early as 6 p.m.) That’s why it could interest ERDF.
To replace the lanterns equipped with Fluo Balloon(devant le nom) lamps (lamps with Mercury) and the lanterns which demand a lot of energy.
They are 3.500 lanterns equipped with Fluo balloon lamps and 500 consuming strong(energy-greedy) lanterns which will be replaced.
The Town of Besancon will then (devant be)be in conformity with the European directive(guideline) which envisages(chercher qui prévoit, planifie the disappearance of the fluo balloon lamps in 2014. (by 2014, d'ici 2014, serait bien)
Good luck !
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