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Message de jodimoi posté le 15-01-2010 à 15:18:23 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Je dois faire un résumé d'une courte histoire que j'ai lu, pouvez-vous m'aider pour les fautes.
Merci
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He has been told to go to for a room to a certain place.
Thus, he was attracted by a "Bed and Breakfast" and decided to take a room over there, even if the atmosphere was a little bit weird, it was very cheap. Billy began to talk with the landlady who was very nice, very smiling. He saw that the pets which seem to be a live were in fact dead and stuffed. What was the more surprising was the guests book that Billy consulted. He read two names that ring him a bell. He had seen those names in the headlines of the newspapers several years ago, but couldn't remember what happened to them.
While speaking and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderer and that she had killed those men. The next dead will be him, she put a poison in his tea.
Thanks
Jodimoi
Message de jodimoi posté le 15-01-2010 à 15:18:23 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Je dois faire un résumé d'une courte histoire que j'ai lu, pouvez-vous m'aider pour les fautes.
Merci
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He has been told to go to for a room to a certain place.
Thus, he was attracted by a "Bed and Breakfast" and decided to take a room over there, even if the atmosphere was a little bit weird, it was very cheap. Billy began to talk with the landlady who was very nice, very smiling. He saw that the pets which seem to be a live were in fact dead and stuffed. What was the more surprising was the guests book that Billy consulted. He read two names that ring him a bell. He had seen those names in the headlines of the newspapers several years ago, but couldn't remember what happened to them.
While speaking and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderer and that she had killed those men. The next dead will be him, she put a poison in his tea.
Thanks
Jodimoi
Réponse: Landlady de gerondif, postée le 15-01-2010 à 16:55:17 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Hello,
Je dois faire un résumé d'une courte histoire que j'ai lue, pouvez-vous m'aider pour les fautes.
Merci
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He has(mettez l'auxiliaire un cran plus haut au prétérit: on lui avait dit de) been told to go to(to go and look for: aller chercher . to get: se procurer) for a room to a certain place.
Thus(trop littéraire, so suffirait), he was attracted by a "Bed and Breakfast" and decided to take a room over there, even if the atmosphere was a little bit weird, it was very cheap. Billy began to talk with the landlady who was very nice, very smiling. He saw that the pets which seem(prétérit) to be a live (en un seul mot)were in fact dead and stuffed. What was the more surprising was the guests book that Billy consulted. He read two names that ring(prétérit) him(l'expression n'accepte pas 2 cod) a bell. He had seen those names in the headlines of the newspapers several years ago, but couldn't remember what (auxiliaire have au prétérit, ce qui leur était arrivé, quel évènement avait eu lieu)happened to them.
While speaking and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told(lui disait= imparfait = ing) him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderess (au féminin) and that she had killed those men. The next dead will be him, she put a(on ne dit pas un poison (sauf pour une amie) mais du poison !) poison in his tea.
(j'aurais dit: le prochain serait lui, elle avait mis du poison... donc un cran plus haut au niveau des temps, conditionnel et plus que parfait)
"he will be the next victim " serait peut-être plus anglais que votre "next dead"
Réponse: Landlady de robertbrou, postée le 15-01-2010 à 16:56:52 (S | E)
Bonjour,
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He has been told to go to for a room to a certain place.
Thus, he was attracted by a
While speaking (utiliser synonyme) and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderer and that she had killed those men (utiliser pronom). The next (manque pronom indéfini) dead will (conditionnel) be him, (soit manque conjonction, soit nouvelle phrase) she put a (revoir 'du') poison in his tea.
Réponse: Landlady de jodimoi, postée le 16-01-2010 à 19:07:15 (S | E)
Hello,
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He had been told to go and look for a room in a certain place.
So, he was attracted by a "Bed and Breakfast" and decided to take a room over there. Even if the atmosphere was a little bit weird, it was very cheap. Billy began to talk with the landlady who was very nice, always smiling. He saw that the pets which seemed to be alive were in fact dead and stuffed. What was the most surprising was the guests book that Billy consulted. He read two names that rang a bell. He had seen those names in the headlines of the newspapers several years ago, but couldn't remember what happened to them.
While talking and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderess and that she had killed those two men. He will be the next victim. She put on poison in his tea.
Réponse: Landlady de gerondif, postée le 16-01-2010 à 19:54:38 (S | E)
bonsoir,
(j'aurais dit: le prochain serait lui, elle avait mis du poison... donc un cran plus haut au niveau des temps, conditionnel(would) et plus que parfait (had + pp))
idem pour she couldn't remember what ..... happened to them (plus que parfait)
Réponse: Landlady de jodimoi, postée le 18-01-2010 à 10:04:30 (S | E)
Hello,
J'ai corrigé mon texte, merci encore pour votre aide.
A young man called Billy Weaver, arrived in Bath by train. He came from London to begin a job. He had been told to go and look for a room in a certain place.
So, he was attracted by a "Bed and Breakfast" and decided to take a room over there. Even if the atmosphere was a little bit weird, it was very cheap. Billy began to talk with the landlady who was very nice, always smiling. He saw that the pets which seemed to be alive were in fact dead and stuffed. What was the most surprising was the guests book that Billy consulted. He read two names that rang a bell. He had seen those names in the headlines of the newspapers several years ago, but he couldn't remember what had happened to them.
While talking and drinking tea, he realised when the landlady told him that those two young men were still in the hotel that she was a murderess and that she had killed those two men. He would be the next victim. She had put on poison in his tea.
Thanks
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