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Message de patouch93 posté le 19-01-2010 à 19:59:53 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir!
Je dois raconter une histoire à partir d'une petite bande dessinée, elle se déroule au passé. Je ne sais pas si tous les temps sont bien justes, pourriez-vous me corrigez ces phrases et m'expliquer mes éventuelles fautes?
Merci, Patricia.
One day Tony got up, had looked in the mirror and saw that he had gained weight. So he decided to take a slimming program. For start, he ran long, and the others laughed at him, then he passed by two ladies who were discussing, he fell on the leash of their dog, which bit.
A few moments later, it began to rain. He returned to the house, wet and tired, and threw the slimming program in the dustbin. Losing weight is too tiring!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-01-2010 21:00
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Message de patouch93 posté le 19-01-2010 à 19:59:53 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir!
Je dois raconter une histoire à partir d'une petite bande dessinée, elle se déroule au passé. Je ne sais pas si tous les temps sont bien justes, pourriez-vous me corrigez ces phrases et m'expliquer mes éventuelles fautes?
Merci, Patricia.
One day Tony got up, had looked in the mirror and saw that he had gained weight. So he decided to take a slimming program. For start, he ran long, and the others laughed at him, then he passed by two ladies who were discussing, he fell on the leash of their dog, which bit.
A few moments later, it began to rain. He returned to the house, wet and tired, and threw the slimming program in the dustbin. Losing weight is too tiring!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-01-2010 21:00
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Réponse: Raconter/ One day Tony got up... de gerondif, postée le 19-01-2010 à 23:22:02 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
One day Tony got up, had looked (un prétérit simple suffira) in the mirror and saw that he had gained weight. So he decided to take a slimming program. For a start, he ran long,(trop court pour dire longtemps, double cliquez sur ce mot et vous avez la solution) and the others laughed at him, then he passed by two ladies who were discussing, he fell on the leash of their dog, which bit him .
A few moments later, it began to rain. He returned to the house, wet and tired, and threw the slimming program into the dustbin. Losing weight is too tiring!(si vous le mettez au présent, pouquoi pas entre guillemets avec un He said ?)
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