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Correction/Un métier
Message de shawty posté le 23-11-2010 à 22:08:41 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous!
Je dois faire un exposé sur un métier et j'ai rédigé un petit résumé. J'aimerais avoir une petite correction s'il vous plaît.
Merci d'avance!
He is a State employee of category B,adviser of insertion and probation depends on the prison authorities. He intervenes with major delinquents detained. He can practice in closed environment, that is in detention center, in detention centers or in power plants, but also in opened environment.
His mission:It consists essentially in favoring the reintegration of the major delinquents and in fighting against the second offense recurrence, but this mission practices is differently applied according to the field of intervention.
In opened environment, the CIP makes a work of follow-up, accompaniment and control. He collaborates in the preparation of the decisions of justice such as the legal restriction or the survey(investigation) before judgment(sentence). He(it) is also in charge of(is also loaded with) alternative(alternate) measures in the confinement (community work, probation order, release on parole).
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Modifié par bridg le 23-11-2010 22:36
Message de shawty posté le 23-11-2010 à 22:08:41 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous!
Je dois faire un exposé sur un métier et j'ai rédigé un petit résumé. J'aimerais avoir une petite correction s'il vous plaît.
Merci d'avance!
He is a State employee of category B,adviser of insertion and probation depends on the prison authorities. He intervenes with major delinquents detained. He can practice in closed environment, that is in detention center, in detention centers or in power plants, but also in opened environment.
His mission:It consists essentially in favoring the reintegration of the major delinquents and in fighting against the second offense recurrence, but this mission practices is differently applied according to the field of intervention.
In opened environment, the CIP makes a work of follow-up, accompaniment and control. He collaborates in the preparation of the decisions of justice such as the legal restriction or the survey(investigation) before judgment(sentence). He(it) is also in charge of(is also loaded with) alternative(alternate) measures in the confinement (community work, probation order, release on parole).
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Modifié par bridg le 23-11-2010 22:36
Réponse: Correction/Un métier de lamy, postée le 24-11-2010 à 14:44:42 (S | E)
bonjour
De quel métier parlez-vous?
Réponse: Correction/Un métier de dsmith, postée le 24-11-2010 à 16:25:03 (S | E)
Je dois avouer que votre texte est très difficile de comprendre - alors difficile de corriger.
Peut être vous avez aussi le texte en français?
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