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Correction/Diana's death
Message de lorena12 posté le 30-03-2011 à 17:16:19 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger ce texte s'il vous plaît car je ne suis vraiment pas sûre de certaines choses.
Merci
This text tells us about the various theories about Diana's death. Some people say that her death was predicted to protect the monarchy. Some think that it has organized to escapes in a tropical island to live quietly and well for the rest of her life because they say that Diana was fed up with her intrusions into her private life.
These assumptions are based on the fact that we never found his body.
Many theory emerged after his death because it is so hard for english to believe that their princess could be killed by a simple car accident. I think that we mustn't react like that. Because every years thousands of people are killed by car accidents and medias ignore it. And I think that it isn't correct.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-03-2011 17:59
Message de lorena12 posté le 30-03-2011 à 17:16:19 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger ce texte s'il vous plaît car je ne suis vraiment pas sûre de certaines choses.
Merci
This text tells us about the various theories about Diana's death. Some people say that her death was predicted to protect the monarchy. Some think that it has organized to escapes in a tropical island to live quietly and well for the rest of her life because they say that Diana was fed up with her intrusions into her private life.
These assumptions are based on the fact that we never found his body.
Many theory emerged after his death because it is so hard for english to believe that their princess could be killed by a simple car accident. I think that we mustn't react like that. Because every years thousands of people are killed by car accidents and medias ignore it. And I think that it isn't correct.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-03-2011 17:59
Réponse: Correction/Diana's death de gerondif, postée le 30-03-2011 à 17:53:03 (S | E)
Bonjour,
texte plutôt maladroit.
This text tells(un texte ne peut pas "tell" il n'a pas de cordes vocales) us about the various theories about Diana's death. Some people say that her death was predicted(predire n'a pas de sens ici) to protect the monarchy. Some think that it has(mauvais auxiliaire, il faut l'auxiliaire être) organized to escapes in a tropical island to live quietly and well for the rest of her (qui? elle n'est pas citée dans la phrase: "it" was organised) life because they say that Diana was fed up with her(elle ne faisait pas elle-même intrusion dans sa propre vie) intrusions into her private life.
These assumptions are based on the fact that we(au sens de on ? alors, voix passive, comme le suggère le post suivant) never found his(son corps à lui????) body.
Many theory(pluriel) emerged after his death because it is so hard for the English to believe that their princess could be killed by a simple car accident. I think that we mustn't react like that. Because every years(singulier derrière every) thousands of people are killed by car accidents and medias ignore it. And I think that it isn't correct.
Réponse: Correction/Diana's death de robertbrou, postée le 30-03-2011 à 17:59:19 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici mes suggestions:
This text (correct, mais j'utiliserais un synonyme: article, paper, etc.) tells us (traduire discuter; parler) about the various theories about Diana's death. Some people say that her death was predicted (organisé ou bien prédit?) to protect the monarchy. Some think that it (it ou she?) has (temps) organized to escapes in (refaire) a tropical island to live quietly and well for the rest of her life because they say that Diana was fed up with her intrusions into her private life.
These assumptions are based on the fact that we never found (utliser voix passive) his (his or her?) body.
Many theory (au pluriel) emerged after his (his or her?) death because it is so hard for English ("English" tout seul dans ce cas est un adjectif) to believe that their princess could be (temps) killed by a simple car accident. I think that we mustn't react like that. Because every years (au singulier) thousands of people are killed by car accidents and medias the media ignores it. And I think that it isn't correct.
Hope this helps!
Réponse: Correction/Diana's death de lorena12, postée le 30-03-2011 à 18:35:06 (S | E)
Oh merci, vous êtes géniaux
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