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Message de mlle-cecile_dc posté le 14-04-2011 à 18:48:37 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai fait une présentation ( je n'ai donné ni mon adresse, ni numéro, les prénoms ou âges sont bien évidemmentles mauvaises faux) donc je ne donne aucun renseignement personnel me concernant).
Donc en vue de mon oral d'anglais j'ai vraiment pris du temps à faire une présentation à l'aide de mes cahiers et d'un dictionnaire sans me servir de traducteur en ligne!
J'aimerais donc si quelqu'un d'entre vousaurez la passiance pouvait avoir la patience de corriger ce texte s'il vous plaît... c'est important pour moi!!!
Merci!!!
Hello,
my name is Cécile, I'm 15 years old. I was born on ?th of may in ??.
I live at number ? street ? In ?.
I'm french, of Portuguese origin.
My telepone number is ??????????.
I measure 1 metre 58.
I have got a long straight chestnut hair and I have got brown eyes.
I haven't got a father.
My mother name Valérie, she is 40 years old, she's tall. Her hair is medium, chestnut lang, she is green eyes and she's very kind.
I have got one twin sister, she name Jessica, she is 15 years old, she's slim and she's 1m 55. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and she's got brown eyes. I like her because she's my sister but she's irritating. Her hobby is stores. She looks like me physically
I also have got two sisters they name Amélie and Marion.
Amélie is 14 years old, she's 1m 56. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and she's got green eyes. Her hobby is draw.
Marion is 8 years old. Her hair is straight, blond, lang and she's got brown eyes. Her hobby is draw.
To finish, I' ve got a brother, his name is Stan, he is 5 years old. He has got a short blond hair and her hobby is puzzle.I have two cats.
In my family I also have got: a grand father, his name is Gilbert, he is 73 years old and he is very kind. I have got a aunt and a uncle, they name are Martine and Joël. They are 43 Years old. and they are cool. So, I have two cousins (ther are two girls) Camille and Emilie. Camille is 22 Years old and Emilie is 24 Years old. I have 3 cousins ( 3 boys): Johan is 25 Years old Maxime is 18 Years old and Loïc is 15 Years old. I' m a good pupil and my favorite materials are German and Math. My Hobby are to go shopping. I like making many things, I am kind, curious etc. and later I would like to become has got lawyer Good bye!!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-04-2011 19:03
Message de mlle-cecile_dc posté le 14-04-2011 à 18:48:37 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai fait une présentation ( je n'ai donné ni mon adresse, ni numéro, les prénoms ou âges sont bien évidemment
Donc en vue de mon oral d'anglais j'ai vraiment pris du temps à faire une présentation à l'aide de mes cahiers et d'un dictionnaire sans me servir de traducteur en ligne!
J'aimerais donc si quelqu'un d'entre vous
Merci!!!
Hello,
my name is Cécile, I'm 15 years old. I was born on ?th of may in ??.
I live at number ? street ? In ?.
I'm french, of Portuguese origin.
My telepone number is ??????????.
I measure 1 metre 58.
I have got a long straight chestnut hair and I have got brown eyes.
I haven't got a father.
My mother name Valérie, she is 40 years old, she's tall. Her hair is medium, chestnut lang, she is green eyes and she's very kind.
I have got one twin sister, she name Jessica, she is 15 years old, she's slim and she's 1m 55. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and she's got brown eyes. I like her because she's my sister but she's irritating. Her hobby is stores. She looks like me physically
I also have got two sisters they name Amélie and Marion.
Amélie is 14 years old, she's 1m 56. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and she's got green eyes. Her hobby is draw.
Marion is 8 years old. Her hair is straight, blond, lang and she's got brown eyes. Her hobby is draw.
To finish, I' ve got a brother, his name is Stan, he is 5 years old. He has got a short blond hair and her hobby is puzzle.I have two cats.
In my family I also have got: a grand father, his name is Gilbert, he is 73 years old and he is very kind. I have got a aunt and a uncle, they name are Martine and Joël. They are 43 Years old. and they are cool. So, I have two cousins (ther are two girls) Camille and Emilie. Camille is 22 Years old and Emilie is 24 Years old. I have 3 cousins ( 3 boys): Johan is 25 Years old Maxime is 18 Years old and Loïc is 15 Years old. I' m a good pupil and my favorite materials are German and Math. My Hobby are to go shopping. I like making many things, I am kind, curious etc. and later I would like to become has got lawyer Good bye!!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-04-2011 19:03
Réponse: Oral anglais/présentation de may, postée le 15-04-2011 à 03:34:27 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je vais essayer de vous aider, mais il y avait beaucoup de phrases répétitives dans votre texte.
Hello,
my name is Cécile, I'm 15 years old. I was born on article défini +15th par exemple of may in ??.
I live at number ? street ? In ?.
I'm french, of Portuguese origin.
My telepone number is ??????????.
I measure/to be 1 metre 58.
I have got a long straight chestnut hair and (I have got) brown eyes.
I haven't got/had a father.
My mother... name/possessive case Valérie,Point she is 40 years old, she's tall. Her hair is medium, chestnut lang, she is green eyes and she's very kind.
I have got one twin sister, she/possessive case of she name to be Jessica, she is 15 years old, she's slim and she's 1m 55. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and (she's got brown eyes) her eyes is brown. I like her because she's my sister but she's irritating. Her hobby is stores/shopping?. She looks like me physically
I have got two other sisters (they name), Amélie and Marion.
Amélie is 14 years old, she's 1m 56. Her hair is straight, chestnut, lang and (she's got) green eyes. Her hobby is drawING.
Marion is 8 years old. Her hair is straight, blond, lang and she's got brown eyes/Si c'est la même détaille, essayer de remplacer par 'La même que...". Her hobby is also drawING.
To finish, (I' ve got a brother, his name)My youngest brother is Stan,point he is 5 years old. He has got a short blond hair and her hobby is puzzle. Moreover I have two cats.
On continuera après votre première correction..
Good night,
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