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Message de petite-tagada- posté le 27-10-2011 à 11:19:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai écrit une rédaction en anglais, cependant mon expression est fragile et c'est pourquoi j'ai souligné quelques expressions dont je n'étais pas sûre !
Pourriez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
One evening, Mickael whose his passion is music, expresses to his father his professional projects. They start talking.
' Dad, I made a big decision, I am completely going to devote to the music, I think of stopping the school. ' he said surely.
For a moment, his father stood open-mouthed. He didn't believe it.
' Are you serious Mickael? To stop the school is unthinkable! The father says surprised . Education enables you to have a diploma ' he exclaimed.
' I don't agree! We can succeed without diplomas! ' Mickael retorted.
' My son... you will have fewer chances to find a work without diplomas ! ' said the father trying to convince his son.
' But dad, there are many young graduates in the unemployment, aren't they ? ' he insisted.
' Hum... certainly, but realize the luck which you have to have an access to education, to acquire knowledge. Many young people would dream to be on your place ' told sincerely his father.
At this moment, Mickael became conscious of what his father was saying.
' You are maybe right ' he declared with a light smile.
Merci beaucoup!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2011 11:28
Message de petite-tagada- posté le 27-10-2011 à 11:19:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai écrit une rédaction en anglais, cependant mon expression est fragile et c'est pourquoi j'ai souligné quelques expressions dont je n'étais pas sûre !
Pourriez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
One evening, Mickael whose his passion is music, expresses to his father his professional projects. They start talking.
' Dad, I made a big decision, I am completely going to devote to the music, I think of stopping the school. ' he said surely.
For a moment, his father stood open-mouthed. He didn't believe it.
' Are you serious Mickael? To stop the school is unthinkable! The father says surprised . Education enables you to have a diploma ' he exclaimed.
' I don't agree! We can succeed without diplomas! ' Mickael retorted.
' My son... you will have fewer chances to find a work without diplomas ! ' said the father trying to convince his son.
' But dad, there are many young graduates in the unemployment, aren't they ? ' he insisted.
' Hum... certainly, but realize the luck which you have to have an access to education, to acquire knowledge. Many young people would dream to be on your place ' told sincerely his father.
At this moment, Mickael became conscious of what his father was saying.
' You are maybe right ' he declared with a light smile.
Merci beaucoup!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2011 11:28
Réponse: Correction/ Expression de alep, postée le 27-10-2011 à 11:41:45 (S | E)
Hello small tagada,
Just a few hints:
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Hoping this may help,
alep
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2011 11:47
Votre correction toute faite a été effacée car nous aidons la personne à se corriger, nous ne faisons pas le travail à sa place.
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