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Message de franek13 posté le 29-03-2012 à 09:43:03 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un petit texte à rendre en anglais, pouvez-vous corriger mes fautes et erreurs de syntaxte please?
Voici le texte :
The use of the telephone changed. Before, we appellions our friends to warn(prevent) of our delay. Now, we use(get) it to play, take photos and videos. But smartphones can be harnessed to help people in poorer countries do business and educate their children…
With the technological advances (overhangs), phones have a lot of potential to become the computing platform for people.
Few examples of the new utilization of phones :
- In the Democratic Republic of the Congo, phones are distributes to report incidents of children being drafted as soldiers.
- And in Kenya, phones are being turned into mini-ATM machines via Vodafone’s M-PESA program.
This program is typically run by women in rural areas to act as mediators between banks and the local community. But banks do not trust them and they will have a stack of paper records. A spoken version was creating to make things clearer for those who can’t read. With this program, it is also possible to photograph a written description or send a video of the business in action. Phones also allow farmers to share information about farming practices. The non-profit organization Almost All Questions Answered has created a network for farmers to communicate with experts via text message. But it’s only accessible to those who can read. Studies are led to replace the text by videos. But problem is the expense. Finally, a solution is to use Wi-Fi network to make it cheaper.
merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-03-2012 11:43
Pourquoi laisser des mots en français? bizarre....
Message de franek13 posté le 29-03-2012 à 09:43:03 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un petit texte à rendre en anglais, pouvez-vous corriger mes fautes et erreurs de syntaxte please?
Voici le texte :
The use of the telephone changed. Before, we appellions our friends to warn(prevent) of our delay. Now, we use(get) it to play, take photos and videos. But smartphones can be harnessed to help people in poorer countries do business and educate their children…
With the technological advances (overhangs), phones have a lot of potential to become the computing platform for people.
Few examples of the new utilization of phones :
- In the Democratic Republic of the Congo, phones are distributes to report incidents of children being drafted as soldiers.
- And in Kenya, phones are being turned into mini-ATM machines via Vodafone’s M-PESA program.
This program is typically run by women in rural areas to act as mediators between banks and the local community. But banks do not trust them and they will have a stack of paper records. A spoken version was creating to make things clearer for those who can’t read. With this program, it is also possible to photograph a written description or send a video of the business in action. Phones also allow farmers to share information about farming practices. The non-profit organization Almost All Questions Answered has created a network for farmers to communicate with experts via text message. But it’s only accessible to those who can read. Studies are led to replace the text by videos. But problem is the expense. Finally, a solution is to use Wi-Fi network to make it cheaper.
merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-03-2012 11:43
Pourquoi laisser des mots en français? bizarre....
Réponse: Correction/telephone de notrepere, postée le 29-03-2012 à 17:20:56 (S | E)
Bonjour
C'est parce que votre texte provient d'un traducteur en ligne. Reverso?
we appellions
Néanmoins, en général, votre texte marche. Plusieurs fautes de temps et vocabulaire.
The use of the telephone changed (temps). Before, we appellions our friends to warn(prevent)
of our delay. Now, we useWith the technological advances
A few examples of the new utilization of phones :
- In the Democratic Republic of the Congo, phones are distributes to report incidents of children being drafted as soldiers.
- And in Kenya, phones are being turned into mini-ATM machines via Vodafone’s M-PESA program.
This program is typically run by women in rural areas to act as mediators between banks and the local community. But banks do not trust them and they will have a stack of paper records. A spoken version was creating to make things clearer for those who can’t read. With this program, it is also possible to photograph a written description or send a video of the business in action. Phones also allow farmers to share information about farming practices. The non-profit organization "Almost All Questions Answered" has created a network for farmers to communicate with experts via text message. But it’s only accessible to those who can read. Studies are led to replace the text by videos. But the problem is the expense. Finally, a solution is to use a Wi-Fi network to make it cheaper.
Bon, vous n’apprendrez rien si vous utilisez un traducteur en ligne. (Shortcuts only take you so far in life.)
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