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Message de amande224 posté le 19-10-2012 à 10:01:19 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un exposé oral à faire pour la semaine prochaine et il faut que j'explique ce qu'on a fait pendant le cours précédent. Je compte apprendre ce texte par cœur parce qu'à vrai dire je ne suis pas très douée en anglais ...Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plaît ?
Merci d'avance.
On the last leason, we poke about the idea of progress. In first, we had a brainstorming about the word progress, then we said how Steve Jobs has contributed to progress. Afterwards, the people of the class said what is the progress for them. At the end we wondered if we could be to frighten by the progress.
First, with the brainstorming, we used words as technology, science, communication, to uprove or still school, education, changes and a lot of others words.
Then we answered the question : In what way has Steve Jobs contribued to progress ?
We think that he improved technology, moreover new technology is becoming very personal. Steve Jobs changes habits and our way of life for example with creation of a lot of applications in a small phone ; now we can read easier with an Ipad, listen to music everywhere and the communication is immediate and fast.
For people of class, there are discovery and events have made mankind progress for various reasons. For example, the discovery of vaccines helps to cure diseases, the internet is important for data and communication, the fire permits to produce light and heat. Obama president is a progress too because he is the first president of the United-States.
As a conclusion, the progress is a belief that the world can become better in terms of art, science, technology, liberty and quality of life. Progress implies changes from old traditions to a new way of life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-10-2012 17:31
Message de amande224 posté le 19-10-2012 à 10:01:19 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un exposé oral à faire pour la semaine prochaine et il faut que j'explique ce qu'on a fait pendant le cours précédent. Je compte apprendre ce texte par cœur parce qu'à vrai dire je ne suis pas très douée en anglais ...Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plaît ?
Merci d'avance.
On the last leason, we poke about the idea of progress. In first, we had a brainstorming about the word progress, then we said how Steve Jobs has contributed to progress. Afterwards, the people of the class said what is the progress for them. At the end we wondered if we could be to frighten by the progress.
First, with the brainstorming, we used words as technology, science, communication, to uprove or still school, education, changes and a lot of others words.
Then we answered the question : In what way has Steve Jobs contribued to progress ?
We think that he improved technology, moreover new technology is becoming very personal. Steve Jobs changes habits and our way of life for example with creation of a lot of applications in a small phone ; now we can read easier with an Ipad, listen to music everywhere and the communication is immediate and fast.
For people of class, there are discovery and events have made mankind progress for various reasons. For example, the discovery of vaccines helps to cure diseases, the internet is important for data and communication, the fire permits to produce light and heat. Obama president is a progress too because he is the first president of the United-States.
As a conclusion, the progress is a belief that the world can become better in terms of art, science, technology, liberty and quality of life. Progress implies changes from old traditions to a new way of life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-10-2012 17:31
Réponse: Expression orale/aide de lucile83, postée le 19-10-2012 à 17:46:28 (S | E)
Hello,
Avez-vous réfléchi avant d'écrire votre texte? je lis ceci:
Obama president is a progress too because he is the first president of the United-States.
Mis à part le fait que votre texte est très bizarre..usage du traducteur? ...la plupart des phrases n'ont aucun sens.
Merci de revoir tout ça.
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