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Bonjour à tous,
j'ai fait une dissertation (de 300 mots maximum) sur le sujet suivant :
To what extent can you say that everybody is a hero ?
Ce serait gentil si vous pouviez m'indiquer mes erreurs s'il vous plait.
Merci pour vos réponses.
The word 'hero' is very commonly used for a long time. Today, the diference between a hero and a normal person is very board. It is generally believed that a hero is someone supernatural and fantasy, but most of the time, a hero is somebody who does something exceptional and who is enough brave and integrate to face some hardships. To what extent can you say that everybody is a hero ?
Firstly, everybody would like to be a hero one day, and it is a case. There are exceptional people who save lives ( such as doctors, organ transplant donation..), who survived terrible accident like plane crash, people with nonstandart talent (that is to say celebrities, or sportmen). Likewise, many political men spend their times to try to improve the life of its counrty. And if we stay alive today, is thanks people who have saved their country during the war, and people who have dedicated their lives for others..
Everyone has a hero, it can be a normal person (as I have already mentioned) but sometimes, it can be supernatural or imagined. Some people define a hero as a demigod. There are surperheros, found in hundreds of novels, and comics. These are most often charismatic hero, with strong values, such as courage, kindness, and humanity. They are found mostly in adventure novels, where the life of people depends only of him.
In conclusion, everybody is able to become a hero one day, when somedody do something excpetional or with gifts that nature was given us. We all have in us values to defend who, one day, define who we are and make us a hero. They don't need super power to be like it. We all need a hero (imaginary or not) take example on him and try to become better.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-10-2012 20:51
Réponse: Correction/Dissertation hero de ariette, postée le 22-10-2012 à 20:37:25 (S | E)
The word 'hero' is temps very commonly used for a long time. Today, the difference between a hero and a normal person is very board. It is generally believed that a hero is supernatural and fantasy, but most of the time, a hero is somebody who does something exceptional and who is enough brave and integrate to face some hardships. To what extent can you say that everybody is a hero?
Firstly, everybody would like to be a hero one day, and this is a case in point. There are exceptional people who save lives (such as doctors, organ transplant donation..), who survived terrible accident like plane crash, people with nonstandard talent (that is to say celebrities, or sportsmen). Likewise, many political men spend their time to try to improve the life of its country. And if we stay alive today, it is thanks to people who have saved their country during the war, and people who have dedicated their lives for others..
Everyone has a hero, it can be a normal person (as I have already mentioned) but sometimes, it can be supernatural or imagined. Some people define a hero as a demigod. There are superheroes, found in hundreds of novels, and comics. These are most often charismatic hero, with strong values, such as courage, kindness, and humanity. They are found mostly in adventure novels, where the life of people depends on him.
In conclusion, everybody is able to become a hero one day, when somebody do something exceptional or with gifts that nature was given us. We all have in us values to defend who, one day, define who we are and make us a hero. They don't need super power to be like it ?. We all need a hero (imaginary or not)to take example on him and try to become better
Réponse: Correction/Dissertation hero de leamichon10, postée le 23-10-2012 à 17:34:57 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup. J'ai essayé de corriger mes erreurs et j'ai repris quelques phrases : (je mets la correction de mes erreurs en vert et mes nouvelles phrases en bleu)
The word 'hero' was very commonly used for a long time. Today, the diference between a hero and a normal person is very vague. It is generally believed that a hero is someone famous, but most of the time, a hero is somebody who doesn't know and who does something expetional with bravure. To what extent can you say that everybody is a hero ?
Firstly, everybody would like to be a hero one day, and it is a case. There are exceptional people who save lives ( such as doctors, organ transplant donation..), who survived terrible accident like plane crash or who passed knowledge, that is to say teachers. Likewise, many political men spend their times to try to improve the life of his counrty. And if we stay alive today, is thanks people who have saved their country during the war, and people who have dedicated their lives for others.. On the whole, these people aren't know but they accomplished some exploits out of this world.
Nevertheless, some people are considered heroes whereas they bring nothing to life. These people are know to everyone, thanks to television, or newspaper. Most of the time, they are actors (for instance Will Smith or Johny Depp), singers (like Lady Gaga or Rihanna), sportmen (such as Ribery or Zidane) or other. You can follow their personal lives thanks to specialized magazines in the life of 'stars'. They received huges sums of money compared to a normal person.
In conclusion, everybody is able to become a hero one day. Unfortunately, true heroes aren't know whereas wrong heroes is know of everybody. But we all have in us values to defend which, one day, define who we are and make us a hero. We all need a hero (imaginary or not) take example on him and try to become better.
Réponse: Correction/Dissertation hero de ariette, postée le 23-10-2012 à 18:33:57 (S | E)
The word 'hero' was present perfect cf for a long time very commonly used for a long time. Today, the difference between a hero and a normal person is very vague. It is generally believed that a hero is someone famous, but most of the time, a hero is somebody who doesn't know and who does something exceptional with bravure. To what extent can you say that everybody is a hero ?
Firstly, everybody would like to be a hero one day, and it is a case ?. There are exceptional people who save lives (such as doctors, organ transplant donation..), who survived terrible accident like plane crash or who passed knowledge, that is to say teachers. Likewise, many political men spend their time to try +ing to improve the life of his pl counrty. And if we stay alive today,sj is thanks to people who have saved their country during the war, and people who have dedicated their lives for others.. On the whole, these people aren't know but they tps accomplished some exploits out of this world.
Nevertheless, some people are considered heroes whereas they bring nothing to life. These people are known to everyone, thanks to television, or newspaper. Most of the time, they are actors (for instance Will Smith or Johnny Depp), singers (like Lady Gaga or Rihanna), sportmen (such as Ribery or Zidane) or other. You can follow their personal lives thanks to specialized magazines in the life of 'stars'. They received huges adj inv sums of money compared to a normal person.
In conclusion, everybody is able to become a hero one day. Unfortunately, true heroes aren't known whereas wrong heroes is know of everybody. But we all have in us values to defend which, one day, define who we are and make us a hero. We all need a hero (imaginary or not) to take example on him and try to become better.
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